The Beginning
The Cutie Mark Crusader or CMC were all happy. After all they have everything they want. All of them have families. Up till recently, all of them have sisters. They are all best friends.Of course they'll be happy, right? But there is something wrong. Something is missing.
Scootaloo dazed off thinking of the great expanse of sky and how the air current in the acres of sky just made her want to fly even more. It had been a week with no sign of flight lessons from Rainbow Dash. Scootaloo didn't think much of it. After all the pegasus was very busy. As Scootaloo pondered of reasons why the cyan pegasus had not asked, Apple Bloom began calling her name.
“Scootaloo... uh Scootaloo? You there?”
“Earth to Scootaloo!” Sweetie Belle called.
“SCOOTALOO!” Apple Bloom and Sweetie yelled in unison.
“Huh? Oh sorry I must of dazed off...” She replied.
“Scootaloo what is wrong? This is the 5th time all week that ya've dazed off,” Apple Bloom questioned.
“I'm sorry girls I'm just kind of... distant,” Scootaloo answered.
“Distant enough to ignore even yer' friends in a CMC meeting?” Apple Bloom accused.
“Apple Bloom thats not it at all. I'm not ignoring you. I just..”
Apple Bloom interrupted, “Then what is it?”
Scootaloo suddenly felt very uncomfortable. She looked to Sweetie Belle with a pleading gaze wishing she would back her up. She just simply stared back wanting the answer too.
“I just...nevermind. Any ways its not your business,” Scootaloo responded. Suddenly surprised by Scootaloo's answer Apple Bloom tried to speak but was interrupted.
“So uh what cutiemark are we trying for?” Scootaloo asked changing the subject. Apple Bloom didn't like how Scootaloo was keeping secrets.
“An honesty cutie mark,” Apple Bloom said with a hint of anger.
“Hey it's my life I don't need to tell you everything I do,” Scootaloo said frustrated.
“I understand that but it doesn't mean you need to keep secrets from us. We're yer' friends for ponies sake,” Apple Bloom answered.
“This is personal though,” Scootaloo replied. She was starting to get aggitated. Its my life why does Apple Bloom need to know!
“WE ARE YER' FRIENDS IF SOMETHING IS BOTHERING YOU WERE THERE! SO WHY CAN'T YOU TELL US! YOU HAVEN'T TOLD US MUCH ABOUT YOURSELF EITHER!” Apple Bloom yelled.
“OH REALLY? LIKE WHAT!” Scootaloo yelled angrily.
“OH I DON'T KNOW PROBALLY YOUR PARENTS NAMES! ITS LIKE YOU DON'T EVEN CARE ABOUT THEM OR LIKE YOU JUST HATE THEM! YOU SHUN THEM LIKE THEY'RE DEAD! WE TALK ABOUT OUR FAMILIES ALL THE TIME!” Apple Bloom yelled. Suddenly Scootaloo was astonished. What did she just say?Why did she say that?
“Scootaloo I.. I'm sorry... I didn't...”
Scootaloo was trying to hold back the tears. She ran out of the club house wanting to be alone. Sweetie Belle was just standing there astonished of the fight. She didn't know who to go to Apple Bloom or Scootaloo. She just stared at Apple Bloom for an unpleasantly long couple of minutes.
It's a great fanfic, and it's very sad, but I highly suggest you get a proof reader or an editor. I have seen many mistakes, and I do understand this is you first story on FIMfiction, but they can give you advice as well as get rid of the mistakes. I would help, but I'm a bit busy on my schedule, sorry. But the ponies are so cute! Okay, that was sort of awkward. Well, good luck! I look forward to your future chapters!
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this story is so good
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yeah, i get what you mean, there's a LOT of stories with potential, but too little effort or just too many grammar errors, i don't wanna sound like a grammar nazi though so i hold my tongue, that and the story's difficult to follow
poor poor scootsy, you just had to mention scoot's parents didn't you apple bloom, but a good story nonetheless