That bit at the end where Twilight tried to determine what type of character Rainbow was - and Rainbow knew what she was talking about - was priceless.

Gonna echo that comment about the end. That was definitely the perfect way for the chapter to end, ahahaha. Also Dash having a thing for being covered in cum, yes plz.

This was so Japanese... I am highly pleased
I'm waiting for new chapter and new fetishes

Oooh, new fetish each chapter. I can't wait to see the wild depths this story could go to. It will be delightful. I love pretty much every fetish (except for things involving pain/blood) so I'll be pleased with every chapter no doubt. Keep up the good work please, I eagerly await more! Especially if you do a chapter on domination or control of any sort.

Oooooooooooo, new fetish per chapter, sweet!

Evil writer. I was in the middle of doing my precal when I got the notification email. Now guess what?
I have to start over on a new packet, because this ones trash.

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Well, I don't know what a precal is, but I guess I'm sorry?

I am so excited for the next fetish!

For a second, I thought it was going to be Macintosh but then I thought 'Don't want Twilight developing phallophobia'

And here I thought that the "I import Japanese dating sims" thing from the last chapter was just a throwaway line. Silly me.

The bit at the end with Twilight going through a list of renai archetypes sounded more like Pinkie Pie, really.

Time for some sexy-sex times.
Today has been a good day.

Later...

This was wrong. This was so very wrong. She was watching a girl she barely knew have sex with a boy she had a stupid crush on while she masturbated. It was so wrong.

She loved it.

I like the way you think, Twilight.

Also, keep writing like that and you can use as many commas as you want.

Oh my gosh you guys. I wrote Rainbow Dash having sex with a BOY.

I hear you, this feels so weird somehow. XD
But very good too. Kinda Like Twi enjoying watching a girl she barely knows having sex with the boy she has a stupid crush on and masturbates to that scene. XD

The difference between Tsundere and Kuudere is pretty easy though RD is clearly a tsuntsundere. XDDD

And nipplerings?! o.o
Don't tell me Twi had pirced her vagina too? O.O

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You've never seen a nerd try to categorize real life through pop culture references?
Am I the only one who does that?

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Never doubt me. Not for a second.

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I'm never writing anything with genital piercings. They're one of my surprisingly few turn-offs.

Second chapter, brilliant again!
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I can't help myself here...

“Well duh. Not every girl gushes waterfalls at the mere sight of you.”

BUT BRAEBURN DOES!

Aww, and I was hoping for some hot TwiDash action...oh well, we'll get to that soon.

good stuff, a bit quick. but no complaints.

Lovely. I'll admit first I was disappointed -- Dash going girly, and I thought for Twilight -- but you recovered from that nicely with even Dash noting it didn't quite fit her usual mode. Then, of course, Dash's demeanor during sex -- entirely unsubmissive save for that one little detail of her not wanting to admit she likes facials.

(Please tell me there's going to be a strap-on later. Dude, seriously, there's just not enough of that on the site.)

Not a complaint, per se, but a suggestion -- you may want to consider starting Twilight off by realizing her hand's cupping her pussy, instead of her subconsciously getting two fingers deep. Partly, it's not as easy to subconsciously do that as you might think IRL, and partly because that'd make her a dirtier girl for not stopping at just pressing a warm hand to the outer flesh.

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Well, maybe I was trying to make her dirtier by making her go that far without realizing it.

And I'm sorry to disappoint you, but there are absolutely no strap-ons in this story. Especially in the next chapter. They don't use a strap-on.

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Or do we? Dun dun daaaaa!

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I meant more like "getting two fingers any depth is usually really hard to miss". To paraphrase Demetri Martin, when an object is inserted in your body, it tends to stick in your memory.

Well, I'll still be reading, but . . . sigh. What could have been. (Besides which, Dash strikes me as the sort who enjoys penetrating, but, eh. Not my story.)

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Yesssss... no insertions... hehehe.
Nyahahahaha...
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHHHH!
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Notice the difference between "insertion" and "penetration".

I'd be fascinated if this fic involved no insertion somehow, I'm simply disappointed to learn it will have no penetration by Dash of Twilight.

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I don't believe I ever said that.
I just said there's no strap-ons.
Sly wink.

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I'm going to hope against hope we're not talking Magic Futa!, and if you decide to do that, well...I'll probably just skim that chapter. No offense.

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You'll just have to wait until Monday to see where I'm going with this.

I'm pretty sure Twilight was teasing Rainbow at the end... much like the author's teasing us in the comments.

Didn't notice anything wrong with the commas. Great story so far!

The best line of this chapter was obviously

The fuck are those?

I get a chuckle out of that every time.

What's The Difference Between a Tsundere And a Kuudere Anyways?

Tsundere pretends not to be interested, Kuudere either has really tight control over her emotions, or no emotions. Think Raven from Teen Titans.

Dash’s red eyes met Twilight’s purple. “That’s fucking hot.”

Technically, Rainbow's eyes are pink.

Twilight gasped, her eyes shooting wide open. “Don’t tell me you’re a yandere?”

Wha-no!

Well I mean sex between male and female are always be hot since I don’t find lesbians hot

“To fuck my cunt so hard you leave bruises .”

Oh my god I love this quote

Soaring was leaning over Dash’s slim body, suckling on her breasts as he continued to thrust into her. Dash’s fingers ran through his hair as she made shorts gasping sounds in time with the thrusts.

This is like the first porno i havent read anyone kiss yet like what

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That definition isn't quite right...

A Tsundere acts angry and belligerent to their love interest until they warm up.

A Kuudere acts cold and emotionless towards the love interest until they warm up.