• Member Since 7th Feb, 2012
  • offline last seen Sep 19th, 2013

Jaysteeny


I'm an Australian brony who likes reading stories about magical talking horses. Deal with it. Oh yeah, and sometimes I write stuff, too.

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An Earth man wakes up early to watch the sunrise on the longest day of the year. Meanwhile in Equestria, Nightmare Moon makes sure the sun shall never rise again, and adds a little something for a nice touch. This is based upon eye-witness accounts of what two of my best friends remember of their time in Equestria.
Please note: The first few chapters aren't very good, and neither George nor Sam likes them.

Cover art by AegisExemplar, but it can always be better. If you can make a better looking one of it, please do.

Chapters (17)
Comments ( 24 )

Strange how I edited it but it didn't upate... Correct it.

Jesus Christ. Boy do I have my work ahead of me anyhow I'll help edit it all tommorow in the library at lunch, okay.

273895 That's because it was already uploaded and in processing when you edited it.

Ok so now I have to add Nightmare Moon to my kill list, so that means she is going to be after Osama... Oh wait I got him already. Well looks like she is next.

318928 :pinkiegasp: Why would you kill NMM!?!?!?!?

273895 There I got around to makin' a few changes around here. I removed the creepy bit about his leg hair and fixed the Luna/NMM and Princess/Queen confusion. I also fixed his height. Damn you imperial system not using decimals!

398580 ...Fair 'nuf. note I said SHOULD study not WILL study. I did not study.:pinkiesmile:

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OMG i was thinking NMM was gonna send featherback to the moon :facehoof: and i was thinking "NMM, you troll! :trollestia: "

“Oh hey, look a Fourth wall! I’m gonna break it,” Said Pinkie Pie :pinkiegasp::ajsleepy::facehoof:
OH PINKIE!!!

I’ll go down myself, thanks!’ said Pinkie, awakening and doing her own formatting ‘What? I always do my own formatting.’ All she got was blank looks from the two stallions in the room. “Fine, I’ll let Jaysteeny do the formatting,” she conceded. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: i fell of my chair at this point laughing! :pinkiehappy:

i want MOOOOOAAAARRRRR:pinkiegasp::pinkiegasp:

1148026 You'll get it when George stops being sick. And I stop being lazy. And someone is stupid eno-You know what? You'll get it eventually.

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trolls! EVERYPONY ARE TROOOOLLLLLLSSS...all the good stories are too short...:pinkiesad2:

My god, I derped. Meant to upload this about 24 hours ago, soz.

1147504 I reiterate: They have the internet. She went and found the evil overlord list. She wouldn't imprison him, she'd just kill him.

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*ROYAL CANTORLOT VOICE* WE DEMAND THEE READ THIS STORY! WE PERSONLALY READ IT WE LOVED IT! THOU MUST NOW READ! 2 CHAPTERS RELEASED YESTERDAY, NEARLY 1 CHAPTER PER DAY!!!! THE FUN HAS BEEN DOUBLED!!! HAZZZAAAAHHHH!

http://www.fimfiction.net/story/26069/Trips-into-the-unexplored

1239772 If you want me to keep writing, don't keep giving me stuff to read.

oh crud, yea, dont read it then, it takes a loonnnnng time...

Putting it on my read later list. Might read it tommorrow.

1455364 I get the strangest feeling you're stalking me...

Ok, cool story. Looking forward to see where it goes.

It seems like you have all the skills of a good writer, just you can't make it flow correctly. I'd reccommend double spacing so it doesn't look like a wall of text, but that isn't what the main problem is.:applejackunsure: Sorry I can't be of more help.

1520664 Yeah, when I stated this I sucked as a writer. When I finish my Halloween story (Which I'm working on right now) You'll see I have, in fact, got something resembling skills.

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