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Hey guys! I write sadfics and sadfic accessories! Oh, and I also do comedy things. Yeah. Feel free to check out my stuff! And I hope you enjoy whichever story of mine you happen to be on! ^^


Octavia Four-Strings Melody was a mare with many tastes for the finer things in life.

Fine wine, red of course.
Fine music, given that she plays it on her cello.
Fine parties, just like anypony born into a wealthy and noble family.
And like any other mare, a taste for fine stallions as well.

But when that taste goes awry, can Octavia find the stallion sent after her by Celestia herself, or will she be caught and burned alive just like the rest of her kind?

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:moustache:please continue this is good:eeyup:

3347397 Sorry, I forgot to mark it completed... :facehoof:

3347416:twilightoops:oh i thought there would be more..........all well great story:eeyup::twilightsmile::pinkiehappy::heart::heart:

Its a shame that such is a single shot, its really something else to have a great series here.. it really is.

This was brilliant. You've presented a very interesting characterization of Octavia here, one that I very much enjoy.

looking forwards to your next idea with great anticipation.:pinkiesmile::yay:

Another great fic. Like this one a lot. Vampires, ponies, what more could you ask for. Keep it up Chaotic, would like to continue reading your fics with gusto!

This was... okay, but I didn't really care about any of the characters involved. It just didn't grab me. I never had any real reason to care about Octavia or the hunter, so the impact of their death is pretty nonexistent to me.

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I'd definitely like to see another fic set in this universe.

3380760 I was actually considering doing another one like this. :twilightsmile:

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The story does admittedly feel a little rushed. Like, there's definite room for expansion of things like setting to improve tension. But your Octavia is well characterized, and just the brief sense of what this world is like was pretty intriguing. :)

I hate to say this, but despite being a horror fic, the story made me laugh more than once. Vamponies? That cracked me up good and I thank you for it, although I must say that reading about the stallion whose spine got snapped wiped the smile of my face quickly enough.

The story had a lot of elements that I liked, the suggestive phrases being on the top three of the list, but you seemed to rush things a lot. Take the "high and noble" thing that you had going - it is a good idea and one that could be developed further, but you were very blunt with it. Narrative devices like that should be used more sparingly, in my opinion. They ought to be hinted at, hid between the lines, not shoved down the readers throat. I felt like you resorted to this quite often, escpecially with the suggestive lines - treat these like spices, not like ketchup.

The ending was a bit anticlimactic with both the main charachters just dying like they were supposed to. Also, why was Celestia in the story? Seemed like you just wanted her in the there somewhere, so she made a quick tour and was then forgotten.

And still, despite these little dents, it can't be denied that depicting Octavia as a vampony (hahhahaha) was an innovative move, one that I certainly couldn't have come up with. And like I said, the devices were there, the content was there. All you need to do is let them grow. Nurse them with blood and they will be your wings.

The maid could take care of it anyway, Octavia is sure the sight of blood wasn't too uncommon on her bedding, though the poor old mare had believed it to be from very different reasons than they actually were. After all, she did bring a different good-looking stallion home every week or so.

I think you'll find that's not how that works.

I wasn't caught by that story.
Vampires are my least favourite horror creatures and even when I liked it how brutal Octavia acted at the beginning, when she killed this musician pony, or, more exactly, after she killed it, this story was not able to fascinate me much with that setting.
On a more objective note, this story doesn't read like a horror story.
It's more a story of a ruthless and brutal killer and Octavia seems like an animal on the hunt for it's prey, but it doesn't deliver the vampony, that Octavia is, as a paranormal, scary and frightening creature.
I think vampires are very overused today, but that doesn't mean that they could not be portrayed frightening and disturbing in a twisted, surrealistic way, that makes you aware of it again, that vampires are paranormal and undead creatures, that are not only strange and mysterious, but also scary as hell.
You could have done much more to make a horror story out of this.
Beside that, that Octavia seems to begin to see herself as a monster, almost regretting what she had done when facing the death, just because a vampony hunter called her "A monster" is a bit forced, as she never shows any signs of it, that she doubts it that it is right what she does or that she doesn't like that deep inside of her.
Beside that, it's a good story in general, but, as I said, it isn't delivering itself as a horror story.


I think you'll find that's not how that works.

I think you're underestimating the kinky things bored royalty might indulge in.

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Hey, did you know this exists?

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