Hello, I suck at bios but here we go! I like to type and just want to spend my free time making stories here and there, and that is about it for the moment! Maybe more later. :D
A joke, a mishap, a kiss. To anypony else it would be just that, but for Bonbon it is the catalyst for the worse thing ever. It was a joke, she couldn't possibly feel that way towards her best friend, right? One little peck couldn't ruin their friendship, right? Besides, Bonbon and Lyra will always be friends and nothing more....right?
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Lot of capitalization errors with the names of the various characters, but the story is decent. Even if I don't picture RD and Fluttershy as match-maker. At all.
A good premise and beginning, even if Dash and Fluttershy's "plan" was extremely predictable. I'd recommend finding an editor to help clean everything up. (grammar, capitalization, 'n such)
Get an edditer and this would be a lot better. It's okay now, but it would be pretty good with some small touch ups.
3280874 Roger that, I will get right on fixing those errors!
Well well well...
Mephilez...
Honestly, i never was a fan of the whole Lyra-BonBon thing. Never did follow that overnight shipping-spree.
On another note, you write extremely well. You have passed my test, Mephilez. Faved and Liked.
Hmmm... This looks intresting!! I'll make sure i read this later!!
It's a good story
. There were a few errors, and some of the dialouge between Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash seemed strange. I dunno, maybe that's just me.
Long story short, good story
Well I like it a lot. Lyra is one of my favorite background ponies and she is just slightly under Derby as my favorites go. I found the teasing in the beginning kind of weird. I automatically assume that the "feeling is mutual" cliche in these type of stories. What I mean if she likes Bon Bon and Lyra is teasing wouldn't she be nervous about the whole thing and possibly be blushing too. Or is it the kind of thing she was so assured of her feelings being one way that she was not embarrassed herself? I think I am making it to complicated though, and just take it for what is in the story.
the plural for pegasus is pegasi not pegasus's
3285345 Yeah Lyra doesn't expect Bonbon to share her feelings whatsoever when she is teasing, don't worry! I over think stuff too
3288526 Aw, fixing that right away!
I enjoyed this.
3288861 Both forms are acceptable.
I love this. Such a great story.