Outperforming

Ever wonder what happened between Queen Chrysalis and Shining Armor behind the scenes when they were together? Shining armor and the real Cadence discuss "what went on", Will Cadence be forgiving?

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Anon251P

Anon251P #1 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

That was good.

LuminoZero

LuminoZero #2 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · 1 · ·

Tastefully done! What really made me check this out was the lack of the sex tag. I was curious how such a sensitive situation could be addressed without it, and you did not disappoint. It kept the seduction in the most perfect way possible, it didn't show it. It made the reader imagine bits and pieces as the story progressed, and that is a nice way to really envelop the reader in your story.

Also, my my! The princess has one heck of a dirty mind! That was a surprise :P.

Keep up the good work
-Lumino

Diamond Sparkle

Diamond Sparkle #3 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

Very sexy.

Luminous Paradox

Luminous Paradox #4 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

You surprised me but I like this story

Talon and Thorn

Talon and Thorn #5 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · 1 · ·

You know, I'm sure I've read this before somewhere.

Perteks

Perteks #6 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

Would be funny if she couldn't outperfom her xD

ClickClackTheBrony

ClickClackTheBrony #7 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

Good story, and great concept. But just warning you, the title should be OutPERforming. Easy fix though.

Poptard

Poptard #8 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

Well, I believed this title and premise, apart from the misspellings, sounded familiar, so I decided to check it out. Turns out, everything was familiar, because I had in fact read it before. However, with the block of text and title misspellings, I had assumed some lazy plagiarizer copy-pasted it all here, so I valiantly prepared a report and the link to the real author and... yeah.

Once again, I hold the same love for this story as I did when I read it over a year ago, but please, please, don't be tempted to copy-paste everything. It makes the whole story look unprofessional, and I know your stories are anything but. Make sure to edit them or get an editor (I might be able to help), and maybe these diamonds in the rough can be brought into the open.

BR #9 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

I've definitely read this before, under a different author's name.

Doesn't mean I didn't like the story, though.

The Abyss

The Abyss #10 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

3241369 Exactly what this guy said.

Real_SilentPony

Real_SilentPony #11 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

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Entirely possible. It was plagiarized by other authors. I am the original, though. Sorry for any misspellings.and block text. I just copy-pasted from my original word doc, and FIM fiction isn't really good at that sorta' thing. Would love to have an import word doc instead of google doc button, but I digress...

Real_SilentPony

Real_SilentPony #12 · Sep 22nd, 2013 · · ·

3241555

Thanks for the heads up, both of you! I admit i was in sort of a rush to get these stories published because of the mix-up of authorship. But that's no excuse for such a rookie mistake. I'm sorry.

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