Twilight Sparkle, the sixth Element of Harmony, known as magic, had been experimenting with interdimensional transportation for weeks. Her friends Rainbow Dash, Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Fluttershy, and Applejack agreed to help her, but when the spell launched, and her friends began seeing a strange eye along walls and in their magic, they began to worry about their safety.
Jeremy Belpois, the Techy and pronounced 'Founder' of the Lyoko Warriors, along with his friends Aelita, Odd, Ulrich, Yumi, and William, fight an ongoing war against the malicious XANA, lately the virus has been silent, but Lyoko has been acting strange. When XANA finally attacks, the results are shocking, and cute. The Warriors of Lyoko must now defeat XANA, restore world order, stay covert, and... hide six candy-colored ponies?
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Well, I must say that your punctuation and formatting could use some work, but that I read nearly every line in that characters voice, and didn't have to stop reading definitely says something about your writing. I'll give this a 'not bad'.
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I've been rushing of late, and I haven't gotten in touch with my team of writers. We sound almost horrible apart. I plan to go back in every week or so and reformat a lot. Thanks for the comment, it really pointed out a lot of things.
I have to say good job I cant wait to see it in the future
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Thanks, I hope to write it. Maybe I can get you a link to the fanfic derived from this
Code Lyoko: REvolution. A completely new and different story.
Nastalga...
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Wow. That was perfect. I've been looking for a name for Ch. 3
So far so good but honestly you could try a bit more with the chapter lengths. i'm not trying to be mean i'm just saying it wouldn't hurt if you made the chapters longer
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I plan to do that, I hope to make each chapter at least 1000 words ASAP.
Thanks though, at least I know they are as short as I thought.
where is the chapter? I am liking this story.
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Glad you do, but I'm having trouble keeping with it, ideas and all, I'll try to keep it up.
poor twilight she scared but she be sirprua when she see something she saw before
Rewriting this story entirely. Don't worry similar, yet more developed theme.
This looks neet, can't wait to see what this end up being, and hoping it won't be too long a wait for this re-write
If you're rwewriting the story, then now's the perfect time to say this line!
"Return to the past now!"
Why did you stopped it was getting good
Brass Tacks here. I've lost this account temporarily as my hard drive died and the password with it. I'll be back at some point to actually follow through and hit a decent word count and a good rewrite. It's just going to take time. And I'll have to find a new co-writer it seems...