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Everyone has a story. The question to ask is, what do you want others to read in yours?

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Thumbs up. Favorited. Good writing. You have my interest.

One problem I would like to point out, though.

"Don't jus' stand there makin' faces at it Macintosh!"

Here, for example, between 'it' and 'Macintosh'. When you address someone there should be a comma.

I've noticed this a few times in the story, but other than that I see no other errors.

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Thanks for the head's up :) I usually catch typos like that, but sometimes I miss things. I spent the better part of 20 minutes combing through just trying to make sure I didn't miss any oxford commas, but didn't think to check for that. I'm working at the moment, but I'll go back through when I have the time. Glad you enjoyed it!

I'm guessing the thing Spike was asking about was Colt-Milking?

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Indeed - the title was hard to hide. You can imagine Big Mac panicking to get the book out of Spike's paws before he got further than the cover.

I can't believe people have given this downvotes. This seems like a fantastic start to a great story! I'm excited you're publishing new stuff, I always felt like you had one of the best knacks at characterization, and building realistic dialogue. And unlike many folks, I'm glad you're saving the clop, makes the wait worth it. Can't wait for chapter 2!

This was awesome. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Good luck.

"They produce milk!?"

:rainbowlaugh: I lost it!

Great start here! Poor Mac. I hope Rarity doesn't completely lose it when she comes to. Interested to see more of the book, as well as Mac trying it on Braeburn... Haven't seen a good BraeMac story for a while.

Looking forward to the next update! Keep up the good work. :twilightsmile:

can big mac be the bottom pleas?
also good start looking foreword to more!!

I would totally love updates on this one :D

This is pretty sweet! It's fun to see Big Mac struggling to have some peace, and his quest for Braeburn's plot only makes sense. Who wouldn't want to rut that cute thing? :ajsmug: You've also managed to capture every character's essence without fail. I'll keep an eye for the next chapter. :raritywink:

Wow. How I wish this could have continued! It's really well written and entertaining. I don't understand the downvotes at all.

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I realize this is kinda... two years later, but I figured I would post here to let you know. I am actually working on Chapter 2 and potentially 3 (I haven't decided if it will be one or two chapters yet). Hopefully you find the next chapters entertaining also!

I'm not sure if the site sent out a notification or not, but in case anyone's wondering why there was a publish notification on this story, in all honestly, I accidentally clicked "publish" on the chapter instead of "edit". Sorry about the confusion! However, there should be an actual publish soon!

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I look forward to it :)

Cute chapter. So glad it's continuing.

"Oh Maaaaaacintosh~ What a meety place to pleasure—!"

:rainbowlaugh:

Is this being continued?

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It is yes, but slowly. I've had a few unexpected responsibilities come up that are cutting into my writing time so while I am still working on the stories mentioned in my blog (including this one) it may be a bit before the third chapter comes out. The third chapter is already partially written though, so it isn't just a twinkle in my eye, it's actually there.

cute and funny! excellent writing as usual. hope this will be continued

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