...Jeebus, you just submitted this and they already approved it?

Well, I guess it is interesting. Can't really say much because not much was given.

one person dislikes without reading

Why are so many of your stories in the All-OC's group when the mane six are listed as main characters, that group is for stories where all the important characters are OC's

3195786 Yeah, it always happens

3195790 lol, I thought it meant All-OC as in all stories that revolve around an OC

Hmm... Can't tell enough from just this, but I'll see where it goes

The thing that annoys me about many sci-fi futuristic space stories, books, tv shows and movies is that the military ranks, procedures and jargon are almost always completely American regardless of how little sense it makes in the context. Every military in the world has their own and the unified forces of the world would draw from many different sources, if not invent their own.

3195841 I live in Canada.... and I decided to use the ranks from America just it just seemed more fitting....

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I would say otherwise, but you're the author (I'm actually also Canadian)

Ya think ya spammed this in enough groups?

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I put this in some groups, a few others put them in others, I think Pinkie might have only put this story in one. It isn't him!

My record for a submitted story... 2 minutes. First time I ever posted a story was 8pm est. didn't get appoved 11am next day, so I post mine about 2am so it gets posted around 4ish so people see it... 2 minutes later... But memories aside, decent story. But for the love of god you need someone to review your chapters. I ain't the best but ill give it a whirl if ya want

3195991 Well I tried fixing it up a bit. I refrained from saying, SAID all the time. I also changed it around so it feels better to read.

I.E. (before) I said back to him with worry.
(after) I say back to him with a bit of worry in my voice.

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Actually that ends up being a tense error. Said is past tense, say is present tense.

3214552 Yes I know, I was making the story present tense.

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Ah, my bad then. Long as you don't flip-flop between them.

3214558 I won't. But I did try to add more ways to end someone talking with something other than said or asked.

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Excellent. Don't forget how awesome action tags are.

"Gah! Why does everything have to be so frustrating?" The rough bark of the oak tree crumbled from the devastating kick.

3214578 Yep, also, the only reason it seems a bit slow or stale, is because I am making him look really loyal and hardened for his superiors. And when something happens (mlp involved) he will have certain reactions for it.

interesting but boring start

3349169 Well it's not supposed to be an exciting start, it's meant build up slow. Things pace up as the chapters progress.

too much show not enough tell

He left his uniform hat

His cover.

P.S. Yes! Jeans will be forever!

Aight. Could use some work, but so far, so good.