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Prane


Aspiring writer, self-proclaimed hardcore gamer, adept of human psychology. Does not consider excessive pride for a vice.


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“What would you do if you were to find a long-gone dragon?”

This question has been haunting Twilight for a few good months now. Months of renewed sadness, yet also months of restored hope. Months, after which most of us would have collapsed. But, she’s Twilight Sparkle, after all. When it comes to her friends, she is bound to find answers to any of her questions...

Several years into the future, she and Spike have gone their separate ways. But now, it is up to the princess to find her former Number One Assistant and convey a message that will, hopefully, soothe each other's regret and might bring them together again: their mutual friend, Rarity of Ponyville... is fading away.

This story is a vital part of my Summer Genre Tour.
Already done reading it? Check out this blog post for more stuff regarding Fading Away!

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 102 )

Hello and welcome to Fading Away!

I hope that you'll find reading it worthwhile - it's my first attempt of taking [Tragedy] and [Sad] tags from the usual background to the fore. I'm aiming for a good ol' catharsis, sort of emotional purification for both the heroes of the story and you, dear reader. I guess we'll see about that.

More or less constructive criticism is encouraged, of course - don't hesitate to tell me what you think! And what if you stumbled upon this story, but it's not really your cup of tea? Worry not, as you are bound to find something amongst my other recent projects!

So beautiful! And it's only the first chapter! Plus I put on some of Ponyvisation, (a fan that does piano improvs) really added to the affect. :raritycry:

While I'm no fan of Sparity this story has my interest.

"...especially after that dragon-enslaving decree you’ve forced–”

I´m curious about that part.:trixieshiftleft:

WoW! I wonder whatever happened between Twilight and Spike and indeed with the decree of enslaving dragons to cause Spike to respond with rage toward Twilight. :fluttershysad: Also, Rarity dying...:fluttercry:... now that ought go get Spike to come back. But the question is how will the other react to him coming back?:fluttershysad:

3200997 Oh, that better not be the case, because if it is then Twilight is really low.:flutterrage:

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Dude! Love that avatar pic of Shockwave! :pinkiehappy:

I normally avoid spike stories with the tragedy tag: it automatically tells you the main character is going to fail - big time.

I felt dissapointment through my body when this was not a update of the Story: Faded Flame.
D: Stop using fade! its confusing!

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Thank you all guys for amazing feedback! I have to admit I did not expect that. :twilightsmile:
Now, onwards to individual responses.

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Ponyvisation, eh? I think I should check it out then, thanks for sharing!

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Spike x Rarity is a questionable pairing, for obvious reasons, but I hope you'll stick to the end to see my take on it!

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Nope, no comments here regarding the part Raistlin quoted. You have to wait! :trixieshiftright:

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So many sad Fluttershys in your words! Please, keep some tears for further chapters! You might need them.

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Therefore I'm inviting you to stick with the story - after all, it's all about how we define failing...

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Faded Flame? You're right, the distinction doesn't seem quite clear. I'd even venture to say it's faded. Also, I hope your confusion will fade once upcoming chapters of Fading Away will be revealed. So fade not and remember: it's so faded it's vivid! :raritywink:


Once again, thanks everyone!

I'm curious to see what happens next and why Spike and Twi have become estranged.

I really like the emotion in the story so far, it really compliments the genre of the story and gives it more substance in my opinion. Also I can't wait for the next chapter to come out!

This is absolutely wondrous! I have no complaints about it at all. Keep up the good work! I'm looking forward to reading more! :pinkiehappy:

I am quite curious about what caused their relationship to go sour, but i'm sure i'll see that in chapters to come.

Broly you are back? Again? :ajbemused:
Isn't 3 times good for ya? :ajsleepy:
Or have you become good? Cause i just faught Bills!

I liked it. It makes sense for the most part. The grammar is good. I hope to see where this can go. And to be honest, if you continue writing like this I wouldn't be surprised it if eventually got featured.

Chapter 2 is up - I hope it will live up to your expectations! In fact, I'm eager to hear what you guys think now that some light has been shed on certain issues involving Spike and Princess Twilight...

In any case, enjoy!

3! CHAPTER 3! PLEASE! PLEASE! CHAPTER THREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!:rainbowwild:

Where does Twilight get off with demanding Spike?

Why does the Dragon Registration Act remind of the Mutant Registration Act?
If so, it is justified for Spike to be angry. :flutterrage::twilightangry2:

I hope Twilight and Spike would be able to rebuild the bridge of their friendship. :fluttershysad: It hurts me to see Twilight having to force Spike with magic, and also Spike become enraged and rampage like toward her. :fluttercry: Also, I hope other ponies in Equestria will be welcoming to him.

I love this story so far. Please keep writing it.

Now I kind of understand were Spikes rage is coming from. To have the ability to finaly understand himself, after being surrounded by non dragons for his whole life, and it taken away from him so suddenly. I would love to see some more back story on Kryvarost because I love dragons and he seems so dam interesting! It seemed that he liked Spike and I can't help wonder why? Any way, love how the story is going so far!

P.S- I wouldn't mind a flash back of the summit and how everything broke down. ( I'm very curious )

I hope spike is able to say goodbye to Rarity

I have no idea what's going on yet and can't really judge what I think of Spike, or Twilight, or any justifications for their actions... and because of that I'm anxious to find out more of the backstory. :rainbowwild: Also why would someone name a dragon Skewgrowth (which is a rough translation of Крив[о/a]рост, the dragon's name as pronounced in russian)? :derpyderp1:

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I find the greatest credit a reader can give to an OC is actually using that OC's name in a comment (or basically anywhere outside the story). It makes the character feel real for someone else beside author, and I thank you for that! At this point, however, I cannot say anything about a potential backstory for Kryvarost, but I will adress that issue in the future.

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Ah, but the name did not come from Russian language! Though I'm not going to reveal its origins just now - happy reasearch, if you're up to it!

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THERE WILL BEEEEE CHAPTER THREEEE!
Also, it's really heart-warming to see your enthusiasm growing from this into this!
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3285639 Well, I'd rather wait for you to reveal it, but it's interesting that the name happens to sound like a coherent pair of words in Russian. I could easily see a plant named krivorost, if it was known to grow diagonally, or in a twisted shape. That one substance in Harry Potter that grew bones back was named 'kosterost' in russian - "kost" (with a soft t) being "bone".
It must've at least come from a related language. Intriguing! Hopefully you won't forget to explain the etymology here eventually :twilightsmile:

Have a third chapter of our journey across the past and the present of Twilight and Spike! It seems there are answers to some of your questions inside... I hope that some of them will remain unresolved, though!

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A bit too quickly. Spike was absolutely convinced Twilight was responsible of the death of his mentor and an unpopular/unfair decree, to the point of joining a bunch of violent rebels, and suddenly he becomes understanding?

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Now that's interesting. As far as I know, Spike never joined any group of dragon rebels, but he isolated himself from basically everything. However, I assume that there was some poor choice of words or grammar stuff that made you think that way - could you please tell me what it was so I could fix that?


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My mistake I guess. I jumped at that conclusion after reading this:

“No, unless you talk to me!” she avoided Spike’s greedy grasp. “Why are you acting like this? I refuse to believe that you’re one of those so-called ‘freedom fighters’ rallying against the Dragon Registration Decree, so what is it? Are you still blaming me for Kryvarost’s death?”

Still I think Spike gives up his position so easily, even considering his guilt about Rarity.

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Noted. What's done is done, but rest assure I'll adress this issue in my Fading Away Behind-the-scenes blog post in the future. :twilightsmile:

:fluttercry: Happy tears my friend, because Twilight and Spike were able to share a comforting hug with each other. :pinkiehappy::twilightblush: I just hope that the others will be welcoming to Spike once they get to Ponyville.

I :heart: how Spike can still put his issues with Twilight aside for the sake of his one true love. I can't wait to see if he makes it in time to see her and if there's other letters that she wrote to him.

One free review as promised.

Grammar mistakes I found.
Smaller mistakes: 6
Sentences with major flaws:1
Overall: Good grammar with vivid words.

Plot and pacing.
I found the plot new, refreshing, and completely possible. I thought pacing was a little bit fast in the third chapter, but good overall.

Character representation.
I thought both Twilight and Spike were portrayed well and quite close to how they would in canon (probably, it's hard to tell for sure).

Overall score: 8.5 out of 10
Notes: I think this is a good story. Have a like and a fav.

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Thanks for taking a look, glad that you liked it!

So I guess this is it! I hope that you've found reading my story worthwhile - if you have any final thoughts (a verdict, perhaps?) don't hesitate to drop them somewhere. Either here, or better yet, under this blog post. Be sure to check it out and tell me if you'd be interested in a sequel to Fading Away. And if you're in a hurry, thanks anyways for your support!

Wow what a way to end a story, I do wish that Rarity had a chance to talk to spike but any way wonderful story Prane and keep up the good work!

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