Trixie doesn't like the Federation. Okay, Trixie hates the Federation. She hates everything about it, despite their best intentions, and is absolutely Hell-bent on having nothing to do with it or the "humans" that have seemingly appeared from out of nowhere. However, she soon finds herself stuck between a rock and a hard place when an errant starship mistakenly crushes her cart. Little does she know that all it took was a simple accident to propel her to stardom...although maybe not the way she expected.
Check out this fic by zalla661, inspired by Starring Trixie: Adventures Across Space
Chapters (34)
Star Trek? I'm in.
Interesting, I'll keep an eye on this one
tis be potato sac
This caught my eye, and I think I'll stick with it for now. I'm curious to see where this is heading and how Trixie will cope with all the changes that are bound to happen.
I'm also curious to see if her magic works differently now that she's off her home planet. She may have to pull more tricks out of her cape to get by.
I wonder if these two will meet any other Equestrians. Trixie can't be the first to take a joyride...
Aren't the Federation not allowed to share technology with planets that haven't yet discovered warp travel?
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Perhaps they have, Trixie just didn't concern herself with the Equestrian space program. That or a Borg (or some other faction) offensive on the planet required Federation intervention (Imagine fighting borg alicorns.... with the gravity manipulation powers the princesses seem to have, the Federation would fall, as would all the powers in the galaxy, Alpha, Beta, Gamma, or Delta Quadrant.).
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I'll get into that but suffice it to say that the presence of magic was enough to convince them to temporarily amend the Prime Directive. Oh, and ponies can teleport. That's kind of like warp, ha ha...?
3218731 Eh, point conceded.
My theory is that the Federation just made a mistake.
They come to a solar system where the star orbits around the planet (remember, Celestial raises and sets the sun--the planet doesn't rotate).
So the Federation scans a population center, detects equines, lands nearby, and looks for intelligent life inconspicuously. They do nothing to hide from the equines, only to find out they are the intelligent life form. What's done is done and now we got the Federation roaming about...
...at least that's my take on it...
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My reasoning will be very similar but I will get to it, don't worry. That's a good theory though.
Before I read this,
Is this a crossover with Starship Troopers?
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No, it's a Star Trek crossover but that would be cool...and extremely violent! Yay!
3236340Oh. It would be awesome!
But, uh, do you know where to find a pre-reader?
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I might...does it look like I need one? Feel free to be honest, I really don't mind.
3239656No, I'm just looking for a person to pre-read mine. Would you mind?
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Sure, I'd be glad to take a look.
Ok, I normally avoid crossovers but this one is actually interesting and amusing. So congrats on being the first crossover that has appealed to me.
Trixie has taken her first step into a larger world.
An amusing chapter. Trixie learning all the the new things being presented to her and still managing to go with the flow is great. She's got a lot to learn but she picks up things (literally) fairly quickly and is able to use it to her advantage. Interesting to see that in Equestria Trixie isn't all that impressive with her magic, but against beings that don't have that she's able to hold her own.
The smatterings of Star Trek quotes was a little jarring. They may seem cute but I find them distracting and pull me out of the story. Might want to cut down on those.
Enjoying the experience so far! Keep at it.
One piece of advice: Don't shift around your character perspective so quickly and without warning. We've been reading first-person so far and then suddenly, and without a scene break, switch over the Trixie's perspective. Only a few paragraphs later we go back to first-person and the scene where they are being fired upon changed constantly. Pick a perspective and keep it or set up an indicator that alerts us that we'll be changing soon.
A lot happened in a short amount of time here. Trixie is being a pain in the flank and then a small section of space becomes an intergalactic gang-bang. I see Trixie isn't the only pony to boldly go.
An interesting development but I was having whiplash with all the sudden saves and fake-outs. What was up with all the ships coming in and then leaving? I hope the next part goes into this because the dumb luck factor was kicked into overdrive.
That's it for now. Till next time!
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Dude, I pretty much read the comments section for your comments. Some of them are pure fucking gold. On that note, I know that it felt rushed but that was the intent. I wanted to throw a lot of stuff at them quickly to really kick things up into overdrive. Don't worry, I know how to pace and the next part should make that more apparent. All the saves and fake-outs will be justified, I promise you that.
Aww, I was more interested in Trixie 'boldly going where no pony has gone before', now she's just another PONY IN SPAAAAACCCCCEEEEE! Still, it was a good chapter, though I have to guess they were warped into some kind of different reality or something. I would have thought time travel if not for Fluttershy still being alive, and having such a changed personality. Curious to see what happens next.
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Don't worry, there's plenty of time for her to go where no mare has gone before. Just sit tight and enjoy their first foray into the Mirror Universe!
Still loving it and wanting more!
Hope that Trixie can get her "space legs" such as it were, but am equally glad that isn't being rushed (good for character development).
Will be eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
Meh, don't mind the walls of text or 'plot' at all, action is fun but if I was into senseless violence I'd watch a movie. : ) Interesting little plot this universe has. Sounds like Celestia became like NNM, was kinda surprised that the artifact found wasn't the elements of harmony, but that'd require alot more people/ponies. After what the Alicorn Amulet did to Trixie before, I can't see her willingly putting it on again, especially if it means she has to kill others, at least at the moment. A little surprising that no ponies joined Luna, but then again its probably difficult as hell to get on and off Equestria with Celestia's forces not knowing.
I'd suggest breaking up Luna's explanation towards the end there into smaller paragraphs. It would read easier and make more sense.
You're doing that POV switching again. Stop it.
I like the moral quandary that Trixie has been placed in. She wants to help but that means doing some unpleasant things she's not ready to do. Not to mention her feelings on the Alicorn Amulet.
Looking forward to seeing how this resolves. Cheers!
Dang Mirror Universe anomalies. They always pop up when you least expect it.
Trixies reaction is understandable but if this Amulet is from a different world it may work differently to the one she is familiar with.
Well the Terran Cole got what he deserved, although that may spell problems for that universe as a whole in the future.
The photonic fleet was badass.
Hmmm, I'm curious, how long do you plan to spend in the Mirror Universe? Trixie might become really popular there, but then return to Equestria (her Universe's) only to find out no one in the Galaxy really knows who she is.
"Trixie tells you, she became a great and wonderful performer...in another reality..."
"Ya, sure, whatever you say..."
An Intermission Chapter sounds like a good idea; you story doesn't have a B-storyline to switch from its A-storyline so that'll give a sense of the passage of time when the borg finally show up and the heroes will have to deal with it. (Lacking a B-storyline isn't inherently a bad thing, but one does have to plan out the sequence of events with greater care.)
I noticed a lot more swearing in the chapter. Stevens has a mouth on him when things get hectic.
I was pleased with this episode, though I found it odd that Trixie and Stevens left so quickly after the battle. I guess Luna can take things from here?
I'm wondering if the Alicorn Amulet functions differently here than it did in the "main verse". Trixie wasn't wearing it after the battle so taking it off must not have been a big deal.
I groaned at the Cupcakes reference. Just because you have a crazy Pinkie does it mean you have to pull up that old fossil.
So, new adventure? I think our heroes need some down time, so a little cruise of the universe may be in order. Till then!
Don't say this chapter wasn't good because it was totally awesome.
I did wonder if the Orison Syndicate would show up and when they did you made it a tension filled race against time with high stakes and beautiful ending. I loved the Trixie development because she can be so stubborn that it would take something like this to make her swallow her pride.
Overall I loved every minute.
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You liked it? Well, that's good! I thought it was rushed and still think it could be better but hey, I won't complain! As long as you guys enjoyed it.
kinetic energy stored in their bodies
You mean... potential energy?
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I debated that one for a while, actually. I wasn't sure how to classify a unicorn's magical energy so I used kinetic because it's used to move things and has a visible physical presence. If you have a better suggestion, then I'd love to hear it!
Damnit man, I'm a writer, not a physicist!
3402607 Well, I doubt they'd be so scientifically inclined, what with being brutish slave traders and whatnot. I would just call it magic or mana since I know what it is, but they don't.
I wasn't being picky at you; that was sort of my reply to the guy himself.
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I understand that and appreciate the feedback.
That Ranger computer is mighty powerful. Maybe a little too powerful. I don't have much knowledge of Star Trek technology, but that compute seems to have an answer to everything. Seems a little too convenient for me.
Trixie sure held the idiot ball in this one. I'm not convinced she'd go to such lengths to spite Cole like she did, since she's growing closer to him. I guess that innate distrust of humans surfaces when backed into a corner. With what she's been through so far, I'd say she should dislike everyone but humans.
I did like some of the growth Trixie when through. I'm hoping that will carry over into the rest of the story. I hate to see characters digress.
Anyhoozle, I'm still enjoying this story and look forward to more!
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I think I mentioned earlier that since the Ranger is a science ship, it has a very advanced computer designed for pretty much all contingencies. Besides, since Cole's not exactly tech-savvy, I needed a way to do cool things despite his lack of skills. Don't worry, any and all development will stay otherwise, what's the point of devoting an entire chapter to character development?
An excellent story and I love that you posted it on Halloween.
I also like having Q and Discord be cousins rather than two personas of the same character. Overall, very well done.
Discord and Q, Trolling the universe one ship at a time.
This was amusing, but the "in heat" angle is one of those things that makes me roll my eyes. Also, how does the ship computer not know anything about Equestrian biology and yet the "doctor" did? Are they separate systems?
I little bonding happened which is nice. Q and Discord are cooky but fun to read. I look forward to more!
This is very Star Trek story for this chapter. I half expected Picard to appear at some point.
A very creepy place those two wound up in. Will even the Federation stand a chance?
I swear the universe it out to get these two. They can't even make it to the next starbase without being sent to an alternate dimension or end up in a full scale war. Sometimes both!
Is the amulet making Trixie crankier? Or is it just her sunny personality?
Till next time!
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You guys realize that I'm pretty much writing this for you two, right? Not that I mind or anything! It's just that you two seem by far the most dedicated and that's really keeping me going, actually. Glad you're enjoying it!
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hey! I read these when they come out, I just don't have as much to say. I'm not an avid Star Trek watcher so anything besides basic references go over my head. I am happy that the Tribble from last chapter is nowhere to be seen though, hate those things. I'm also very curious about that station, but unless they come after Trixie again I doubt they'll come up soon. Though it would prolly be odd for you to have them in if you weren't planning on using whatever that station is at some point.
Kinda curious how the girl was dead in the container, but Trixie wasn't. Maybe it lets the body starve and just leaves the husk perfectly preserved or something? o.O The lack of people on the station just makes me consider it and the ships that come and go as part of one big AI system, but not like I know enough on Start Trek to begin guessing what it is.
As I said, I'm enjoying the story so far and looking forward to more. More interested in Cole and Trixie's interactions with eachother and the Universe than any real action, but that's just me. Also curious on if there is ever going to be more crew on the ship. A large starship and only two people on it *with only one vaguely knowing how any of it works*, sounds hazardous. : )
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Ah, nice to hear from you! Don't worry, I value feedback but it's not the be-all, end-all. ANYWAY, allow me to give you a hand here. The Ranger is a Nova-Class short-range science vessel that, along with its sophisticated computer, can be operated by very few crewmen. (http://en.memory-alpha.org/wiki/Nova_class) That's also why it sucks at fighting; the Nova-class are definitely not tactical ships. As for the Tribble, it's still there. Cole just hasn't felt like petting it for a while. Now, the station itself is how I imagined a massive Iconian (http://en.memory-alpha.org/wiki/Iconian) station to be. All that will be explained in time but I'm kind of waiting for the Star Trek Online story to tell me more about them before I continue with that particular arc. I think the fact that the aliens just capture and preserve and simply let the subject die of starvation or whatever was a great way of making them more terrifying. Anyway, I hope that clears things up for you and if you have any further questions, don't hesitate to ask!
Somehow I think that lick was probably about more than simply grooming habits. Kinda curious about what happened with their bed situation, kinda expected Trixie to hop into bed and say goodnight while Cole tried to make the floor comfortable. I was almost expecting Trixie to have teleported heself to the ship as opposed to letting Cole go alone.
Glad about the multipart stories you've been up to lately as I've always liked longer plots. Will be interesting to see how this pans out. If successful I'm pretty sure Cole's resume will hardly need to be looked at. Though shame that I doubt he'll be able to keep the Aegis system, but at least he might get out of the cost of repairing his ship, sounded like he would almost be paying for a new ship to me.
My comment about the universe out to get Trixie and Stevens remains unchanged.
Cute little scene when they were eating. Trixie even got a little taste of skin!
I'm wondering if Trixie will be forced to bust out more of the Alicorn Amulet's power before Stevens returns. By the time he gets back with reinforcements, there might not be a need to save the day.
If Equestria ever does go galactic, it will be hard to avoid Trixie's name. She's a star!
I don't get it... the borg doens't exist in the mirror universe.
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I took a few creative liberties.