Make a wish on a shooting star and watch your dreams come true...
Being a princess is the highest honor Twilight could ever ask for, but even she can't help but miss her old, simple life studying inside the library. Part of her wishes she could just cast aside her crown and wings to rejoin her friends in Ponyville.
One night, while watching a meteor shower, a shooting star streaks across the moonlit sky. Twilight forgoes her usual logic and finds herself uttering her secret wish...
The next morning finds Twilight more than overjoyed; her wish had been granted! However, she was not the only pony affected. Realizing the ramifications of her rash actions, Twilight seeks to fix what had gone wrong. Under the watchful eye of an unexpected mentor, she must court her own friend to get close to her in the royal court and reclaim what has been lost.
Edited (extensively, and amazingly so) by jmartkdr and I HV NO FEAR
Okay... a very strong start.
You've got my interest. It's been a minute since I've seen a strong RariTwi story. Now let's see if you can keep it.
Shouldn't be too hard. I believe in you.
Very good, can't wait for next chapter.
Hey Flint, you should really advertise the story a bit more. A story of this quality deserves to have way more views than you have.
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Well, I tried. Let the haters come flooding in
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I can guarantee I will give this story 120% of everything I have. RareTwi is my OTP and they are my favorite ponies. If I fail this story, I have failed them and I do not deserve to be on this site anymore.
That's how determined I am.
I will not fail.
*Cears throat....*
"...."
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O snap stuff's going to go down
I feel bad for saying this, but this is the first of your work I've read.
Color me fucking impressed.
Very good, only error i can spot is "wreaking" when i think you meant "reeking" :) Looking forward to reading more!
DAMN YOU FLINT AND YOUR ABILITY TO GET FEATURED!
Prejudiced much? It seems a little contradictory that Rarity would feel this way about other subspecies of ponies while being as torn up as she is about being rejected by Canterlotian high society. She's upset that they judge one's worth by lineage, yet she has a preference for species, albeit to a lesser extent. I would say poor Rarity is getting an overdose of her own medicine.
The scene in which Spike demonstrated his commitment to the most important person in his life was sweet, but the following passage did to my optimism what missing the top step would do to my stomach. Why the hell are all six of his friends enjoying a picnic and meteor shower without him? It wasn't a girls-only outing, but a community gathering, yet there was no explanation for his absence.
I also recommend you fix this:
It's always nice to see him acknowledged and treated like an actual character in any Twarity fic, but his irritating absenteeism leads me to think he's going to be kept out of sight like some inconsequential minor character until his presence is required to move the plot forward.
Good thing Spike's Unexpected Growth Spurt updated today. I need something to take my good mood back up.
3190160 Tell me about it. I cannot wait to hear their excuse for leaving Twilight's closest friend behind.
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I have two points, which may or may not show up later. First, she was drunk. People aren't always nice when they're drunk. Good point though. It is a little contradictory, but the fact she actually slept with him shows it's not that big of a deal. Nothing wrong with having a preference.
As for Spike, he is still a baby dragon: he sleeps a lot. I suppose I should have mentioned that... I did mention the foals, but I should have clarified that included Spike as well. I can guarantee that Spike will be prevalent in the story as an actual character, not just a plot device so Rarity and Twilight can fall in love guilt-free (like so so many fics). He just went to bed early. Besides, I love Spike. He'll get love, no worries.
Thanks for the fix, I appreciate it!
3192361 The thing is, Spike hasn't been referred to as a "baby dragon" since season one, and it was only ever a substitute for lack of a specific age-definitive term. Furthermore, he only ever had a sleeping issue in one episode, and that was only for plot convenience. In Winter Wrap-Up, he stayed awake for well over twenty-four hours, working. If this is how you prefer to write him, that's fine, but I think you're just de-aging him for your own plot convenience. [this is where I would insert a shrugging emoticon if this site had one]
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Touche. I never said it was a sleeping problem, I just didn't write him in that particular scene. I haven't written much of him yet, so I think it's a little unfair you think I'm going to de-age him. On the contrary, I intend to do the opposite. He's matured immensely over the run of the show and I intend to honor that, not make him a walking deus ex machina. He deserves better than that.
However, I like that you're already critiquing these elements. Even if I thought about certain aspects already, you given me even more to ponder.
3190990 Oh damn he did!
GOGOGO!
So, I shall apparently take a break in the middle of judging your contest entry fic, in order to read a story that looks like it might have started as another entry for the same contest.
...Flintception?
Okay. I feel like I very much missed out on something.
Are there other fics that were required reading?
What horrific thing happened to Blueblood to provoke an absolute, complete personality 180? Being pranked seems less than satisfying as a reason. He's not even recognizable as the same person. And why is Fluttershy a cat (or purring, at least)? And I'm completely unsure if Rarity had a drunken fling with that guy, or signed some faustian bargain for her soul.
So, basically, confusion all around.
That being said, the ending of the chapter was a pretty badass cliffhanger. And a great way to use a reformed Discord to drive a story in unpleasant directions.
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A very, very horrible thing happened to Blueblood. Something traumatizing, but acceptable. It will be addressed directly, probably in a chapter or two. You'll probably love it. While the personality change seems... drastic, keep in mind two things:
One: Twilight has a higher status than him and isn't courting him, so he's less likely to act like an entitled ass (also because he can't whine to her for anything he wants, since she doesn't have power over everything like Auntie Tia).
Two: To be fair, I hate Blueblood, but in the Gala episode he expected Rarity to do everything she expected him to do (but in a much ruder way. She wanted chivalry, he wanted her to kiss the ground he walked on). In this story he's more of a dumbass than a plain ass. Twilight is practically the princess of friendship, so it's not completely implausible to teach him a couple manners.
Fluttershy isn't a cat
then again, Discord is Discord. Admit it, you'd pet a pony too given the chance. I know I would
I don't want to go into details because spoilers, but adults sometimes sign contracts before going down and dirty to avoid a legal mess. Wooing a drunken lady is a very, very bad thing to do. Don't do it.
Thank you for the comment, by the way. I liked the cliffhanger. If you think about it... Discord granted three wishes.
Wait... the RariTwi contest? That's the one you're talking about, right?
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The Writer's Group one.
You seem to love contests!
It might be fun to pet a pony. But I'd probably freak out if they started purring.
After The Best Night Ever the bar for Blueblood redemption is set high. He really is an ass, and people don't change easily, or drastically, in a short term without a huge shock. It's not that I don't think Twi can do it, given the time. It just seems like a huge change in a short period. Unless one were to explain that the whole thing at the Gala was very unlike him. And Blueblood is actually nothing like what we think. Maybe he just hates pretty mares chasing him for his crown, and makes them suffer a bit more than he should.
Getting a drunken lady to sign a contract for consent isn't exactly much better. 'Look. She was too drunk to consent. But she drunkenly provided this written consent! Please forgive the scrawled hornwriting and vomit stains.'
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(And one of TWG prompts were a wishing stone, I believe. Discord doesn't count, but it seems close now that I think about it. I only sent one entry to TWG)
I do! I saw opportunities to begin writing RariTwi fics, so... why not?
I loved that fic. Coincidentally, you've hit the nail on the head. Trust me, it was a BIG shock. Besides, Twilight isn't chasing him for his crown so he's not going to treat her like a gold digger. Plus, they ARE cousins now (sort of). Since Cadence is Celestia's adopted niece and she married Shining Armor... So to Blueblood, Twilight is family and royalty which puts her on equal ground with him.
She can't prove she was drunk
Unfortunately, victims of this kind of trickery don't always report it in real life... a sad fact, but Rarity isn't going to suddenly bounce back like nothing happened. Psychology my friend. 
Interest levels have been peaked!
*Clicks Favorite*
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3194278 I don't think I've ever felt so bad for Rarity before. My friend would kill you if he read this.
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Her wings hurt! 
You don't feel bad for poor Twilight?
3195348 Pfft. Shes fine. A quick little preen and she'll be good. She didn't lose her virginity
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Look mate, Rarity is my favorite pony.
Sometimes the greatest writing hurts the writer the most
3195365 Believe me, I am aware!
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However, I'm curious. What do YOU want to see from this fic?
3195383 I don't even know. More gentleman Discord honestly, but that's all I can think of.
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Huh, you're the first to say that
Gentleman Discord?
3195399 Would there be another way to describe a man of his caliber?
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Most people settle with hilarious or entertaining, but I suppose you are correct.
Here's a mustache
3195409 My hope is I'll portray him in a similar light.
And when Discord says hello to Sombra, oh boy....
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I don't know if that's going to end tragically or hilariously
3195440 Sombra and Discord absolutely hate each other, so when Discord sees Sombra trapped in Shining's crystal prison, he milks it.
There's a lot more exposition to that, but I've said enough, and don't want to sully your comment section to one of your more famous fics with it.
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Pft, it's fine. PM if you're in the mood for conversation. Besides, I won't consider this story 'famous' unless it was on TvTropes or something.
Though your story now intrigues me...
You sir, are incredible. This story is beautiful!
hehehe~ this shall be fun.
As per my attempts to be an active reader, here are my thoughts on what I read.
Your grammar and technique are good. The actual act of reading the story was fluid, requiring little effort on my part.
I spotted a number of elements that I'm sure will be used to good effect in establishing the conflict within the story, most notably, Rarity's denial by the Canterlot elite.
However, the entire 'court' scene did not sit well with me, enough so that I stopped after it.
First, there is the 'blessing'. As it is presented it should get it's own entire story. Think about what the 'nobles' reaction to that would be? The next day every pony would be lining the streets to get a blessing from the princesses. Giving it to one means that they would have to give it to all. The problems this would cause are immense.
Second, Celestia failing to notice Twilight's absence. More that she spoke to empty air than that she simply hadn't noticed before. It is reasonable for Celestia to not notice the absence, but a ruler with over a thousand years of experience would not make the gaff of speaking to a pony she isn't used to having at her side at all times. Now, a secretary or adviser who is missing, sure.
Third, Twilight herself. Yes, Twilight is neurotic at times, but by this point in the show she has a handle on it far better than what you portray. Then the doughnuts... Twilight is not Pinkie Pie, she has a sense of decorum and isn't so blind as to miss the room full of ponies surrounding her. When Celestia is present Twilight is always on her best behavior, even when they are alone.
Finally, Celestia dismissing Twilight. What? That was terribly done and completely out of character for Celestia. No, just, no. Celestia has been shown to always have time to speak with Twilight when something is wrong. At the very least she would have pulled her aside to speak privately.
I apologize if this seems in any way unkind or otherwise hurtful, that is not my intent.
Good luck with your future endeavors.
-Honey Mead
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Regardless of my thoughts, your judgment is fair and to be accepted with much thought. This is my first serious story here and I'm trying to do my best. I will make mistakes here and there, but all I can do is try and try again. Thanks for giving me something to think about as I continue.
I have a couple justifications I would make, but... eh. Nobody can get characterization perfect. I have never ever written Celestia before, nor have I read too much fanfiction of her. Fortunately she's not the main character(s) otherwise I'd be in a lot of trouble. I'll take that criticism in mind whenever she shows up again and make sure she's absolutely perfect. I apologize that didn't sit well with you. As for Twilight's absence, I'd assume that the Princesses have some sort of shifts. Twilight wouldn't be present the entire time because she's still young and inexperience and has 'princess studies' to do during the day. Luna was there, but she's the Princess of the Night so it's obvious she won't spend the entire day at court. I can't explain everything from the get-go (because pacing, that's why), but I WILL touch on how exactly three princesses share the same court.
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As for the blessing, I suppose that is going to be a big deal. That'd make an excellent plot point, wouldn't it? Celestia just couldn't say no to such an adorable filly, could she? In fact... thank you. I might have to use that.
As for Twilight, some of things you've mentioned I'd touch on later. I just hope it's not crippling right now... She's my second favorite pony, so I understand her a little bit, but not nearly as much as Rarity. I guess I accidentally wrote a 'Lesson Zero' moment. Personally if I was stressed and hated my job I'd get donuts too.
My rebuttal:
She forgot the ponies there were for court and was looking for the prince. Twilight CAN forget things (*cough* lesson zero*). I assume the castle is bustling with business for the entire day unless the Princesses empty the main hall. This is my interpretation and it's not that unreasonable, considering that many monarchs in Earth's history never had any alone time since the moment they woke up (yes, I have done my research).
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My point about her absences was more focused on how Celestia wouldn't yet be used to having her there, it would be much more likely that she would forget Twilight's presence than her absence. For instance, after Luna gives her blessing Celestia tries to shoo the mare away only for Twilight to step forward and catch Celestia off guard.
(I wouldn't expect you to explain how the court 'shifts' works unless it was paramount to the story.)
As to the last point...
This shows that Twilight already knows she is late and is surrounded by nobles. Whipping out a box of doughnuts and going to town is not something a perpetually on edge pony like Twilight would do. Though if I'm completely honest, I find the idea that she would be late for court odd. It would fit much more with her personality that she is there an hour early having forgone sleep to be there and then Celestia forcing vacation time on her because she is overworking herself.
-Honey Mead
I believe that this story, regardless of the small mistake when Twilight knew she was late and ended up forgetting about the courting, is going to be a great one. I got to the end of this first chapter and almost punched my computer because i was wanting to read more of it. Flint Sparks, I think you are doing an outstanding job for your first serious story. Keep writing more because i believe that this story is going to go a long way with getting a lot of views and likes. Excellent job.
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Well thank you for your criticism. I can use your input to avoid these silly mistakes in the future. I might rewrite this chapter later, but I should probably focus on continuing it.. Seriously though, thank you. I really appreciate someone pointing out holes in my story. I'm not perfect, but I will only improve as long as there are people like you knocking me off my high horse (no pun intended).
Hm, I guess I should have made it clear who she was talking to....
As for Celestia, I suppose you have a point. Maybe, maybe not.
Twilight forgot a friendship letter one week, just pointing it out. She can forget something related to the princess at times, and if that happens she gets really stressed out
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Thank you! 
Note to self: never make a wish around Discord
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Are you kidding?! That's the best time to make a wish
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Nice chapter. I can't wait to see what happens next.
I like were tings goes. Fave and likes.
I haven't read a word of this yet, but it sounds AMAZING
OMG! Faaaaaannnnnntastic!!
Rarity agrees indeed; darling! 
More??
You favourite my story, I favourite yours!
It's all just one gigantic, unending circlejerk.
But seriously though I really like the premise, I'm fairly certain as to where this is going as I'm sure many others are too.
Anything with Rarity and I'll come running, and when it's Rarity Shipping? You must know what I like.
So great job mate, can't wait for the next chapter
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Suffice to say, you don't see it often.
*rubs hands together, chuckling*
Oh, sure. Everyone can see where it's going now. Oh boy, I'm super hesitant to do what I'm about to do.
Certainly looking forward to updates. This should be an interesting ride.
I'm not sure why you would have Rarity lose her virginity to a one night stand on the brink of this story—unless it becomes really important later. Indeed, the whole notion of virginity and its loss as presented here is clearly patriarchal in nature, and certainly not something I would expect in a society that seems very much matriarchal. Rarity losing control (among other things) seems out of character, and if the point was to make her miserable, I would think the declined invitation should have more than enough, as it effectively hems (heh) her in, socially. I hope I'm not reading too much into it, for surely slut-shaming (internalized or not) is not your aim here?
The nature of nobility (if it exists) in Equestria is a thorny one. I'm certainly willing to accept it as existing as a remnant of older times. Additionally, it seems clear that there at the very least is a bourgeois or parvenu class, e.g., ponies like Filthy Rich or the Oranges, that would take to a talent like Rarity. In a world where Canterlot is dominated by nobles, Rarity should probably set her sights on Manehattan instead.
The notion of the blessing was a good one, and the scene at court unfolded beautiful, at least until Twilight arrived. That did push my suspense of disbelief pretty hard. She could just have been late, and completely frazzled over that, without having to drag doughnuts and Blueblood into it. Unless Twilight is of noble birth (my personal head canon maintains she is—babysat by a princess, a royal protégé, and her brother captain of the Royal Guard? Come on!), the nobles would already hate her for having ascended, much more so than any commoner. Twilight is not used to being disliked, and the rancor of the court nobles should be enough to throw her off.
Discord was unexpected, but welcome. I presume that he will have a pivotal role in the tale, being of assistance to somepony who is probably about to lose her wings
All in all, I like where this is going, I have a few concerns, but I will certainly be following your updates. Rarilight is a wonderful combination.
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I'm still working on the next chapter, but I do want to address something. No, I am not slut-shaming. I would never do that. Ever.
I might have unconscious bias toward other people just like anyone else, but I would never stoop that low. I might roll my eyes at people who wear their pants low and say things like, "Hashtag Yolo!" but I'd never, ever go that low.
tl;dr: Slut-shaming is bad. Period.