A well-accomplished Mage and Traveler, named Frost, finds a note sent by the Mages Guild detailing a new spell and is sent to Equestria after attempting to use the spell. He finds that he cannot leave, but can still use his magic and a limited version of normal Traveling, which allows him to go to other realities of Equestria.
I will be adding more tags and characters as the story progresses. By the way, this is my first fic.
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lol, his last words were a death threat
i like him
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I'm afraid good sir we must speak.
In private if you will,
Elaboration on your thoughts I seek.
Worry not I seek no ill.
The conversation concerns a thought,
Which it seems that we both share.
I don't want this rhyme to be for naught,
Though soon enough I shall not care.
The story is very interesting,
Particularly the plot,
But in such a case a thing
Might be less stable than prior-thought.
Be wary of the words you write
And paragraphs not placed.
These things I say I think are right,
With such a great scene set out,
This story will be aced.
Here's a translation;
DAFUQ?!?!! Man, you share the same thoughts and magic theory that I do. We're gonna have to talk.
I think we should discuss your thoughts, plans and magic theory. Next three lines were just for the rhyme XD
Next up, I'm very interested in the story and very impressed, the plot could go very well, but! when you give a character such impressive power, the plot sometimes begins to fail. You need to constantly check for plot holes. Lines between paragraphs would simply make it eligible for EQD. This is fucking amazing so far.
I also happen to have a liking to anything frost related. Cryomancy, Hydromancy and the night all included.
Have 10/10 moustaches.
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Damn it! I was intending to be the first but the rhyme and translation took me ages while being distracted by "Cloudy with a chance of meatballs" and the need to piss XD
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Oh one last thing before I disappear to continue writing my own fanfics, if you ever need a pre-reader or editor:
Make sure I'm thought of,
or you might die.
I'll give this story a shove,
or at the loss of such an author might cry.
Fuck that didn't fit with cadence,
And I'll continue rhyming hence.
Or not... I CBA
interesting take on the multiverse ( i use the word Nexus for multiverse, but its basically the same thing).
I have my own Characters that travel all over the nexus
his name is Noble (last name) and his ten traveling companions he saved from horrible fates. each are incredibly well versed in certain aspects of magic and combat. His job is to record and change the outcomes of fate to keep things becoming to stagnant in the universe
302271 Wasn't a threat, I'll elaborate on that a bit later. Also, 4 tracks in one day? How the...?
302304 I don't think I'll need a prereader, I'm already one of the few people who was a prereader and is now a writer. How long did that poem take you? I'll fix the wall of text. EDIT: Oh, and I'll try to avoid Marty Stu
304027 "Don't...don't read the book. It'll kill you... all..." HEY, YOU CHANGED IT... i think... i thought he said "if you open the box i'll kill you all"... i MAY have been wrong
304334 I did, because they had already opened the box, and it didn't make sense...
304350 buuuut it was a DEATH THREAT...
304359 It still is... also, it was originally "it'll" when talking about the box, too.
Derp,
304027 Poem didn't take that long, I was just distracted by "With a chance of meatballs" and the need to piss XD
302566 Interesting theories ya got there, but nexucs tends to mean a congregation or uniting point, and I like to called it the Omniverse, means the same thing, but sounds far more Arcane and awesome. Why do we all have characters that travel though the omniverse? XD
304734 Because we all look the word "Traveler" up on FiMFiction, to make sure that we are not alone. Either that, or we're just lucky. Anyone know who started the "Traveler" fanfics? Was it Nathan?
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I sure as hell didn'y look it up, I was on the homepage and your story was at the top of the "new stories" section. So I clicked, I read, I loved.
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well how i figured it the multiverse resembles a Big Bang/Tree thing because everything has to start from somewhere right (hence the name Nexus, it expands out then contracts because of gravity going back to its 'unitary point')? and our universe are located in the 'arms' of the explosion and move around like leaves in the wind. each universe is spherical in shape because its the easiest shape to take hold with gravity and they sort of 'rub' against each other which weakens the outer layer of the Universe and allows Universal travel for Elder gods, Arch Demons, and the occasional Artificial God (a mortal man or woman gaining the powers of a god by being sucked into a small break in the universe, what i like to call the 'Paths of in between' universes. Noble is one of these
.)
Why we like making Dimension traveling characters that rip through universes and cause general chaos and fun havoc? because we like breaking the fourth wall
and causing mass hysteria is why!!
WOW, I am a slow writer. To refine the lore from now on:
Omniverse = ALL Multiverses.
Multiverse = Every universe in one reality (Every Earth would be one multiverse).
Nexus = "Meeting area" for the travelers.
Yeah, I just used all of your ideas and put them into one fic.
The only example of names giving control or power over an individual that I've read was in the Inheritance Cycle (Eragon books), thats the only one I can think of really. I would be interested in reading other examples that this could be found in.
356265 ...Well, there ARE these as well...
HALLELUJAH! A NEW CHAPTER!
Do you have any fucking Idea, how long I have waited for this? Well? DO YOU?
474990 Um... A while?
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Not long at all, I just jumped a bit of time after dropping by my home for some hot chocolate.
Hmm...
This is going rather interestingly. Traveling is always a good premise to work off of, as well as pocket dimensions and whatnot. Your truly not as bad of a writer as you may believe you are, but there definitely could be some useful tuning coming to you from my way.
Your fic seems to have plenty of room for OC's and crossovers-
...
Crossovers, you say?
Intriguing... Allow me to do what I do best (sorta)...
Le Track.
Le Like.
478752 The reason I had to rewrite half the chapter was to open that up earlier in the story.
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Sooo... When's the next chapter out?
640268 A week. Any longer, I'm changing it to On Hiatus. Expect it soon.
642730 Frost...You may have done the impossible by writing this story…
So, will you be able to finish or not?