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Pootie D. Trillist


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Two years ago I wrote this and posted it on Deviant Art. The feedback I received was so good that it pretty much became the reason I began writing pony fiction on my spare time. It was not even that good, but from the one fic i received almost 500 views, 11 favorites, and 15 watchers. This is my attempt to revamp this shipping.

In an alternate universe of hardship and despair, the tyrannical despony Celestia has reigned for almost eleven hundred years. Her sister Luna, an upstart who had almost succeed once in overthrowing her rule a thousand years prior, had just returned from her forced exile to rule as a figurehead by Celestia's side.
Even in the midst of the ciaos and confusion, ponies had still managed to live normal, productive lives. Pinkie Pie was still a party planner, Rarity still designed clothes, Rainbow Dash still cleared the clouds, and Flutter Shy still watched the animals. Twilight Sparkle still lived with her friends in Ponyville, but the elements of harmony were never used.
Now an ordinary farm pony has met the defunct Princess of the Night, and a lasting love is born. From this forbidden love affair, a revolution is brewing, but will the mane six you love survive it?

Forget everything you know.

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Lol way to short of a story to be sort of based upon the French Revolution

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umm i think im missing something...
revolution: a sudden and complete change in government
this aint got shit to do with the french lol

where do you get your weed?

3284974 1: i home grow. 2: if you knew anything about history you would have realized that Luna becoming an upstart figurehead in a monarchy that is governing an unhappy populace is very similar to what happened to the arch duchess of Austria marie Antoinette when she was wedded to King Louis XVII, which ignited the FRENCH revolution.

Well not so much her being wedded to king Louis but the fact they didn't give a shit about the French populace, she was named Madame deficit when, after aiding the colonists in the American revolution to overthrow there long time rivals the British, they were in severe dept but despite that the bitch decided to add an extension to the palace in Versailles which pissed off a fuck ton of revolutionaries.

Now u are informed my goodman! As preached in the Age of Enlightenment that occurred during the time of which I speak, deliver yourself from self imposed immaturity (immaturity in the sense of relying on other people for knowledge, having ideas and thoughts spoon fed to u) and be studios in your quest for knowledge and independent thought processes (as derived from several enlightenment thinkers, the main one that helped formulate this way of thinking, being John /Jon/ Locke)

Mmmmmm, this have potential, BM + Princess is 1 of my favorites pairs, maybe if u take a little more time to develop the BM+Luna relationship maybe ll give more background to the history, u know that feel like rushed... a lot. Keep going, u have the potential of 1 great history here.

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in this case luna is LEADING the revolt
marie antoinette CAUSED the revolt
france needed three different revolutions to actually get a working democracy

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i appreciate the feedback
the only reason this is rushed is because that's how the original was, i will hopefully be able to elaborate better in the future (if i even post more on this site)
:moustache:

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I hope you find the inspiration. I'll keep an eye on you.

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