Eventful Morning
I awoke bathed in the first sunrays of the morning, fluttering my eyes open and stretching a bit as I tried to brush off sleepiness for good.
I had a strange version of a recurrent dream, but other than that I really had a wonderful sleep. I felt energized again and ready for the day! I was going to eat just a bit before exploring a bit this country and its secrets. I told them that I would be around for a few days... but I didn't say that I was going to be inside a stuffy castle all the time!
I got up and was ready to take off but suddenly I felt something... odd. I looked around me and sure enough something felt out of place, and familiar at the same time. Interesting... I wonder what caused this?
I shook my head and cleared my mind. Whatever it was, it left long ago. I decided to graze some grass for breakfast as I thought for my travel plan for today. If I was quick I could be able to see one of the forests I saw south from here... but the mountains were pretty interesting too. There was something shimmering beyond them and I wanted to see what it was. Maybe some kind of mineral formation? Meteor impacts and time can create some of the most impressive natural landscapes I know. With my connection to all life in my planet, I had to hear many times from my son and his people questions as of why I cared for lifeless things like rocks and crystals, and many times I asked back this. Why shouldn't I? After all, minerals are also part of the natural kingdom.
I was pulled out of my reverie when I heard a loud gasp and the sound of hooves approaching me.
"Oh no, no! I will not tolerate this!" said a masculine voice as it got closer to me. I turned my head as I munched on the grass to see who it was, and surprisingly it was the unicorn with the veggie problem from the other day.
"Good morning, small one" I told him as I ate, making him stop in place, surprised.
"You talk?" He asked before shaking his head and frowning at me "You cannot talk with your mouth full of food, that's improper for a lady! And eating grass from the ground!"
"Why not? It's good, you need to taste it some time" I told him as I took another bite.
"Because I say so! And as a prince of Equestria I will not tolerate this kind of behavior in this castle! Go, go to the dining hall and ask for a proper meal. Move I say!" He told me as he pushed me towards the castle. I didn't put any resistance to his efforts. It was cute, really, trying so hard to move me.
"You are a prince? Are you Celestia's son then?" I asked with curiosity. He just kept pushing me with all of his might.
"No... she is... my auntie... and you will not... insult us with... your uncouth... manners..." He said, getting tired of pushing me. Aw, poor dear... I moved on my own a bit to not hurt his pride as we went towards the hall. Thankfully he knew the way because I was already lost in the labyrinth of corridors as soon as we put our hooves inside the building.
"So... what's your name, little one?" I asked him with a polite smile. He just huffed and blushed a bit.
"I am Prince Blueblood... and I am... not little..." he replied in a childish way. Oh my, I can see why he was yelling at me the other day... or at least I imagine it was because I ate with a little bit of enthusiasm.
"Oh, that's a nice name, dear. I'm Gaia" I told him as I watched how the guards looked a bit incredulous about what was happening in front of them. Truly these ponies are the strangest creatures I've ever seen.
"I've been... told..." He replied, still determined to reach the dining hall. It was just his bad luck that we were intercepted by Cadance at the doors of the room.
"Oh! There you are! We've been looking for you, Gaia. Did you sleep well?" She asked.
"I slept wonderfully, thanks for asking. Young Blueblood here was just showing me the way to the dining hall" I told her, making her a bit confused.
"Cousin Blueblood?" She asked, looking as the young prince tried to look as proper as a pony can look while sweating a bit.
"O-of course, cousin Cadance. Auntie Celestia told me at dinner that she was royalty from a far away land and that she has to be treated as one of our own. I don't even know why she was in the gardens at this hour but what I know is that breakfast is served at nine and it our duty as royals to assist to any social event in time. Tardiness is not acceptable!" He said making himself bigger by puffing out his chest.
"But you told me that I could not graze in the gardens because it was improper for a lady, dear." I told him as I patted him on his head. He just moved away and looked at me with that furious expression that he had the other night.
"Blueblood, you didn't!" Cadance said, a bit upset with the prince.
"I-it was the right thing to do, Cadence! What will the diplomats think if we let foreign visitors eat from the ground like mere animals?" He asked, leaving Cadance confused.
"What diplomats, Blue?" She asked, her face losing a bit of her color.
"You know, the usual ones Cady. They will be here for dinner and to present their respects to Princess Gaia... You look a bit pale, cousin. Are you alright?" Blueblood said, ending his exposition with concern. Cadence just stomped her way towards the dining hall while shaking her head, leaving us confused.
"Did I do something wrong? I just followed protocol." Blueblood said as we entered the room. I patted him with my wing on his head.
"You did fine dear. She is just stressed." I told him with a kind smile. He just averted my gaze and went ahead. The poor dear just acts all tough, but it's a softie inside. I just know it.
At the head of the table, all the princesses were talking very quickly and looked agitated. Oh my, so early in the day and already with some problem. They were too stressed for their own good. I just decided to sit a bit away and eat a daffodil sandwich.
It was probably nothing concerning me anyways.
These days it was just about Gaia time and time again.
"I just can't believe that Blueblood tried to do something right just to make it worse..." Cadance said to her fellow princesses.
"I already told you sister that you need him to find a proper job. This is what happens when he has so much free time between his hooves" Luna said with a frown.
"We need to work something out! Think about the political consequences!" Twilight said as she tried to calm herself with quick and short breaths.
"Calm down, Twilight. It's just a small setback. We just have to readjust our plan to a shorter timeframe..." Celestia said with her calm voice. Luna shook her head.
"We shouldn't be working out the fallout that your nephew just made with his incompetence." She said sternly. Celestia frowned at her sister's words.
"So when he makes a mistake it's only my nephew now?" Celestia asked as she raised an eyebrow.
"As long as we keep Gaia from doing something... not very appropriate for a room filled with diplomats..." Cadance said, trying to focus on the subject. All the princesses smacked their heads against the table.
"It's going to be one of those days, isn't it?" Twilight said with resignation.
"Good morning, princesses." Blueblood said as he sat on his usual spot.
"You! Why did you call for a diplomatic meeting without our consent?" Luna yelled at Blueblood, scaring him.
"W-what? It's just the usual procedure to welcome foreign dignitaries in our lands!" He retorted, looking lost towards the other princesses for support.
"While that is true you should have asked us first. You already knew that Gaia was a special case" Twilight said while nodding.
"But I did nothing wrong!" He said, looking worriedly towards Celestia "Right, auntie?"
"I'm afraid that you just made our work a bit harder without knowing, nephew" Celestia said with a sad smile as shook her head.
"I... I see..." He replied, looking down at his hooves.
"Nay, clearly you don not see the implications of your actions." Luna said sternly.
"Don't you think you are all being too hard on the poor dear?" A voice behind Luna said, making all of them jump in place.
Gaia was behind Luna's seat with a big smile on her face.
"How...? But you were..." Luna said as she looked at the now empty seat and back at Gaia "How did you do that?"
"Oh, you were being so loud that you didn't notice me, that's all." She said. "Now, what's this about young Blueblood and you all being so rude to him. For what I know he just tried to help."
"But when one tries to help usually it does not end in making it worse." Luna said, frowning at Blueblood and making him walk... behind Gaia? She just covered Blueblood with one of her wings as he hid from Luna by pure instinct.
"Now now... everyone makes mistakes. Don't you think that you are just overreacting?" Gaia asked with her motherly smile.
"No, I think not. We are going to be busy all day because of his actions" Luna retorted, making Gaia think about something.
"Well, did you have other plans, young Luna?" She asked.
"I was going to observe my planet but I think the princesses wanted to show you more of Canterlot." Twilight said helpfully.
"I still don't see the problem" Gaia replied, still smiling.
"Obviously if we are busy we will not be able to show you the city." Luna said as she nodded.
"Then Little Blue here should be the one showing me the city." Gaia said with a wide smile.
A chorus of "What!?" was heard in the room.
"It's obvious. You all are going to be busy, but you also said that he had too much free time. I don't see the problem" Gaia said as she got Blueblood between her wing and her barrel, getting a firm grip on him.
"W-what?" Asked Blueblood as he dangled his legs helplessly as he was carried by Gaia. The other princesses suddenly had a dark look on their faces.
"Sure... that is a wonderful idea Gaia." Luna said with a sinister smile.
"B-but..." Blueblood tried to say, only to be cut off by Celestia.
"It would be beneficial for both parties. I'm sure that the prince knows a lot of interesting places in the city." She said with a smirk.
"I..." The prince tried to say only to be again be interrupted.
"It will let Gaia and Blueblood time to bond and know each other. It would make an excellent friendship report." Twilight said as she rubbed her hooves.
"M-my schedule..." Blueblood said.
"Don't worry cousin. You will soon find that Gaia is a wonderful and funny pony to spend the day with." Cadance said with a sincere smile... which made Blueblood more scared from her than from the other princesses.
"We are going to have a wonderful day you and I. You will see." Gaia said as she nuzzled Blueblood, making the other princesses giggle like schoolfillies. "See you later, dears!" Gaia said before walking out of the dining hall, still carrying Blueblood in her firm grip.
"W-wait! No! Unhoof me! I can walk for myself! Blueblood said, his face red as a tomato as he tried to free himself.
"Silly little Blue, you are not between my hooves! You are between me and my wing!" Gaia happily said as he nuzzled him again.
A cry of agony could be heard in all the castle as the princesses laughed loudly in the dining hall.
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D'aww, bless Gaia. I think Blueblood will end up liking her a lot.
Gaia is too cute
HNNNNNNNNG!
lol wow I actually feel bad for blueblood
Little Blue... I can't decide if I should D'aaw or chuckle wickedly.
Yeah Luna. Ease up on him. Maybe go out and find a nice stallion. You know. The one that thinks you're kinda cute.
Gaia is too adorable, funny considering she is billions of years old!
Gaia is like that grandma that is so old that she's stopped caring about appearances, and yet still has a youthful outlook on life. I can so easily imagine her pinching Blueblood's cheeks if they were human.
I can easily imagine Gaia holding Blueblood with her wing while Blueblood is dangling a few feet off the ground, crying for help.
Now that the princesses got to know Gaia a bit better in different ways, it's Blueblood's turn to spend some time with Gaia. And he's gonna enjoy it one way or the other. 
5637863 I bet you that Gaia and Granny Smith would be best friends if they ever met.
IT NEEDS MORE!
Nice job updating, though!
I'm not sure whether that should be a cry of agony,due to the different areas in where we live.
5637935 It's his royal duty to know foreign dignitaries and royals, right?
5637978 Maybe you're right, I'll follow your suggestion
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WARNING:Foul Language
Couldnt help but grin at bluebloods predicament. More soonish please.
Congrats, Blue! You are now her new stand in for a son.
5637937 Now I can't stop imagining Gaia in a bunny suit singing to the water with Granny Smith...
Blueblood makes a friend! AWWWWWWW
This totally needs to end with Gaia taking Blueblood back with her.
Why do I get the feeling that Blueblood is gonna be revealing mommy issues soon?
Can totally see Gaia taking Blue on a wirlwind tour of Equestria.
Also I am starting to see Gaia as a milder version of aunt Mediah.
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agonic
adjective agon·ic \(ˈ)ā-¦gä-nik, ə-\
Definition of AGONIC
: not forming an angle
Pretty sure it means the same thing in any English speaking country.
>the princesses faces when bluey gets taken away.
5638206 That was a funny mistake. Putting the word "agonic" in the google translator resulted in "agónico", which is a word to say "in agony" in Spanish. I only used the translator as a quick dictionary and even for that it seems to be faulty
I'm sorry, sir, but I can't keep reading. I was enjoying the story up until the god who had created all things (as she states in one of the first chapters) because she was bored, starts spouting stuff about evolution. Its just too much of a contrast, especially when my own beliefs seem to be opposite of yours. I hope you do well with your story.
5638242 She didn't create all of it. If you read between lines it's implied that she created or helped to create about two or three things, one of those being the first trichordates that lately evolved into a sapient race. The rest of the living creatures just did their thing as time went on.
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It's sad to lose a reader but if you feel uncomfortable, it wasn't my intention while writing this story and I am sorry for that. Thanks for the good wishes and good luck to you for your own endeavors as well
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Ah well. You can't please them all, I guess.
All I can say about this story is that it is hilarious.
A great read so far for anyone looking for something light and funny. No clue where you are going with this story either so anything that happens will likely be surprising.
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If you want an adjective-based form, it's "agonized cry". ("agonic" is a word but it means "having no angle")
"An agonic cry could be heard"
Should be:
"An agonized cry could be heard"
:)
I'm sorry, but even with Gaia being as awesome as she is, I can't help but still think of Blueblood as a pompous prick.
5638442 A pompous prick that's a softie deep inside with an overbearing mother.
5638442 Blueblood's personality seems to be a lot like Prometheus'.
5638845 More of a unadopted foster mother, who he cant really tell off because she's a dignitary nor can he hope to fight or use guards to stop her. I am enjoying blueblood being turned into for a purposes a little foal for the foreseeable trip around the capital... ooh what this will do to his rep and the happy profit margins for any lucky paparazzi
Discord might as well be making it rain gold bars.
not only is blueblood in embarrassing position, but a visiting dignitary that's been un-photographed or seen or reported on by the news that shares the same physical distinguishes as the other princesses! ... I know one bearer of an element who will no doubt be buying a dozen papers and framing them in her room to get a laugh each morning.
I love this so much it makes me cry tears of joy
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Ahh, Google Translate... the humorous situations it has spawned know no end.
As for the word in question, the sentence structure you're looking for would be:
"An agonized cry could be heard in all the castle as the princesses laughed loudly in the dining hall."
Ha! I like this kind of personality for Blueblood. Not some pompous peacock, but a super strict by the book and to the letter rule follower.
Why does FIMFiction show me ads about Diabetes when something cute happens. :|
5640098 I know right
5637793 If she's so adorable now, imagine her as a baby doing this to stuffed toys. Anyone who views it will immediately get diabetes.
5640098 You have ads?
5640386 DAMN YOU FOR PUTTING THAT IMAGE IN MY MIND
HNNNNNNNNNNG *dead*
5640574 I am outgoing. FOLLOW ME! Or just you know, start discussion on one of my blogs.
Why does nobody ever comment!? They're supposed to be conversation starters!
I wish Gaia could actually help the changelings, maybe wander to their hive or meet the dragons or griffins or Tirek or Sombra. Buy I guess it woild still be interesting to see how the upper class ponies react to her.
5640581 Hey, it brings people back from the dead. It's a scene so cute the dead have to rise again just to see it. I would suggest turning away or closing your eyes if you don't want to be caught in a loop, though.
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Only on my iPad. :|
Poor blue blood. x)
I thought I could manage to keep reading this but, sadly, it seems your efforts to try harder and be more verbose are only making things fall further away from the mark. I can guess you are not a native English speaker because you say you are from Northern Spain but, I highly recommend you find a patient editor or spend more time looking up word meanings and verb tense. I hope I don't sound too harsh with these words because I am sincerely trying to be kind and not sound arrogant. I really was enjoying the core concepts of this story. It's just getting too tough for me to keep reading with some of the overly like minded points of thought between characters and parts that need an editor to work them over.
One of the strongest examples I can give you for my hope that you find a good editor is one of the final words of chapter 15, the last chapter I can manage to push through at this time. Agonic deals with angles. The word means that something does not form an angle. When used as a literary descriptive it is synonymous with words like disjointed and is more often than not applied to abstracts like thought or abstract concepts either on their own or in actions to describe the thought or meaning behind them. I think the word you might have wanted to use in it's place is 'agonized'. I hope I didn't make this explanation too tough to follow. Abstract descriptives and concepts are always tough to explain to someone that isn't a native language speaker.
If you can manage to find a good editor, I think they could help you polish this into something quite good.
So here's my thoughts on the story so far:
I absolutely love it! It's funny and interesting and lighthearted, with a few gems scattered throughout each chapter.
That said, however, you are in desperate need of a proofreader/editor. Your writing is amazing, but some parts fall flat, and there are numerous mechanical errors. I know english isn't your first language (despite that, you seem to have a knack for good diction) but I think it would help immensely if you had an editor or at least a proofreader to help you iron out some of the kinks.
I still love this story and rate it well, but maybe look at getting someone to do editing.
Hahaha loved this chapter, nice work.
Hehehe, it's hard to be regal in front of somepony, who sees everything as adorable and cute.