Vacation Planning
Everything was not okay.
Princess Twilight Sparkle almost grimaced to herself as she thought of the optimistic words she had cheered shortly after her coronation. She should’ve known better than to make such a cheery declaration, it was just asking to be proven wrong.
Things hadn’t even been that bad at first. After her coronation the only major upset had been when Sunset Shimmer had stolen her crown during the Princess Summit. And that had ended with her making new friends, getting to see and experience a whole new world, and possibly even showing Sunset Shimmer that there was more to life than her ambition.
After she returned however, things quickly began to take a turn for the worse. She had practically lived the past month in her old room in Canterlot, after Princess Celestia asked her to sit in on some meetings with various nobles and diplomats. At first it was all very interesting, but Twilight soon began to see that politics simply wasn’t for her. These ponies (and sometimes other creatures) could drone on and on for hours about the most mundane thing! A griffon ambassador had spent most of the day trying to impress upon Celestia that extending the free-fly space between the Griffon and Pony territories by a single meter was of the utmost importance.
Or the various nobles who came in demanding to be taxed less for the most ridiculous of reasons! One particularly stubborn noble had even tried to appeal to Twilight when Celestia had refused him, saying that unicorns should be taxed less simply based on the fact that they were unicorns! That stallion had soon found himself teleported right over the fountain in the castle courtyard. Celestia had jokingly mentioned that she may have to hold off on teaching Twilight the “banish to the moon” aspect of the Elements after that.
It was maddening! She hadn’t had a moment to herself in months. Every time she thought that she could finally relax and maybe read a book, there was some new problem that demanded her attention. Even the time she was able to spend with her friends was more focused on saving Equestria from whatever crisis had sprung up.
And then there was Flash Sentry…
The (admittedly handsome) pegasus had apparently asked for the appointment as the head of Twilight’s guard. Twilight hadn’t even known she’d had a guard until that point. At first she was ecstatic at the prospect of having Flash around. Though she didn’t know him very well, the version of him she met in the world beyond the mirror had been nice, and charming. She had been looking forward to getting to know Flash better, and perhaps a little more intimately.
The problem was, Flash turned up everywhere! Twilight couldn’t take more than a couple steps in the market without running into him (literally in some cases), always followed up with him flashing a smile and remarking on how they “had to stop bumping into each other like this”. The first time it was cute. The second time… well she still thought it was cute, but after a week it had just gotten old. Twilight even began to suspect that he was following her, even when he was off duty.
So Twilight found herself once again in the presence of her mentor. Princess Celestia had calmly let Twilight rant until the little princess ran out of steam. “It sounds like you need some time to yourself Princess.” Celestia said.
Twilight groaned and nodded her head. “I would love some, Princess Celestia, but everywhere I go I’m surrounded by ponies wanting favors, or guards who think I can’t look after myself! Did you know Flash Sentry insists on checking the books I read for traps?!” One of Twilight’s eyes began to twitch, and her mane started to spring up in places, signs that Celestia recognized as the growing stress in her student.
Celestia hummed to herself thoughtfully. It was a problem she herself often experienced, when the rigors of helping to rule Equestria would become too much. There were very few places a Princess could go without being hounded by everypony. Illusions never lasted long enough and were too easily recognized, unless one was a changeling of course.
There was however one option that she knew was available to Twilight. “I think Twilight, that you need to take a few days to rest and relax. Your training is important, but not at the point where you should feel so overcome.”
Twilight nodded, but still seemed unsure. After all, she still had no clue where she could go to get away from it all.
“Oh! I almost forgot to mention.” Celestia said as she gave Twilight a small, mischievous smile. “We’ve had the magic mirror moved back to the castle from the Crystal Empire. I had figured that with how well you everything went with your last visit, that it was safe enough to bring it back. It’s currently being stored in the storeroom behind the throne room, if you’re interested in seeing it.”
Twilight looked at Celestia questioningly, wondering why her teacher had thought to mention the fact. "Umm, that's nice Princess, but the portals should still be closed for..." Her eyes widened with sudden realization, and after some quick calculations a smile graced her muzzle. “Oh thank you Princess!” Twilight said as she ran up to the bigger Princess and nuzzled against her.
“You’re very welcome Twilight. Enjoy yourself, you’ll have much work ahead of you when your studies resume.” Celestia said. She blinked as she realized that there was nopony in the room with her. It seemed Twilight had been more excited than she’d thought.
~~VR~~
Twilight grinned happily as she approached the mirror. Seeing her reflection in the magical device was like a salve to her exhausted mind. She was sure of it, it had been exactly thirty Moondays since she had last gone to the world beyond the mirror. A little over seven months ago. Or as Princess Luna liked to say, thirty moons. That meant that the portal would be open again!
It was perfect. She could have three days to relax and hang out with the friends she had made during her stay there. Perhaps she’d even have time to study more about the human world, now that she didn’t have the urgent mission of retrieving her crown hanging over her head.
Oh it would be so exciting! She’d get to see if Sunset Shimmer had learned the magic of friendship! And she’d get to see all her friends…
That brought a stab of guilt to Twilight’s thoughts. Her friends… should she really be leaving without telling them? It wasn’t like she was abandoning them, she just needed some time to relax. And Princess Celestia had said that they couldn’t all go through last time. Besides, she hadn’t seen the mirror versions of her friends for two months!
Twilight sighed. She would just have to make it up to them later. Besides, it would only be for a few days. With that thought in mind, Twilight approached the mirror. She smiled nervously at her reflection, before she tentatively stepped forward.
Just like last time she passed through the mirror, before her body felt like it was being sucked through a straw. She could feel herself spinning and twisting through the colorful space between the two worlds, as a blinding light forced her to closer her eyes.
Then, just as suddenly, the crazy spinning stopped. She could feel cool stone beneath her, and the sound of a car driving in the distance.
Twilight blinked her eyes, trying to clear the spots from them and focus. Travel through the mirror had been just as disorienting as it had been the first time. Slowly, the world stopped spinning around her, and she could make out the familiar sight of Canterlot High.
She had forgotten how alien this body felt. She raised an arm in front of her and stared at her hand. She wiggled her fingers, still surprised at the dexterity of the little digits. She looked down to see she was wearing the same clothes she had appeared in last time she had visited this world.
Twilight shakily stood on her legs, being sure to give herself a moment to balance. Once she stood at her full height she took a tentative step forward. She felt a slight lurching sensation as her body moved, but she kept her balance. She gave a small smile at that, glad that she wouldn’t have to completely relearn how to walk in this body.
After she was certain that she wouldn’t be stumbling all over herself again, she looked around the courtyard of the school. She had hoped that she might run into one of her friends, but that was not the case. In fact, the courtyard seemed strangely empty. By her calculations it was maybe an hour before noon, yet there weren’t any students to be seen.
She slowly walked towards the doors of the school, her steps were becoming less wobbly as she went. She reached the entrance to the school and, remembering this time she did not have magic, gave the handle a tug.
The door barely budged. She pulled on the handle a couple more times to be sure, but the door was clearly locked. Twilight peered through the glass to look inside. All the lights within the school were off, and the hallways were empty.
Twilight sighed and stepped back away from the door. She wasn’t sure why the school was closed, perhaps some holiday? Either way, if there wasn’t anybody at the school, then finding her friends was going to be difficult. She wasn’t even sure if she could remember the way to get to the Rarity’s boutique. This place was much bigger than Ponyville, and one of her friends had always led the way last time she was there.
She closed her eyes as she tried to mentally visualize the route from the school. She was so engrossed in trying to visualize her directions that she did not notice as someone pulled up on a bicycle next to the stairs, or when the person slowly crept up the stairs, sneaking behind her.
“GUESS WHO!” Twilight gave a shriek of surprise as a pair of hands covered her eyes. However, even as her body reacted to the sudden shock, a smile spread across her face. She’d recognize that voice anywhere.
“Rainbow Dash!” Twilight said. She felt relief wash over her as the blue hands withdrew from her face. She felt one land on her shoulder, before she was spun around to face the rainbow haired girl.
Rainbow Dash grinned mischievously as she leaned closer to Twilight. Twilight blinked in surprise, slightly confused by Rainbow’s sudden close proximity.
“Got it in one Twi! You ready for your prize?”
“Prize? What priz-mpphh!” Twilight found herself silenced. Her eyes were wide with shock as she felt Rainbow’s warm lips pressing against her own. She could feel something running across her lips, almost caressing them, before her mind caught on to what happened.
She was being kissed, by Rainbow Dash!
Acknowledging the fact seemed to be the breaking point for the poor girl. Twilight felt lightheaded, before she closed her eyes and passed out.
Rainbow Dash grunted in surprise as she caught Twilight, before giving the girl in her arms a look of bemusement.
“Really Egghead? You haven’t passed out on me like that since our first date.” She grinned to herself, as she scooped Twilight off the ground, nuzzling her cheek affectionately against Twilight’s head. “Heh, looks like I still got it!”
“Still have what Rainbow?” A familiar, and irritated voice asked.
Rainbow slowly turned around, her eyes wide with confusion. She looked down at the girl in her arms, only to see the same girl standing in front of her. Twilight had an annoyed expression on her face, her hands planted on her hips as she glared at Rainbow Dash.
Rainbow Dash opened and closed her mouth repeatedly as she tried to figure out what exactly was going on. She looked down once again at the Twilight in her arms, before she looked back at the Twilight who stood before her, who just now seemed to notice her double.
“Am… am I dreaming?” Rainbow Dash asked with a goofy smile on her face.
Twilight stared at Rainbow Dash for a moment, before she gave a sigh of frustration. This was already promising to be a looooong day.
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Will there be more kind sir?
Sorry, that only works in real life- hey, where'd you go?
Lol dis guna be goood
ssjgokillo when will more chapters come out for all of your another stories on your account come out and i love this story i will wait to see if more chapters for this story come out
Threesome anyone?
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I seeeee yyyyyoooooouuuuuu..... You're not goin ta get away THAT easy...
Oh this is going to be rough holiday for Twi.
Congrats on already getting featured? (in 5 hours or so?)
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Yeah, maybe move that comma before "Princess".
I admit that you have an interesting take on Flash Sentry, as much as I like him so much.
minus a couple punctuation problems, this was excellent! kinda wish the chapters were longer, but i'm hoping that shorter chapters means more frequent updates. also, i agree with your take on flash sentry.
I don't like the humanized ponies in this picture. They remind me of dolls, and not the good kind.
But I think this might be a pretty awesome story. Put this in my read later list, and gave it a like for the troubles.
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Thanks for the catch, I'll fix that in a moment.
I think it's fine just the way ti is
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The following chapters will be longer. Though more frequent updates might not be in the cards, as the entire story is almost completely finished.
Flash won't be making much of an appearance in this fic, though his actions will be explained later on. Hopefully people enjoy what I do with his character, but as I said there will be no attempts at bashing or Flash-hate.
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This got featured?!
Honestly I only released the first chapter because I wanted to make sure the story passed the mod approval before the contest deadline. Still though, that's pretty awesome! Thanks everyone!
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Chapter 2 of Twilight's Journey has been a huge pain in the keister for me, I know where I want it to go, but I'm stuck getting it there. All of my stories are still alive, I just need to actually work on them.
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Why yes, yes there will!
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You and Rainbow Dash think alike.
3271340 ok
3271340 What about Sunset Shimmer? I mean do you have plans for her?
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She does make an appearance in the story, and both Twilight (Human version) and Rainbow will tell Twilight (Pony version) about what she's been up to. The majority of the story focuses on the two Twilights and Rainbow Dash.
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I can understand that. Unfortunately I have no drawing ability of my own, so i typically have to find vectors or pictures that work with the story. Thanks for the like! I hope you do enjoy the story, whenever you take a break from all that running.
3270502
Clearly I warmed up the crowd for him.
Go get 'em, guy!
Well this looks like it could become an interesting story.
There's just one problem. Thirty moons does not mean thirty days. It means thirty lunar months (which is nearly the same thing as thirty normal months). So by that definition the earliest this could take place is 2.5 years after Equestria Girls, which is probably a bit too far in the future for your ideas to work. So you might want to see if you can come up with some other way to justify Twilight's travel to the Human world.
Doing so would also have the bonus of justifying her friends' surprise at seeing her. If they knew she could show up every thirty days, they would probably be expecting, or at least hoping, she would do just that. But if they thought they couldn't see her for over two more years then you can't blame Dash for assuming any Twilight she sees is her Twilight.
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Yup, I thought about that when I was planning the story. The only problem I saw, was that there isn't a definite time span for the show. For all we know seasons 1-3 could've happened within one year. Full moons are also a common appearance in Equestria (I can only think of a couple instances when we've seen a non-full moon), so I'm going with the thought that 30 moons is a different time span in Equestria than it is here.
Though you do bring up good points all around. There will be explanations behind it all, and why exactly Twilight's human friends would be surprised to see her.
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Well I'm glad you know what you're doing at least. The thing is, your story makes it clear that you're using thirty moons as thirty days. If you want to go and assume that moons are a different length of time over there, I guess that's fine, but I don't think it should be a day. If it was, then why would anypony say "thirty moons" instead of "thirty days" or even "thirty nights"?
If you wanted, you could say a moon is about a week. Thirty weeks is just under seven months, so that would work with your timeline. Though you might want to explain why a moon is just a week then.
Actually, do you want to know what I would do?
I'd add in a little scene where Twilight is frustrated because she wants to go over to the human world but can't because of the thirty moon thing, probably thinking up and then dismissing all sorts of solutions. Then Luna shows up and says something like "Oh, you thought I meant thirty months? No, thirty moons is just thirty days. Get on in there." And so she does. It would justify the whole moon/month/day thing and it could be worth a laugh or two
That's what I would do, but it's your story so do whatever you want with it!
3271340 well, if the stories almost over, wouldn't that mean frequent updates? like, once a week or something?
Not sure what to think of this whole concept... never was much of a shipper, anyway.
Hmm...I'm not exactly what you call a lover of TwiDash[More like I'm starting to warm up to it], but this is hilarious and I look forward to reading more chapters.
I thought for sure she was going to run into Flash Sentry first off right through the gate
WARNING! WARNING!: Fourth Wall Breaking in the Author's Note!
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That is all.
3272331 You're in the right place ;)
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Hmmm... I actually do like that. Originally I had wanted to pull the time out closer to six months out after Twilight's last visit. With your permission, I think I may edit the first chapter using your idea.
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Heh, what I meant is that all the chapters should be out tomorrow. Maybe one or two on the morning of the 30th, depending on my homework situation. So the updates won't be frequent persay, just a bunch at once and then the story will be finished.
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I can understand that. Hopefully the shipping doesn't turn you away, but if that's not the case, well thanks for giving it a try!
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I don't know what it was about the show, but at some point my brain just made the connection that Rainbow and Twilight would be a good match. Then I came here and found all the awesome Twidash around, and knew I would never escape it. Hope you continue to enjoy the story!
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Heh, nope. Flash in the human world is actually very careful around Twilight now. For reasons that will be explained in one of the upcoming chapters.
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I've been taking lessons from both Pinkie and Deadpool on the fine art of breaking reality. It's fun!
3273740 EVEN BETTER! then i can read at my own pace!
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By all means, go ahead. I'm just glad to help out a bit
Yeah... The 30 moons from the movie references 30 lunar cycles... 28 days each, for a total of 2.5 years between the portal opening.
It would be far better for Twi to be utterly ecstatic about seeing her human friends for the first time after their goodbyes. Trying to bend canon with weird interperetations simply doesn't work. It also diminishes the urgency of the events of the film.
3274163 Essentially this, the time frame described here is a 4.85 year gap between the events of EQG and the fic. It just feels odd to talk about it being so soon afterwards. Even the "haven't had free time in months" thing is rather short for how long you have described with your time-frame sentence.
But a promising start nonetheless, I await more.
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The time span of 30 moons is indeed 2.5 years... here in the real world. In the real world, we also don't have magical goddess ponies who raise and lower celestial bodies. Or seasons whose change is dependent on the labor of other ponies.
As I said when talking with The Letter J, there is no definite time reference in the show, but you see full moons constantly. So, if 30 moons is actually the time span between one full moon to the next, then based on the whims of Luna it could (possibly) happen in a one month period.
For all we know, Moon is what they call the first day of the week in Equestria (Like Monday, Moonday, get it? I'm hilarious). So 30 moons may have been 30 weeks, a little over half a year.
That is of course assuming that Equestrian year are 365 days long... something else that is hard to tell. Does an Equestria day equal 24 hours? Is Equestria a geocentric or heliocentric planet?!
As far as diminishing the urgency of the movie goes, I'd have to say that getting back a magical artifact that is one of Equestria's best means of defense, keeping a mare-turned-human from mind controlling a bunch of people to use to take over Equestria, and doing all this before the portal closes (keeping her trapped for 30 moons, which even it if was a month would leave Equestria without both a Princess and an Element of Harmony for that time) is still pretty urgent.
But yeah, I understand where you guys are coming from. And after chatting with The Letter J, I am going to edit the first chapter with a bit more information on the whole "30 moons" thing.
Thanks for reading, and I hope you enjoy the story!
3276577 I suppose you have a point, we don't know what type of system we are talking about, or even if the days are Earth day length or different. So I agree with your course of action to clarify the time frame, but that's all you really need to do, the start is promising and should get into some funny times soon.
Also, isn't this more anthropomorphic than human? I don't really see many human elements to the EQG universe other than that they are bipedal. Although the lack of apparent extra appendages (wings/horns) does suggest a more human aspect, but they are multicoloured too, so it's sort of both?
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From my understanding Anthro suggests that the characters have characteristics of both ponies and humans. In the Equestria Girls world, aside from the power-up from the Element of Magic, they only really have human characteristics. Hands and feet instead of hooves, no muzzle, no fur, etc. As far as the different color skin thing goes... well, they'd all fit in really well in and episode of Doug
This looks good, MOAR
Please
EDIT:
At the end of the chapter, I imagined Rainbow thinking "Awesome.. the fun has been doubled"
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I see someone beat me to the 'sixty moons =/= sixty days' thing.
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You're correct. Anthro would be something like how they were during the transformation (with the pony ears/wings) otherwise human is entirely correct for the Equestria Girls setting.
60 moons = 5 years
Other than that, nicely done.
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Already been discussed (multiple times), check the comments linked below.
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3276577 There's another 30 you gotta worry about, SSJ. September 30th.
Chop chop! ;)
Yeah, I've always imagined "moons" is the Equestrian term for days. I don't know why I thought that, it just makes sense to me.
In other news, I think HRD got herself into some trouble.
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No, Rainbow, you're not dreaming. When you are, you see things like tap-dancing frogs with ties singing disney songs with a baritone voice. Unless you're in Equestria, then it's just Tuesday.
Nice start. I liked that Twilight felt slight guilt over not telling her friends she was taking a vacation. Though she really is no politician. The proper answer to a noble asking to be taxed less is to double his taxes, not teleport him in a fountain.
I liked these lines;
'Everything was not okay,'
'A griffon ambassador had spent most of the day trying to impress upon Celestia that extending the free-fly space between the Griffon and Pony territories by a single meter was of the utmost importance,'
'One particularly stubborn noble had even tried to appeal to Twilight when Celestia had refused him, saying that unicorns should be taxed less simply based on the fact that they were unicorns! That stallion had soon found himself teleported right over the fountain in the castle courtyard,'
'Twilight hadn’t even known she’d had a guard until that point,'
'a smile graced her muzzle'
and
'“Am… am I dreaming?” Rainbow Dash asked with a goofy smile on her face,' which incidentally has two spaces after the said words and after the last period.
Shouldn't it be 'seven months' in 'Besides, she hadn’t seen the mirror versions of her friends for two months!'?
and
'closed' should be 'close' in 'as a blinding light forced her to closer her eyes.'
>Flash Sentry is just uninteresting.
I disagree entirely. That sack of useless crap could be done a way with entirely and it would have absolutely no effect on the story. Ugh, I gotta listen to Jonathan Coulton soon because that ....He just pisses me off.
Anyway, as for the story I am fairly interested. This is gonna be interesting to see.
Thirty moons is thirty lunar months, or a little over 2.45 years. This could easily be fixed if you just rewrote the first part of this to be set post-Rainbow Rocks.
And this isn't even internally consistent with your interpretation of "thirty moons". Like I said: Rewrite the first part of this to be post-RR when she has her castle and has opened the portal permanently. It'll make the setup part of this look a lot less stupid.
LOL! LOVE IT!