Apple Bloom needs help with an assignment. Writers are supposed to have a 'voice' that is uniquely there', that sets them apart from each other. Of course, Apple Bloom won't have that voice at such a young age but how about somepony else? Someone older and wiser who already speaks in a voice that is distinctly his?
I thought it was pretty good, but I think a good sister scene to add is when AJ snaps at Applebloom for doing homework at the table she could have had a retort like;
"Alright, ah just won't do it then!"
or
"Would ya rather have me fail?"
As as sort of 'sibling rivalry' moment to help with the story's 'Slice of Life' feel.
I liked this story a lot. It captured what I imagine Big Mac's personality to be.
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I sincerely doubt that would be the case, since AJ is closer to a mother to AB then a sister
"But Applejack Ah need ta ask someone ta do it, it ain't like Ah got the paper n' pencil right here."
"Don't use yer fancy logic to muddy the issue."
"Why is everything fancy with you?"
Big Mac needs an episode this next season, I swear. I like this story.
I love stories that add a bit more to Big Mac's character. This was no exception. Good job! Faved.
Some good earthy lessons there that everyone should know.