• Published 7th Oct 2013
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Soldiers without Borders - Goku the Super Sandwich4

Black Ops soldier named Captain Mike McKay or The Blaze is on one of the most important mission of his life. When he finally defeats his sworn foe a black hole erupts sending him to Equestria. With no idea where his is and no knowledge of anything i

Comments ( 8 )

There are a lot of spelling mistakes, but your main issue is that you really need to put commas in your dialog sentences. Don't you have an editor?

Nice to see another chapter of this story.

Please Update.... :scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel:

Updates please dude

More please. :pinkiesmile: MOAR! :flutterrage: I'm innocent. :scootangel:

You know The picture of the firebird on the screen dose he turned into that bird or does he get the power of the bird

Update please

You have a really cool story here and its really creative, but you really need to get an editor.

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