I am an 20 year old Brony living in Sweden currently hoping to get into University. One of my favorite hobbies are to write and that is what I do here on this site. Hope you enjoy :)
A Tale of Ponies And Fear is a collection of stories following different ponies as they deal with their fear and phobias. The phobias and fears are taken from real world settings and use accurate descriptions of what the fear/phobia is and how to deal with it.
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Capitalize !
Capitalize !
CAPITALIZE, GOD DAMN IT !
That said, nice.
Yeah sorry about the grammatical errors. I do try to do my best when it comes to grammar but even when I try its not the best since english isn't my native language. But thanks for reading and ill try to fix the grammatical errors :)
As the other comments have already mentioned, your grammar and editing needs some work. Besides the basics, like capitalization and whatnot, I'd say you also might want to remove your double punctuation.
Should only have one punctuation point instead of the 5 that you have down. I don't think even the double, "!?" is technically grammatically correct, though I think you could get away with having that since it is pretty common to read it.
Also your very telly and don't show a lot. Of course you don't have to have everything be show. There are times when tell is better, however since you don't have a lot of show I think finding a moment you think is one of the more important moments and then explore expanding on that moment. Really think about how you can go from something telly like, "i get up from the floor and start to run torwards my room with my colts tinker kit in my hooves" and then make that showy. Try finding some other stories where it takes the author really takes their time describing something. You don't have to make it overly complex, but by adding a little you can really make the moment that much stronger.
I have globophobia, i have never actually fainted of fright but that is because only my family know and i never go to any parties. If my parents force me to then, i say i have plans and that i am seeing my friends. I know it is hard, for both of us, and any other globophobic out there. It feels like the world is against you, but it's not, as this is a very common thing but still there are people who bully us and beat us up inside. My only advice is find friends, good friends which you can trust and stick with them. That way when a balloon comes you can tell them, they will understand and they will get rid of the balloon as you run a mile away. For some people you will grow out of it, for some there is therapy, but not for all. Just hang in there and know that you are not the only one who suffers from this phobia.
Wow that is a long post
And for the record i don't care about grammar mistakes