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SuperPinkBrony12


I'm a brony and a Pinkie Pie fan but I like all of the mane six, as well as Spike. I hope to provide some entertaining and interesting fanfics for the Brony community.

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The Cutie Mark Crusaders have always wondered why no one ever seems to do anything about Diamond Tiara's behavior. It's as if she's invisible or something.

But the CMC are about to learn that the real reason is something they could never have imagined. Diamond Tiara has been dead for a while. But that can only mean one thing, Diamond Tiara is a ghost.

Now the three blank flanks must find out why Diamond Tiara is haunting Ponyville and why she has not left the land of the living. And they'd better be fast, if they can't find a reason soon Diamond Tiara will remain a ghost forever!

Cover image courtesy of ShootingRainbowStar13.

(Tagged Alternative Universe because obviously Diamond Tiara will still be alive and kicking in Season 4.)

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 50 )

before i read this i have to ask this, will infile her having a fucked up pass that so can't forgive her self for being that way than ended up being all piss all the time?

Looks interesting, and I approve of any story in which Diamond Tiara is dead.

Needs proofread and editing, but not terribly so.

Looking forward to seeing where this goes.

3321378 Holy hell do you even read what you type before you press Add Comment? :pinkiegasp:

3321390 hey it's the internet i can say anything my mind let me and the only thing i get for it is a computer vuris beside this is the usa and a love my freedom :derpytongue2:

3321413 Yes, you do have that freedom. But if you say what you want to say in a way that is idiotic and displays a lack of intelligence, others will exercise their right to mock you.

But enough of that, we're polluting the comments thread for a story that deserves REAL comments.

3321378 No offense but I can't understand what you posted there. In any case no I don't think I'm going down that route.

I like to see how this story goes can't wait for the next chapter :twilightsmile:

3321546 Well I'll try to pump out the next one sometime this weekend. College classes are starting to cut into what free time isn't taken by my part time job.

3321562 Go ahead take your time i understand :scootangel:

This story is amAzing! The suspense..... :raritydespair:

Interesting concept, you caught my attention :raritywink:
One thing about punctuation: if there's a dialogue tag, the dialogue before it should end with a coma, so:

"I swear I've had it up to here with Diamond Tiara." Apple Bloom said

should be:

"I swear I've had it up to here with Diamond Tiara," Apple Bloom said

I like this story! It's an interesting idea, I definitely want to keep reading! I have one small criticism, though- at times the CMC seem to speak in a way that strikes me as a little too mature for their ages. This line in particular:
"To be honest I'm feeling rather conflicted about how to deal with her."
This just doesn't feel to me like something Scootaloo would say. Still, though, as I said, I really like this! Keep up the good work! :twilightsmile:

I'll explain next chapter why this information went unnoticed.

...Discord?

3341604
...:rainbowlaugh:
Discord's ALWAYS at the heart of the problem!

3341615 Well you'll just have to wait and see.

3341616
:fluttershysad: please tell? Or you're going to make Futtershy :fluttercry:

3341629 I could tell you in PM to avoid spoilers if that'll make you happy.

3341646
:pinkiegasp:TELLMETELLMETELLMETELLMETELLMETELLMETELLMETELLMETELLME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This isn't starting too bad at all. :unsuresweetie:

Time Turner? Great. We have a Doctor Who crossover on our hooves. :pinkiesick:

JK, I like Doctor Who.

This chapter needs massive editing. Also, there is a distinct lack of credibility to the "investigation" in this chapter. Instead of the whole "going to city hall" thing, which...no, just no...perhaps simply have them search the newspapers for obituaries on their own? I mean, if it's IN THE PAPER, there's no need for them to visit city hall, and thereby no need for the awkward, credibility-stretching, and frankly badly-written city hall scene.

Granted, the "how Diamond Tiara died" thing probably isn't and shouldn't be the central focus of the overall story (which I'm still very much interested in), but...this chapter really does need a complete overhaul.

3342004 As a matter of fact, I've been thinking about it for the past...however long it's been since I commented.

The most logical thing for the CMC to do is find the gravedigger or undertaker and ask when Diamond Tiara was buried, then go to the library and look through the newspaper archives to see what they can find out. It's the same general idea, except played out more logically.

3342015 I incorporated your idea into the chapter. Hope that's an improvement.

3342124 Better. It still leaves the whole incongruous Town Hall scene which doesn't make sense, mind. But then, it might not occur to three fillies that the town paper prints obituaries, so I suppose we can let that one slide.

3341819
Time Turner is an actual background character, you know. And so far, this story seems to be treating him that way.

3342903 Yup. And if you need any more evidence look at the tags and notice that "Crossover" is not one of them.

Also note how I did not call him Doctor Whooves.

For the record from what little I've seen I think Doctor Who is a good show. I just haven't had the time to really get into it yet because of how long the episodes are.

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Actually, I think his name was officially changed to Doctor Hooves. :trollestia:

Really looking forward to see where you are going with this.

Talk about weird ghost rules.

3360553 Not sure if compliment or insult. :applejackunsure:

3360554
Neither. Just a comment.
There is no exact rule set for ghost behavior, so everyone can come up with their own when writing. This is the strangest set I've seen, but good or bad has everything to do with execution.

Very interesting indeed... :moustache:

Well this is a strange story. Enjoyable, but strange.

Ponyville Books and Branches Library.

The library's name is the Golden Oak Library. :facehoof:

shelfs

shelves :facehoof:

And after this chapter, I'm officially no longer tracking this story. This chapter stretched suspension of disbelief to the breaking point then snapped it. I wish you luck with the rest of the story, and it's sad to see that such a promising premise has been handled in such a poor manner.

Well this has promise. Anxious for quite the climax. :scootangel:

Nice story i give it a good 7/10 :pinkiehappy:

Dunno why, but I imagined CMC busting ghosts Felix Castor style :twilightsmile:

That was a nice story. Too bad it had to end. :yay:

Comment posted by ServingSpoon deleted Nov 25th, 2013

"And because of that Diamond Tiara came back." Scootaloo said "But now we can finally be rid of her, and life can go back to normal."

wow.. seriously Scoots? A little tact when dealing with a grieving father would be appreciated, you little shit.:facehoof:

I liked this, even though you made me cry.:raritydespair:

REST IN PEACE Diamond Dazzle Tiara. Ponyville won't be the same without you.:applecry:

Hmm. sigh. I hate to say this but this story gave not much feeling. It felt a bit rushed, and somehow the characters looked a bit bland. You could have done more with this premise. It isn´t bad but not as good as it could have been. I can only give 4.5 of 10 points for it. Maybe more details and more emotions could fix it.

I´m going to read your other stories. I´m curious what you have written :twilightsmile:

How did the CMC not know about this? Wouldn't they know if Diamond was sick, and buried two weeks ago? Ponies talking about it? They seem just fine. :duck:

I finally got to read this after along long, long time of it being in my read later I love it

"It says here that the deadline for someone to find out why a ghost is around is midnight, exactly 2 weeks from the date of their death. And tonight it will be excatly two weeks since Diamond Tiara died."

well DUH! Diamond herself said that!:facehoof:

This was an interesting little read.
I'd love to see a sequel where they help Silver Spoon, as well as some more ghosts.

Aw...I wanted it to be Silver Spoon! The text never said anything about the person needing to KNOW that the ghost was dead after all..

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