Its the height of the Technical Era, and the Equestria is making strides in mechanics and science.
That doesn't mean things don't break every now and then.
Which is why we find our Mane Cast in middle class Manehattan, in search of one who is toted as "The Best Mechanic This Side of Appleoosa". But when they find him, things quickly get...out of hand.
My first fic, so be gentle. Constructive criticism appreciated. Also, art credit where it is due. Don't know who made it, but it sure as heck wasn't me.
Chapters (5)
First of all: Describe your surroundings. I know you say you don't do expositions, but it really helps if you learn to add detail to your story. It doesn't have to be fancy, just describe what's going on and what your characters do while speaking. Give it a flow. Read good stories to get an idea on how to structure your writing.
Best wishes and keep writing!
(besides, it's pretty short...but what I see has promise!)
3303071
Your advice is duly noted. Thanks a mil!
Regards,
Bookworm Guardian
3303071 You are everywhere on this site.
3304562
He is, isn't he?
3304562>>3304898 I like good stories...
3304905 I feel special.
It's also more a question of how the hell you keep finding these stories. And how I am constantly running into you.
You... think my story's good?
All I gotta ay is that this is shaping up to be quite a good start :D
3305024
Yes, yes I do. It has a certain appeal to it. Insta-faving this.
[color=transparent](Take note that whenever you finish this story, I'll have a surprise present :3 Also, kudos to you for finding this.)
3303071
Indeed it does... indeed it does
3305014 you are never at my part of the website
It was good. Slightly rushed, but good
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Danke, mein friend! If you don't mind my asking, where was I rushed? I may be able to edit in some details!
I have but one thing to say: