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Dark Tempest


I'm back from the dead.

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When Rainbow Dash asks Fluttershy to attend the Hearts and Hooves Day Galloping Gala special opening night, Fluttershy reluctantly agrees to go. Meanwhile, the new pegasus-stallion Matrixwing -who had never before been to Ponyville- tries to find a place to live there. The two pegasi's fates intertwine as they try to find out more about each other, and eventually fall in love... Unfortunately, an evil force rises from the ashes of their former enemies... An evil so great, that it starts to change unoticing ponies one by one... Eventually, Matrixwing begins to trust the ponies of Ponyville, and tells Fluttershy of his 'seeing' blindness -'Clairvoyance' he calls it-, the 'mood lightning' (also known as the Visus Colorem Condition) in his eyes, and his gift of lightning speed. Is he capable of protecting the only mare he could ever love from one of the deadliest forces of evil? Can he find the ancient and sacred Element of Harmony required to defeat them? Well go on, read and find out!

Remember to like and comment. With enough likes (20+), I may add a bonus chapter, or start a new story (maybe even a series!).
Warning: This has a fully customized OC in here, as well as plot twists, so keep that in mind as you read and don't make assumptions based on what you read so far. If you do, be reasonable. This story was also written for the enjoyment of others, so I'm not looking for heavy and unjustifiable criticism.

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Comment posted by Dark Tempest deleted Oct 5th, 2013

Yes, I made a teen update to this story. Shouldn't be "too" gory, but I realized that I wanted to make the story as interesting to readers as possible, so eventually... Yeah... There's going to be some fights, obviously. Don't worry, I won't forget that it's a Romance. :raritywink:

[youtube=www.youtube.com/watch?v=rB1TG5HcmPI] Well its a love story aint it? :raritywink: IY just had to be done! SHE LOVES YOU YEAH YEAH YEAH!!!! great story!!!!!!!!!!!!

that's confusing. So what you're saying that he's blind
but then not blind at the same time.
unless he's an Earth vendor I'm not buying.

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What I'm saying is that he can see dimensions: other worlds that are similar to the one he's in, and in his point of view, it's the same thing as other ponies ability to see, he can just see a little more than others even though he can't see the world he's in, he still sees it.

3411254 that's more confusing. So what you're saying is you see pocket dimension? Or the magical outlining of ponies?

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You're close, yes he does see what appears as the magical outlines of everything, auras specifically, as well as fill in those outlines. The unicorn mentioned casts a spell to allow Matrixwing to see these auras, and then he has a psychic-like ability to fill in those missing details, allowing him to "see" normally. I can't say more, as it would spoil the story, but that's the idea.

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Sorry, but that's all I know how to explain it.

Great start on the first chapter! It's very interesting.:raritywink:

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Thank you. I hope it will be a very interesting story in the future. :pinkiehappy:

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Love your avatar by the way. :twilightsmile:

I know that it's taking a while, ponies, but it's so hard to change the tone of the story so quickly, and it's taken a toll on my ideas. It may take me a little longer to write this next chapter.

I'm not always the best with all of the OC things like this, but this one's plot twists have peaked the summit of my interest. I look foreword to a good read, fine stallion.

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Also, thank you. I'm always happy to see somepony who would actually like my story. It's not easy, as you probably well know.

I think that this story is amazing! Keep up the great work!

I think that this story is amazing! Keep up the great work!

Great job on the story but I noticed that you forgot something. In the backstory of the seventh element ,you listed the elements they know today and forgot the element of kindness. You'll probably want to fix that. Other than that good job.:pinkiehappy:

*-Raven Talon

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Comment posted by Dark Tempest deleted Dec 10th, 2013

What type of genres do you usual write in your fics?

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I can write Romance, Dark, Adventure, a bit of Anthro, maybe Alternate Universe.

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I usually try to write a little bit of comedy, a lot of romance, and maybe some slice of life into my fanfics

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I'm not good at Slice of Life.

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Stormrider, I know that you don't use slice of life in your stories. But I'm trying it myself for my fanfics. It is kind of hard to make it sound intense.

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