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Tealove


singer, wannabe biker babe, voice actress, writer, intelligent, dancer, recovering self-abuser, cat lover, christian, obsessive, shy, pony fan, chocolate lover, coffee drinker

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Pinkie Pie loves making new friends and hates saying goodbye to them. That was why she told Braeburn they should be penpals! This is a glimps into what might have happened if a corespondance had been kept up between them. Twp crazy ponies and a bunch of letters. What's the worst that could happen?

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Comments ( 51 )

I've never even conceived of this ship before, so I was interested to see how it could be executed - even though the premise of telling a story through correspondence is trite and a bit cliche, I thought it could be fun to read if it was done well. Unfortunately, that didn't seem to be the case here - the letters were incredibly short, which is not often the case when exchanging hand (or hoof) written post, and the pacing of the story was incredibly accelerated. Things jumped into marriage with almost no precursory establishment not even half way through the story, and it was downhill from there.

That said, there weren't any glaring grammatical errors or flaws in syntax, but the execution of the story's premise needed some work.

Shame on you for getting my hopes up.

I was getting to the end, and my line of thought was basically, "Ah, what a sweet stor... damn." Good job.

275741 This is actually one of my new favorite ships, truth be told. I do thank you for your feedback. For the most part tit was helpful. It was the last comment that made you just sound snotty.

.276170 Aw. :heart: Thank you.

...Wow.

This entire concept is gold. You have the standard--but still solid--falling in love through letters thing, which I'm a total sap for, and even though I thought sometimes they were a bit dry, I enjoyed the letters. But THEN you branched out with it and kept the letters going after they got together until the end of the story. I liked that idea, but it needs some work. There's just too few letters. I get the sense you wanted to give a few snapshots of their lives, giving us a good picture of what their lives are like, but jumping from a few short letters after they get together to pregnancy and death left something to be desired, and I wasn't fan of that ending. It wasn't so much the sad part that bothered me, but it was really cliche.

Overall, it's a nice story. It's marred with some rushing towards the end as well as the ending itself, but I found myself enjoying it immensely for its creative qualities.

276308 I completely hear what you are saying. I have this horrible habit of rushing when I get to the ends of things and I know that about myself. Yet it's something I keep doing. But I'm working on it. Seems like the general consensus is that more letters of length and substance are wanted. This is good to know. Thank you!

I love this ship. The end made me all depressed n stuff.

I've seen Braeburn & Pinkie Pie once before (Luna the Matchmaker. you can find it on deviantart. the author says he MIGHT submit it to here when he's finished)

This was AMAZING! Hope you write more like this.

I've never heard of this shipping before!
This is about as crazy as OATMEAL!

did..did pinkie DIE!
:pinkiegasp: :fluttercry:

Brilliant... I think you should put breaks inbetween letters, just to cut down on confusion. Thanks for writing about one of my favorite ships.

This should have the Tragedy tag on it as well, I believe. So that people who want to read a nice happy story won't be shocked so much by this one that they start screaming and sending nasty notes to you.

276575

sniff* Yes... :fluttercry::raritycry:

How do I favorite this?

PINKIE IS DEAD!!! :fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry: How do you favorite stuff?!?!?

So, i was listening to my iPod and then a sad song came up as the last letter started and i was like, "Why am i listening to this, i should be listening to something happy," and then i got to the last three lines of the first paragraph of it and i was like,"... nevermind... " must go to Pound Cake Party Hard gif to end crying

Oh lord...this made me tear up so much. It was beautiful from beginning to end. I was curious as to how you were going to transition between the letter format and their interactions with each other, but the way you handled it was too awesome. I especially like the little bit about the bachelor party. xP But yeah...poor Braeburn. T.T I got sooooo choked up. It felt like my heart got kidney punched, but in a good way, if that makes any sense.

Hope to see more from you in the future.:yay:

Well done, man. Well done.

>>Varocity
>>The Nightmare
Hit the star to the left of the fic title or chapter title. Once it turns yellow, you added it as a favorite.

How do I favorite this?! :applecry::fluttercry::raritycry::raritydespair::fluttercry::fluttercry::fluttercry:

277183 click the black and grey star on the left side of the story title. It will color yellow.

Great story. Some parts did seem rushed, but I don't expect Pinkie to write an essay on why Braeburn should get milk!

Funny, touching, sweet, and also devastating. You inspire me, m'lady.

Seriously, I was smiling the entire way through until the very last passage. Here, I proceeded to audibly gasp, slam my fist down onto the desk, and cry many manly tears. So ultimately, what you have here is a bloody brilliant tale, spun in a unique way that has been executed perfectly.

I would give you stars if I had any. But alas, we will have to settle for a "thumbs-up" and a favourite, won't we?

Cheers!

>> Tealove

"Tit be helpful."

Best typo since the last best typo.

*Doubles over in pain*
HUHhhhhhhh...
*Barfs rainbow*
NyanNyanNyanNyanNyan:rainbowhuh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild::rainbowderp::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowhuh::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild:

Oh my gosh, you guys! I cannot even express how thankful I am for the comments and also the pointers. I'll definitely go in and work on the things pointed out and I'll add the extra tag. To everyone I made cry? *bows* Thank you. I have done my job as a writer.

I love you all!

279810 *falls over laughing* Whoopsie!

And now I have done my job as a comedian. :ajsmug:

276282
That last line was meant as a catch-all letting you know that I was hoping the story would be at well done execution of the intended premise, and that I was personally disappointed when it didn't deliver in the manner that I expected. It wasn't intended as any kind of 'elitism', and I don't see how being disappointed in something conveys any type of 'heightened' level of judgement, it just communicates that a reader or consumer of a piece of media feels they've been let down by the artist. Even more than that, it was a comment meant as a closing remark almost entirely in jest.

Just posting clarification because apparently there are people in tithers about the nature of that sentiment - it wasn't meant to be derogatory or pedantic, just that I was hoping to fall in love with this story based on the premise you conceived, but didn't find it up to my expectations.

awwwwe, such a great story:ajsmug: the sad ending was a nice touch :fluttercry:

Fantastic story with a unique and great pairing, loved every minute of it.
I can't stop crying, thanks for that

276575. Yes. :fluttershbad: :fluttercry: THIS STORY MADE ME CRY!!!! This was me at first... :D. Then this D':

Dat ending...

i love breaburn x pinkie, and you are by far the person who has expressed it the most:rainbowkiss: :pinkiesad2:

524634 YAY! Thank you for saying that. Totally makes my day. :pinkiesmile:

I was about to go to sleep, and I lurked your page, thought: this seems nice, let's read a nice story before going to bed. Everything was peaches and cream, and then, this line: "She will grow up knowing how special her mama was".
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I lost it, this was so sad, I cried hard :fluttershbad::fluttercry: . Awesome story nonetheless, loved the concept of the letters :pinkiesmile: And Braeburn/Pinkie FTW

537365 Oh my goodness! I'm glad it touched you but sad that you cried so much, and right before bed!

539262

Don't worry, I guess it was my fault for not noticing the tragedy tag, not that avoid those stories, just that I wasn't expecting that :twilightsmile:

At first I was all "Awww, how sweet!"
In the middle there was a chuckle
The at the end I had only one thought: YOU BASTARD!:twilightangry2:

Oh my god, I :heart: you and your writing.

I was reading, and I was all like :unsuresweetie:.

But then I was all :rainbowkiss: and then I was all :pinkiehappy:.

But then you made me all :pinkiegasp:, and now I'm all :raritycry::raritydespair::fluttercry::applecry:

I-I'm so sad now. You-you killed her.

I loved it!

574460 Reading that comment was like listening to Flounder from The Little Mermaid talk. Thank you so so much! Especially for saying you like my writing. That's extra glee worthy.

damn that was a good story.

"good story so far, don't know why it had tragedy as a genre"
-reads end-
"sush a tradgedy :fluttercry:"

I need a pony to cry on :raritycry:

Did not expect that ending. :fluttercry://sobs//:raritycry:

Feels, man. Just so many feels. :fluttercry: Was not expecting the ending. Really well done story.

565467
Me too. Wait. How did she die?:pinkiegasp::fluttercry::raritycry::twilightangry2::ajsleepy::rainbowderp:

6999889 I'm guessing she died giving birth.

I've never even heard of this ship before, but this was really well written!! But...WHY DID YOU HAVE TO ADD THE LAST LETTER?! WHY DID YOU DO THIS TO US?!? :fluttercry:

Authors are all sadists...(not that I'm one to talk)

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