All mares in Equestria go through a very special time every now and again. In these stories, we will see a few lucky people who get to experience these moments first hand.
Wow…that was extremely sad, and she is actually going to let him die? She is really going to drain him until he die? Boy I hope Cadence find him before its too late and help him restore his power
Maybe she could prove she's changed by getting him medical help.
I would also like to mention that the part about how he would eventually die freaked me out more than it does most of the other readers because my brother's name is Justin.
Just want to make sure we don't miss the portal back to Earth. We'll have to wait twelve hours for the next one if we do.
Mystery solved! Also, called it last chapter
Number two: Nice thinking, following the novel format you did with the Derpy chapter. Are you planning on transitioning to this style for the other chapters, or is it going to be an occasional thing, like when you've got something you feel deserves it?
"You're here to have sex with mares you, asshole!" Justin's temper now was starting to flare, but he still found the whole outlandish double standard to be too hilarious to not let out another laugh.
You have a comma out of place. It has to have been jumbly finger syndrome. It should be "You're here to have sex with mares <comma> you asshole!" Not, "You're here to have sex with mares you <comma> asshole!"
3471181 Well I am glad you like this Chrysalis story then.
3471210 I know, is sad Maybe one day she can find like an immortal dude to give her all the love she needs.
3471439 Ehhhh, I have never been sure if she would be an Alicorn either really. I just know she has wings, and a horn, and is very powerful. This would just make me assume that she is at least some kind of Alicorn.
3471475 Friad so. Unfortunately Chrysalis is still a villain that shows no signs of reforming. She uses those that love her to her advantage, and to get what she wants. Our poor Justin is just another in a long line of souls that got sucked in by her beauty and charms.
3471667 Well, let's just hope your brother Justin isn't actually having lots of hot sex with a Changeling queen! If he is, he might be in trouble!
3471853 I'm sorry, but what do you mean by "novel format?" Not sure I understand. And yes, you were correct about the portal(s)
3471777>>3471961 Zecora will be getting her own chapter. Not sure when, but she will be having one eventually.
3472152 Gilda is also going to be getting a chapter at some point. I have some of it planned out already, and that poor Human is going to be in for a ride!
3472225 Thanks for the catch, I will go fix that now.
I really like this one. In addition to the great clop its just a damn great take on Chrysalis. She isn't so much evil as she is a changeling, and while that may make her your enemy it doesn't make her a 'bad guy'.
3472715 It was a bad choice of wording on my part. I was referring to the way it's written--a story of almost novel-like proportions.
Looking at the word count, The Chryssi chapter is actually about the same lengths as the other, so I'll have to retract the statement. Maybe I'm defining this stuff by how small the scroll bar is on the side of my screen
I guess Perry's "crazy" theory was right after all :P oh and could you PLEASE call the next human Thomas? It would freak out my friend to see his name in this!
Clop with a sorta dark/tragedy enterpretations thrown in. I like it. It adds emotion. Also, at first, I thought this chapter was going to be about Zecora.
Life draining aside, Chrysalis is still my number one choice, with Luna in a very, very close second. And this Chrysalis seems to follow that succumb rule. Guess there would be a few less creampies!
3473025 Yeah, I always thought the Changelings have gotten a bad lot to deal with. Even if they didn't want to be villains, they kinda have to just to survive.
3473548 Oh I am not sure really. I know one shots are kinda supposed to be under 5k words, but I just tend to write until I think the point has been made in any given scene. Here lately that has put most chapters into the long shot range. It's fine though, as long as readers enjoy it, they will be however long they need to be.
3474057 Well the next Human's name has already been decided. I see no reason why the next one after that couldn't be Thomas though.
3479884 Glad you are enjoying all the chapters! Keep reading, and I will keep writing!
3482163 Yes, dirty talking Fluttershy is super sexy, and cute!
3487936 Well, I am glad that you found her likable. I often find myself feeling bad for the Changelings really. Having to steal love to survive. Must get pretty lonely sometimes.
3488108>>3488842 Zecora will be getting her own chapter soon. Just kinda need to do some writing practice on her rhyming to make it sound decent, and sexy too.
3490070 That's all on me. I have always refereed to my GFs, and wife as "baby." Guess it just sounds endearing to me.
3500619 I think even a massive fighting robot would fall victim to Chrysalis's charms. So is too hot!
3522887 You know honestly. I have never once been on Reddit. I don't actually know what that is for.
3556941 Well, I am glad that the stories could give you a break from good ol Sunbutt. Don't worry though, her chapter will be coming soon enough, and I hope you like it.
Don't worry, author, your story has made another thing pretty hard too.
Oh stop you.
3560557 Thank you. I know they are just one shots, and a lot of people see them as just clop. But I do try to get at least a little bit of story in there. Though I will admit the Derpy chapter has more than the others will.
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If I'm honest that was a supermassive turn off, and she doesn't love anyone but herself,changelings have a more self-centric nature than most humans, damn parasites.
Feels and clop, good job.
I don't usually like Chrysalis clop, but this wasn't half bad. Nice work.
poor chrysalis, always cursed to remain alone.
Is she really an alicorn, though? I'm not sure if she counts.
nodding my head to this chapter
sorta read this while playing fall out new vegas
Wow…that was extremely sad, and she is actually going to let him die? She is really going to drain him until he die? Boy I hope Cadence find him before its too late and help him restore his power
nice chapter. a tad sad at the end, but still good. keep writing those !
Maybe she could prove she's changed by getting him medical help.
I would also like to mention that the part about how he would eventually die freaked me out more than it does most of the other readers because my brother's name is Justin.
I expected Zecora when I saw the title and the everfree, but I really do like a good Chrysalis story
Two things.
Number one:
Mystery solved!
Also, called it last chapter
Number two:
Nice thinking, following the novel format you did with the Derpy chapter. Are you planning on transitioning to this style for the other chapters, or is it going to be an occasional thing, like when you've got something you feel deserves it?
Another romantic, yet pretty damn dark chapter. Also, I expected Zecora. Maybe a future chapter.
Do Gilda! Do Gilda!
If that's alright
I found a hiccup.
"You're here to have sex with mares you, asshole!" Justin's temper now was starting to flare, but he still found the whole outlandish double standard to be too hilarious to not let out another laugh.
You have a comma out of place. It has to have been jumbly finger syndrome.
It should be "You're here to have sex with mares <comma> you asshole!"
Not, "You're here to have sex with mares you <comma> asshole!"
Otherwise you've done good
3471107 Thank you!
3471181 Well I am glad you like this Chrysalis story then.
3471210 I know, is sad Maybe one day she can find like an immortal dude to give her all the love she needs.
3471439 Ehhhh, I have never been sure if she would be an Alicorn either really. I just know she has wings, and a horn, and is very powerful. This would just make me assume that she is at least some kind of Alicorn.
3471475 Friad so. Unfortunately Chrysalis is still a villain that shows no signs of reforming. She uses those that love her to her advantage, and to get what she wants. Our poor Justin is just another in a long line of souls that got sucked in by her beauty and charms.
3471667 Well, let's just hope your brother Justin isn't actually having lots of hot sex with a Changeling queen! If he is, he might be in trouble!
3471853 I'm sorry, but what do you mean by "novel format?" Not sure I understand. And yes, you were correct about the portal(s)
3471777>>3471961 Zecora will be getting her own chapter. Not sure when, but she will be having one eventually.
3472152 Gilda is also going to be getting a chapter at some point. I have some of it planned out already, and that poor Human is going to be in for a ride!
3472225 Thanks for the catch, I will go fix that now.
Is Twilight going to count as an Alicorn?
I really like this one. In addition to the great clop its just a damn great take on Chrysalis. She isn't so much evil as she is a changeling, and while that may make her your enemy it doesn't make her a 'bad guy'.
Okay, this is the best one by far. I enjoyed the introduction and the ending blew me away. Very nice.
3472715
Yeah, but they all have wings and horns. The changelings, I mean.
3472715 It was a bad choice of wording on my part. I was referring to the way it's written--a story of almost novel-like proportions.
Looking at the word count, The Chryssi chapter is actually about the same lengths as the other, so I'll have to retract the statement. Maybe I'm defining this stuff by how small the scroll bar is on the side of my screen
I guess Perry's "crazy" theory was right after all :P oh and could you PLEASE call the next human Thomas? It would freak out my friend to see his name in this!
Clop with a sorta dark/tragedy enterpretations thrown in. I like it. It adds emotion.
Also, at first, I thought this chapter was going to be about Zecora.
Life draining aside, Chrysalis is still my number one choice, with Luna in a very, very close second. And this Chrysalis seems to follow that succumb rule. Guess there would be a few less creampies!
3472899 Yes, Twilight is going to be an Alicorn.
3473025 Yeah, I always thought the Changelings have gotten a bad lot to deal with. Even if they didn't want to be villains, they kinda have to just to survive.
3473548 Oh I am not sure really. I know one shots are kinda supposed to be under 5k words, but I just tend to write until I think the point has been made in any given scene. Here lately that has put most chapters into the long shot range. It's fine though, as long as readers enjoy it, they will be however long they need to be.
3474057 Well the next Human's name has already been decided. I see no reason why the next one after that couldn't be Thomas though.
3479884 Glad you are enjoying all the chapters! Keep reading, and I will keep writing!
You managed to achieve the impossible: making Chrissy likeable to me. Good work, sir.
Please a Zecora Chapter!
Ok at first I thought it was a Zecora chapter, but after finding out it was not I still read it for the clop.
3488842
ew, i dont want any saggy african titty on here. zecora might trick the whitey into giving here money and chop his dollar.
"Chrissy is a super sexy villain that I am afraid any man would fall victim to all too easily"
Not a 250 ft brawler though :P
3482163 Yes, dirty talking Fluttershy is super sexy, and cute!
3487936 Well, I am glad that you found her likable. I often find myself feeling bad for the Changelings really. Having to steal love to survive. Must get pretty lonely sometimes.
3488108>>3488842 Zecora will be getting her own chapter soon. Just kinda need to do some writing practice on her rhyming to make it sound decent, and sexy too.
3490070 That's all on me. I have always refereed to my GFs, and wife as "baby." Guess it just sounds endearing to me.
3500619 I think even a massive fighting robot would fall victim to Chrysalis's charms. So is too hot!
3500897 Only if the pilots fall for her. The machine itself would have some difficulties with it
3489169
What the fuck, man?
My reaction to that intro: "Someone's been on Reddit"
It's soooo sad. But I'd still be happy dieing beside my wifu.
3518572 Glad you are enjoying the stories!
3522887 You know honestly. I have never once been on Reddit. I don't actually know what that is for.
3556941 Well, I am glad that the stories could give you a break from good ol Sunbutt. Don't worry though, her chapter will be coming soon enough, and I hope you like it.
3558745
Oh stop you.
3560557 Thank you. I know they are just one shots, and a lot of people see them as just clop. But I do try to get at least a little bit of story in there. Though I will admit the Derpy chapter has more than the others will.
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Thanks for all the awesome comments, reads and up votes guys. New chapters will be out soon!
Oh, I can't WAIT to see Celestia on here!
Can't wait for the Gilda chapter Who got their name in that one anyway? I know I put my name down, but I think a few other people did too.
3556941 Are you sure you aren't just getting harder?
Well, Black-Widows abound, eh?
Is Zecora going to get her day?
If I'm honest that was a supermassive turn off, and she doesn't love anyone but herself,changelings have a more self-centric nature than most humans, damn parasites.
that last paragraph gets me every time the feels
Damn these are still good, ain't seen an update in a long while though...