Hearing about a new region far from Unova Ray thinks its a good start for his ten year old brother to go for gym badges so during his brothers birth day he bought tickets to go to the Equestria region so join Ray and Ken on there adventures in Equestria.
..... Decent premise....
But your grammar seriously needs work. Your capitalization seems fine, but commas and periods are your friends.
Yeah bro this is just all kinds of screwed up.
If he's thinking it.
NO "" are needed.
REPHRASING IT.
Should be closer to something like - Crap I forgot *Person's Name*'s birthday. Rushing to find a way *Character's name* ran to go after his objective, a plane ticket back home.
I thank you guys
Try that.