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Twilight and Celestia have been at odds for a few years now, but they have always just stepped out of each others way. But the arrival of a new alicorn may ignite the final spark needed to start war between the two factions and tear all of Equestria apart in the process. One thing is certain though. Lives will be changed, bonds will be tested, and somepony won't be walking away.
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I like it...may i have some more?
~nightmare
You cannot have more than one character speak in a single paragraph. When someone else has something to say, you need to start a new one.
I shall do my best to get more chapters out there.
Last paragraph-first sentence-second word is supposed to griffons.
Its proper grammar to start a new paragraph for either a character talking(or thinking) or when you start a new topic. Helps make it look more refined.
Yeah. I was speed editing. Bound to be errors here and there.
Something I've been noticing a lot is the big OOC ( Out Of Character ) moments. A lot of people dislike that very much.You might want to fix that. Unless this story takes place after the show, then go ahead, make them how you want them.
Lots of grammar mistakes ranging from not capitalizing you single I to not capitalizing names.
I also saw a few spelling mistakes as well. I suggest re-reading and editing.
So is this story gonna continue?