She woke up in darkness, alive and weak.
No memories just confusion of where she is.
The only problem is that she had been buried 17 days ago.
(Vamponies and other occultism like necromancy if that's not your thing then this story is not for you)
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Yes I like it.
3269413
aww that makes me happy
and also 5 thumbs up and no thumb down love it
Not bad at all. Could be better and a bit longer but not bad. ^^ Thumbs up and faved.
3289984
well the reason i kept it short was mostly because i didnt want to waste to much effort into a story that might be disliked
i think i had been working a bit every now and then on this fic for about a year
and isnt it weird that it always is twilight getting vampiric?
I seem to find mostly twilight or fluttershy, but enjoy the ones w/ twi more. I just wish I could find them easily.
Found this and another by browsing. May want to add this to there Vampony group or equestrian vampirism. 
3290490 i dont think youll need to worry about this story being majorly disliked as im sure you can see no downvotes i like it though and i want it to keep going
5851054
good to hear and also thanks for being the first to comment in like 50 weeks lol
yep keep it up enjoyable so far
It certainly is interessting.
I'm surprised she didn't ask, "Wait, I'm a vampony?"
With complete amnesia like that, she should at least have some reaction to that.
Again...? So she was a vampony before she had amnesia?
Ha! I like this guy!
well holy shit 46 thumbs up
Ha! I saw what you did there. Nice tip of the hat to Pinkamina.
So, wings and a horn. Does this make her an alipire? Maybe a vampicorn? Uh... well, whatever she calls herself, I'm betting our little goblin helper is going to fill Twilight in on details the others, like Scourge, are not going to reveal as they seem to have "plans" for the most adorkable vampony in Equestria. (Bits say Snaggletooth's behavior is partly because Twilight's nice to him but mostly to defy the uppity high-class vamponies)
7334935 hmm good names vampicorn alipire, heh yes plans plans plans who knows
I think I like Orson already...
So, before reading, I must say: I was pulled in because it was called Heart Of Darkness, and one of my dad's songs is called Heart Of Darkness.
I think the reason for this being the chapter's first comment is pacing. Both on the frequency of updates and the pacing of the story. We are eleven chapters in and it still feels like nothing has happened. The best way to prevent this is by asking yourself "is this scene really necessary to the story?" Now, be honest. I'm sure that there are many minor details to make characters feel more real that need to be added, but, more often than not, they need to be added in a way that advances the story. Otherwise we get lots of small chapters where nothing happens. I know it is frustrating for the first comment you see in a long time be critical of your work, but I think if the pacing were better, I wouldn't be the first.
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thx and good points yes I tried to make it more slow so it isn't just throwing into the action but I can say training and a lot more will happen in next chapter. once again thanks for your input
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I'm glad you didn't see my criticisms as overly harsh, as I was worried you might. In fact, I was tired when I wrote that hand had to revise it multiple times to make sure I wasn't adding pointless information and superfluous sentences.
8638231
ah no worries I like real criticism instead of just going buhu diz shit sucks . as long as its actual ideas for improvements tips and such I love it
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Ah, well that's a good outlook to have. This conversation reminded me so much of this picture, and I have to share it, honestly.i.imgur.com/qBw24az.jpg
Are you still planning on continuing this one?
11059419
well its been abandoned so long now so i kinda doubt it but if this would continue im pretty sure it would be a reboot or if anyone else wanna continue the story