A story of My OC.
Officially Reworked(Again)
Part 1 of 3.
Magmadia was a unicorn in a family of Pegasi.
She loved her sister and father, but she could never see eye to eye with her mother.
Sometimes this lead to rude comments from Magmadia, but one day an all new level was reached during a mad spell that changed the Faratea Family forever.
Especially for Magmadia.
This is the story of Magmadia Faratea, a unicorn in a family of pegasi.
Most notably else in this story is my second OC, her little sister, Lavidia, who's a pegasus.
After the events she would discover things that most ponies would fear iff they knew what it were... but what Magmadia befriend this? Or be destroyed by it?
As she is out on her own, things are getting a lot worse back at home, especially with how psychotically maniacal Magmadia's mother was getting.
Yeeeeah...No. That was...not good. I'm being blunt yes. But that's how it came off to me. Mag is a little shit that needs to calm down. Though I understand her anger she's still an angry little twit. No to mention the fact that she sent her father out when that obviously would've been the better Idea.
Her mom is the sterotypical villian parent.
Her dad is a spinless pansy. Seriously. If her mother threatened him like that "Make our oldest daughter hurt our youngest daughter or I take the one I want you to hurt and leave" Fuck that. He could have EASILY called authorities against her.
The names are all too human for it to read like a proper pony story.
Her little sister (Who's age is unknown aside from being younger) is completely oblivious to her sisters anger and pain. So unless we get some set ages I take it as her being a bit of an idiot.
Back to mag. GOD I dislike her. She complains about everyone who doesn't shower her with affection it seems. She even constantly complained about her sister, who she knew was innocent.
Overall...Yeah...not a fan. It read well though.
Also, try to put the description somewhere in the story itself. People like to have their curiosity peaked by short descriptions rather than the entire story intro.