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I'm afraid there is not enough FUCKING NO in the world for me to express myself fully.
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Can you explain why no, and on what?
>Exie fanfiction
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I don't even care about the foal-fiddling...
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It was part of the Exie contest. So it was supposed to be an Exie fanfic.
3297130 Something of this for me. Also, I assume stallions since prostitution is mentioned. I won't downvote it though.
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They have weak stomachs, or something of the like. Or perhaps more morally righteous, which isn't a bad thing really.
EDIT: Nevermind, they seem to bear an overt distaste for the character...
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Foalcon. Rape. Incest. Molestia.
And, of course, Exie. There are no words for how much I despise that pathetic creation.
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I hope this answer was satisfactory.
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Well in her backstory. She was almost raped by her father (talked alot to Ijab about that); She was a foal when she went into Prostitution, and had an mare take her virginity. So it is up till Molestia accurate to her Back Story.
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I saw the link you posted.
Doesn't mean I loathe her any less.
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All of my this.
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Ah! Well thank you for posting your reason for down voting. It was appreciated.
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Which is a pretty bad reason for down voting, but at least two of the four gave a reason. In your opinion personally what do you think of the actual content? This was my first attempt at clop, and I don't know if it was any good. If the Triggers are against your personal taste. Thank you for commenting anyways.
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No Stallions. Ijab was very clear that he finds Stallions with Exie as disgusting so it's all Mares that have sex with Exie.
3297175 Oh. That's fine then. I can ignore the Exie for sexy filly foolin' and Molestia.
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Thank you. Also after you give it a go when you have the time. Can you tell me your personal opinion on the content? So I know what I can fix if I ever do clop again.
3297186 Sure. I'm down to chat about subject matter I actually enjoy.
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I won't comment on this. I'll try my hardest to restrain myself, so i'm not going to say anything.
And sorry, I would read it, honestly. I've seen horrible, horrible things to the point where i'm completely numb to anything sick, twisted or vile, so sexual abuse would not drive me away, but the story itself doesn't present anything interesting to me immediately at a glance.
I didn't leave a rating though; I reserve my judgement for when I actually read something. As of yet i've only dished out around 4 dislikes in my year or so on this site, because I read almost no fanfiction, and at times I occasionally drop by on poorly-written fics where the authors are honestly trying, but still struggling and help them.
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That's alright. Thank you for reserving judgement, and if you do ever get around to giving it a go, I'd be happy to hear whatever you have to say good or bad. Thank you for commenting, and have a good day/evening.
I like this you as a writer but I am going have give this story a pass it is just not my taste in and Will wait for Golden Wings to update instead. Good on what you write next.
''So I went to the Zoo, and saw my first Human'' yo that's bucked up
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That's all good. Next update to Golden Wings will be in about 4 days, thank you for commenting.
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True, but we do see horses, and zebras in our zoos. I personally blame it on Tirec.
3297554 and one more thing
please don't tell me that her special tallent is being a slut 
3297175 I was hoping for some straight action, but I guess not.
This was tough! I liked it!
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why are you slapping yourself mid-sentence
3297579 Her special talent is building up relationship with others, then selling them out, hence, the heart with a price tag for her cutiemark. Weird, considering that wasting your time to make someone feel special, build some kind of relationship with them, then breaking them to pieces to not only hurt yourself, but hurt others is a talent.
But I'm not one to judge.
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Technically it's selling herself out, not really others. But yeah it is a weird special talent, that is a one way ticket to heart break (Manehatten Mare shows just how damaging it is). It's one of the things that makes me interested in her interactions in Manehatten Mare. Both with her boss (who she changed her life, and used the "tricks of the trade" to help with business), but with Pinkie Pie whom she's willing to try stopping her old habits.
In your opinion, what do you think of the clop scenes? If you don't mind me asking. Anything that could be used to make them better?
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If you don't mind me asking. How was it tough in your opinion?
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I don't know. I'm one tough-as-nails guy, but the fact that her mother was such a bitch struck a chord in me. My mother isn't like that, though...
And the fact that she's being taken advantage of... Why?!
3299721 It's fine, but I just didn't feel much emotion. But it's not a problem really, since you're writing in a third person perspective. Also, I have not much to say, since I'm not a fan of lesbian sex. So to say, I didn't feel much aroused while reading through the clop part.
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That's alright, lesbian sex isn't for everypony. I'm glad that you at least gave it a go, and thank you very much for your time.
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It was part of the back story. Mistress takes ponies off the streets and trains them to be prostitutes in the original canon. In this fic, I talked about her being a little less ... predatory by having her have ways to get ponies to places where they'd be safe(r). But in canon Exie wanted to stay and ended up part of a child prostitution ring.
Seriously as hard is it is to read. Alot of this was just as hard to write, really pushed my limits as a writer. So many firsts here, and yeah I hated her mother in canon and writing her really was painful.
3299772 Well, can't blame you. Ijab strictly prohibited shipping Exie with a stallion, so it's not your fault. And I can't blame Ijab, since he just loves his OC, and is overprotective over her.
I read this over last night, and damn it was hard to get through. It's emotional, it hits you right in the feels, and I think that is the problem for this as a clop story. This story is so grim and dark and senselessly cruel in the beginning that it's hard to enjoy the later clop parts. I felt bad for Exie and I couldn't get into the clop because I felt like I was contributing to her abuse, despite that the clop is fairly sweet and loving.
I think this is a sign of good writing though. I'm not into Exie as a character, and I don't read many stories with her, but reading this story left me feeling too bad to fap to her. All this story left me with is deep remorse for Exie, and then to read the extreme of everything going right and good for her just left me no middle ground to enjoy this. If anything, this story should have been broken into chapters, and maybe that would help with the range of emotions and feelings happening in this story. I'll up vote it, but this kind of clop (and I do enjoy foalcon) is too dark for me personally to enjoy.
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Thank you for that comment
. I agree this would've been better as chapters, but the contest was for a oneshot. I agree that going from abuse, to being emotionally used for older ponies sexual gratification is grim. Personally I tried to make the part of her life where she went from a traumatic past, into the sex trade was a hard one. But I hope that I at least made it slightly better than the official backstory where it was a random mare.
That being said, if I were to write clop later, do you have any suggestions to make it better?
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I'm not the strongest clop writer here, but one recommendation I would suggest is a solid build up that leads to the clop scenes. Anticipation for the readers will make the clop scenes sweeter, and then when the clop comes, you utilize all five scenes, doing everything you can to bring the reader into the scene, where they can shamelessly enjoy the content.
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I don't write this dramatic of a story, but I can see this going far. Ignore the haters, I think this story is very well done. This is the story of a little filly growing up. Sure, the Celestia part was a bit creepy, but that just shows the care she felt for the little filly who was locked in a room for 1,582 DAYS! Do you not get smacked in the gut by feels?
It is so sad. But maybe I feel it better because I myself was suicidal at one point. I'm glad Exie didn't feel the pain. At least, not in future. She doesn't need to fell any more pain, only the love we can offer. May she have my best wishes.
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Well said
, and thanks that was an awesome comment 
. I hope that life is doing better for you.
I must say I have read quite a few stories here on fimfic now. Some were bad, some were good but your story was great.
It was well thought out and made me want to keep reading more and more till I finished it. 
Now I'm just so sad know that it is done 
till the next part comes out. I can say this is one I will be looking forward to reading. 
Keep up the awesome job.
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Thank you
. Here have a cupcake.
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Wow, I, um, ... not sure what to say here. I'll give you the 'good work here' for 15000+ words. I think I even responded to a discussion thread that preceded this. It seems detached somehow, yet very ... there. Maybe it's just too late for me to be writing comments. I can honestly say I've rarely been left this disoriented after reading a fic. Congratulations, I think you managed to stump me on this one. You called it clop, I call it a text book case study in abuse and recruitment, plus some added weird at the end. (Not a Princess Molestia fan,
. I think the whole Holy Celestian Hexacock thing I read just gouged that part of my brain out. Yuck).
Final total:
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Yep that discussion was to get starting info on this. Thanks for the comment, and yeah it was basically delving into abuse, as for the whole recruitment thing. I borrowed a bit from Al Copone's personal saying w/ a bit of conditioning. (The saying being [paraphrased], "As long as you give generously to charities, noone cares what you do behind closed doors).
Add that to the fact that she gives a good front, builds trust, and even if they leave its too places she has investments in. She builds a sense that the young ones owe her. While making them feel it was their idea. It's grim, but it in my opinion feels more fleshed out than the Official Backstory's who simply brought them off the streets and brought them into the sextrade.
Again thanks for the comment, and I don't know if I should be proud that I stumped you, or should try to find out what to fix to make it less confusing. Have a good day,
-TheGreatEater
3301789 Thank you.
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Well clop might be the wrong term, but I don't know what bronies call a fic with sex in it, other than that one term. But yeah she really does have the worst past ever. Thanks for the fav
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I liked this. It was a nice slice of life story that was dark at first but ended happily that.
This feels oddly reminiscent of an OC I know.
There's not enough Exie fanfics out there. You sir, are now a god for writing this. :D
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Thanks
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This was your first clop like story? It was far better than most of the clop I've seen on the site so far.
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Thanks
, and yep this was my first clopfic.
Her special talent... is having sex. Ok... It's still a wonderfully written story, and I find it has great potential. She was abused as a child and has finally found where she belongs. I find it rather intriguing. And it's not one of those Foalcons that make want to go all
on the author.