• Member Since 16th Sep, 2013
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Megacoll51


Pinkie dash, dislestia, and sweetiemash are the best ships!

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when Rainbow Dash leaves sooner and doesn't hang out with pinkie as often pinkie begins to think Rainbow Dash doesn't like her anymore, and gets really sad. Rainbow Dash on the other hoof, has a crush on her and has been avoiding her because of that. The CMC decide to help them with they're problems, but it doesn't work out as well as they hoped...

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 9 )
Comment posted by Curly_Q deleted Sep 29th, 2013

This story has a looooot of potential... So far, it's good.... :unsuresweetie:
It does have some issues, though.. mostly with grammar, which would probably explain the dislikes.... :twilightsheepish:
In many places, you didn't capitalize the ponies' names. You have a few sentences that don't make sense. I also recommend you use italics for thoughts to help separate it and make it easier and more enjoyable to read.
However, I must say that the idea you have for this story is brilliant :raritystarry:
It just needs quite a bit of work... :applejackunsure:
I can help you if you would like. :heart:

3244478 I'd LOVE for you to help! Thankyouthankyouthankyou! I'm gonna start the next chapter now!

3263682 Rainbow Dash is afraid of accidentally confessing her feelings to Pinkie while pinkie likes her as well. the cutiemark crusaders are trying to help.:twilightblush: sorry it was confusing. (nice name choice :twilightsmile: )

It would be a lot better if it was less confusing but still good job

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