Losing my mind, and proud of it!
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Rainbow Dash and Twilight thought it was a good idea to clone them both at the same time, with a new-found clone spell. But when the cloning goes awry, a new character has to cope with the knowledge of being magic made, and to fit in to her new world.
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i like it and i got a question when will more chapters for this story come out
3684882 More soon, my good friend.
This was supposed to be a joke, but i actually like how it came out.
3684887 ok and why was this supposed to be a joke and yeah
3684890 To me, this was just something i came out with... i thought that nobody would seriously think on how much free time i really have.
3684892 ok and are you glad that people like me likes this story
I like it and the concept bro it's good. But try and break a thousand words each chapter. Once you start passing it with out noticing you won't have worry about people, like me, that complain about short short chapters and can't help but feel the need to nag the writer. But like I said this is cool.
3684904 Yes.
3685043 Thank you so much for responding.
3685044 ok
and i sent you a private message when you were not on
for a story who was supposed to be a joke , i like how this one start
i can't wait to see how MagicFeather will react to Rarity
Shouldn't MagicFeather remember being both Twilight and Rainbow?
3685143 MagicFeather is just a little foal. She was just created out of magic. Sure, she knows a lot about being them both, but she has no knowledge of anything else.
3685281 Fair enough
3685281 why no reply to my comment that i sent you and are you mad at me and annoyed with me i am so sorry if you are
i hope you can forgive me
3685325 Oh no! I'm not mad at you!
I just have an RP going.
3685399 ok and can you reply to my private messages i sent you
while i love the idea. it's interesting . the writing is...not good ;.; it's too fast, lacks way too many details, theres not much to it with the way it's written and some of the sentances have errors and some seem to run together.
3685667 I'm sorry... i'm not very good at this "writing" stuff.
I find it rather difficult to type with paws.
3688194 as do i with an acctual blind eye. i went blind in my right eye 3 months ago. i don't dabble in writing because i suck at it. my major is art
3688233 Awww...
that's just messed up. But yay on the Art!
Twilight has no cutie mark in your pic. Just sayin'.
3688436 I know.
I have one question for you author, CONTINUE NOW?
3690577 Um... wait until I have time, sir. I do have a job, and a very busy life.
I shall try to make time for this little story you all love so very much.
Oh yea your life... lol that diserves a facehoof!
3694686 Have fun!
I believe what you require is a good editor. The premise of the story is very good, but the writing lacks extensive detail. I'll upvote it. I'd be interested to see your style progress and what you can do with the story. So I shall be watching rather closely lol
I think trollestia sliped a page into a book while twilight was asleep
Okay.
Well, congratulations for the being first story added to this group
So, my thoughts are:
The sentences run together (as others have mentioned). Its a little too fast - it's good at the start with establishing the scene and atmosphere of a bright, sunny day, but the set-up ends too quickly. A few grammar errors and format issues. One thing you could do is go to the end of each sentence and hit the "enter" key. This should put some space between sentences. Won't make it perfect, but it should be a good start.
. . . I was gonna say that Magic Feather has too strong a grasp of the world around for somepony who was just born, but then I remembered she started as a clone, so despite the pseudo Twi-Dash parent thing, she's technically not an actual baby.
3947272 I'm not a good writer.
3948024
But it's okay.
We can fix it.
3948045
Such a short chapter? Oh well. Beggers can't be choosers and its good that both the story and author are back.
5302264 indeed
sorry glitch in the systems
5302264 I'm sorry. I'm working on it.... but I'm glad that you are glad.
well its a good story so far
5318359
That is very good to hear!
5318367 your welcome
A TwiDash I see....... it lacks proper detail.
I cringed when I saw the extremely bad name that you probably thought of from the top of your head.. Magicfeather? Wtf.
5554561 Well, whoever comes up with a better name in the comments i'll take it.
5554561
hey I like that name
5740377 the name was lazily slapped together
5742899
do you forget what show this is from? MLP does stuff like this all the time
5742930 not like this. They have decent names. The author literally picked something about twilights horn and rainbow dashs wing.
5742946
Trust me I've seen worse