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Start:......okay..
Middle: yes, YES OH CELESTIA, YES
End: d'awwww
This is my reaction:
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Sorry to say this, but even if the content is more or less to my tastes the writing was far from perfect, not to slay plainly bad. Spelling errors everywhere. I highly suggest you get a pre-reader to avoid this in future stories.
The format made it hard to read, it was basically a wall of bloody text throghout the middle.
So, tl;dr: Fix the spelling and grammer, get a good formatting going, and we will talk about likeing this. In it's current state I will leave it unrated, as it simpley is sub-par.
Spelling and grammar errors everywhere, and big blocks of text make it bloody difficult to read. Sorry to be so negative, but it ruined the story and made it pretty much unreadable for me.
281829 Ha ha! you Daleks may be supreme in everything, except, o i don't know SONIC SCREWDRIVER! *large explosion*
Also, i fixed the "wall of text" so ones Dalek can read it.
281177
Thank you, at least some people like it. 
285098 Thank you. Ya, its not the best, but it must be good for something, right?!
If you want to make the story more mature, elaborate on the physical part. If you want to make the story more intense, make flutters react with more conviction and less forgiveness.