3349169 Well... wasn't supposed to be an exciting start. Was meant to give him a bit of a background, and not just throw him into equestria in the first chapter. He get's into equestria in a few chapters. The first chapter and a half is story, next is combat, then equestria if u want to know

3349181 Honestly I enjoyed the fact that he wasn't in Equestria within the first chapter. It's nice to see a build up to him actually being there.

Looking forward to more of your work.

wow. two chapters? in one day? Awesomeness!

3351994 lol.... you should have seen my first two HiE's I have ever made. I put out like a chapter every 6 minutes. If you don't believe me ask some of my followers that have been here since the start.

3356280 I can prove that!

*poker face*

We need more!

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I like the AI.

YOLO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

How.....can he read the sign? In the show it was clearly pictographs how I ask you. I'll let the same language thing go because reasons but not him reading.

How could Jake kick in the door with a broken leg? Unless you explain that he has super human healing or his suit supported him it just won't make sense. Maybe just edit the AI scan to levels where he isn't screaming in pain all the time from walking on a broken femur or something.

6853054 He does have both super human healing, and the suit itself acts as an exoskeleton and provides additional support, this is all explained within a couple chapters

So how big is the ship he escaped on?

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There are so Many similarities to halo in this story so if I had to guess...
it was probably the same size as the life boats that left the pillar of autumn in Halo CE.
vignette.wikia.nocookie.net/halo/images/7/7e/1207190798_Lp-airbrakes1.jpg/revision/latest?cb=20080403024639
here is a reference picture.
I am just spit balling here so I don't really know...

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I was just thinking of Halo.

This should be good