• Member Since 7th Dec, 2011
  • offline last seen Jul 15th, 2014

Pumpkin-dreams


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Out in the depths of the snow fields of the Crystal Empire, two ponies walk together, and one asks the other a question. It's a strange request, and one neither has ever heard before, but it still has power over their lives.

"Would you live for me?"

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 3 )

Though it was well written, there seems to be some information missing, background details. I will re-read it because i am just kind of checking it on my phone from time to time and may have missed something.

Hope there is more to come even though you said it was completed.

3187129 This was just a silly little ditty that had been bouncing in my head for a few days. At a guess, this is an in media res sort of thing.

Can you point out any specific confusions, though? Wasn't my intention to confuse.

3187312

Sorry about the delay.

There is nothing really confusing about the story. It is a matter of the characters. Who are they? why does the reader want to know about the characters? What is their motivation? That sort of thing.

I still haven't re-read the story as of yet, but i will. I have been a bit busier at the store today on the account that there are some people who have called in sick.

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