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Field Marshall Nuggetman


A wise man once told me- you should always follow your dreams and become what ever you want. So I became a brony. I wonder if that was a good idea?

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It been 3000 years since human civilization has collapse and the survivors dead from disease, starvation and wild predators. The cities ruins. Earthquakes and natural disasters reshaped the lands. Lost and forgotten. Not anymore.

Twilight and here friends were cleaning up the library when they found a journal and a video camera. The name of the author was hard to pronounce "Vanessa Meyers".
They went to Canterlot for answers and their adventure begins.

Note:in this alternate dimension the ponies do have modern tech like iPhones,computer basic life stuff but they don't have the military tech, like tanks and jets.they also don' have cars,planes,metal ships that kind if stuff.

Chapters (13)
Comments ( 60 )

This is pretty good but you may want a proof reader.

I'm guessing your main language isn't English I suggest a proofreader.

3229690. Yeah I said something about asking for a proofreader in every chapter so.....

Broken sentences here and there and some grammar changes needed but... overall I can't say this is a bad story. You got my attention.

The plot is good, but it could've been better paced, maybe have more of the ponies thinking about what David Smith said. Anyway I would love to see their reaction to a nuclear bomb going off.

3241756 oh you will my friend you will.

The reactions are all going to be in the next chapter.

The excitement is continuing to build! Please don't stop!!!:rainbowkiss::heart:

Quick question, "Murican"?:applejackunsure: Could you please explain that?:twilightsheepish:

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:facehoof::facehoof::facehoof:

Really u don't know murica omg can someone plz explain this to him cause I can't?.

It's a inside US sterotype thing.

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heres a picture of bacon and guns

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short but still pretty cool

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Should I write chapters that 1000 words to 2000 words or 4000 to 6000 words?

3257290 i would like something between 1580 to 3549 but do what you like

3257340 i don't know. but write 10,000 if you like i just like reading English cuz i'm a norwegian and this makes me a better reader in English :moustache: so yeah

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Alright then ill write about 3000 words then.

Comment posted by Field Marshall Nuggetman deleted Sep 25th, 2013

Me Love, me love, me love!!!!:rainbowkiss::heart:

You could have the ponies at least have some sort of emotional reaction towards the fact that the entire way their planet works was instantly altered in a single day.

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I should have but ill do it the next chapter I'm still sick u know.

wow wow wow slow down a bit their planet was altered in a single day don't you think that is a little rushed ?

My God, this story is ridiculous. It's ponies meet humans cliché incarnate.

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ill try to explain it in the next chapter and remember the earth was healing itself and i was just finish on the same day.

Coincidence maybe :moustache:

I think it would have been funny if you reversed the pictures of New York.

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fuck it im to lazy to do that shit.

but yea ill do it when i have the time.

The door to the capital vault is now open.

Interesting idea, but the dialogue is bland. Like, oatmeal bland. That is to say- very. Adding more than monosyllabic words to a conversation would make it far more interesting to read.

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I have a bad problem with English grammar so that's y I need help a lot. This is a solo writer thing and I may get ppl to help me to become better.

I'm already trying my best not to cringe really hard with all the grammatical and sentencing errors.
I have been doing this since the start of the fiction. I recommend you do something about it asap because I don't think I can handle it much longer. :ajbemused:

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Ok people are really frustrated no pissed that I don't fix the grammar so you know what I'm gonna it's going to take a few days though.

Saying this to pretty much everybody or every pony

I AM GOING TO EDIT THIS

OMG

Yes the first few chapters are going to be edit and republished on Friday I hope.

Also the other story I have aren't going to be edit sry :pinkiesad2:

Criminal minds maybe

Chapter 1,2,3 are now edited

Also < p class="double"> your see this in the story it's just google doc stuff don't mind about it.

Dun dun duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuun!

It has been theorized that if a society could somehow exist without any major conflicts, they could advance like you have said.
The only difference is that due to no need to rush it for war, it will develop at a much slower pace than we have. But that is for humans, so who knows.
That said, if they followed the same time frame we have, they would now be in the 1600's technology frame. Albeit, no pirate ships.

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I could care less, I read wierd, so I am unfazed...
Also, technically it is easier to break mach 1 at higher altitudes do it the decrease of air resistance. The problem planes have with this though, it the turbines tend to spin faster, and to fast blows you up.... Lucky pegusi and there not turbines...

Also, screw russian, Swahili Ftw. Although It comes in third. Only after Bushman talk....

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I counted about 3 misspells words there.

Oh Ty 4 tip I guess.....:unsuresweetie:

GIVE THEM THIS WISHING BONE!!!!!!

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thanksgiving, wihsing bone, ya know.... its a Merican thing??

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Ok it's a wishing bone and plus it's murican

Oh now I get it

I'll make them get a thanksgiving feast soon enough

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