Hiya, I'm Lucky! Lucky Narcissus Strikes, if we're being formal. Thanks for clicking on my face! Why don't you make yourself comfortable and I'll get us some tea?
It's been a year since you woke up in Equestria, memories missing, and settled into Ponyville. Your new, peaceful life is disrupted when, in a sudden burst of nervousness, Rarity declares your mutual love for each other to impress a famous designer! Now forced to act madly in love, the two of you begin to grow closer by the day. Eventually you can't help but wonder- is it all part of the act, or are the butterflies in your stomach you get seeing her face every morning real?
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Not a bad premise--the classic, "Yeah, he's my boyfriend!" story idea that I saw a lot of in the eighties. Been a few decades, let's see what comes of all this...
Finally a multi chaptered Rarith x Anon that's no all about clop.
this is cute, romantic comedies are always a nice bit
Gonna say mistake. Rarity tends to do this out of the blue. She once claimed to be married to Spike to go to an exclusive couples only club. And now, I go!
This oughta be amusing.
Now this has gotten me greatly intrigued.
...Spikes gonna be pissed if he appears in this at all.
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Interesting...go on.
Well this is gonna be fun. Haven't seen this scenario in quite some time
Wonder how Spike's gonna deal with this...
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From where? The comics somewhere? Granted I haven't seen all of them, but this is news to me and I know to check that out!
6538998 If you listen to his fans... murder.
I don't normally go for Rarity stories, but I like this! You captured her very well!
This is the second story with the same premise I've read on this site. I wish there were more.
I immediately thought:
"His name should be 'Spruce. Spruce Mayne', who's parents were tragically pulled to their deaths when a torn hem on Maretha Mayne's dress got snagged on a hot air balloon. Her husband valiantly attempted to rescue her right down to the bitter end when the clothing ripped free and they both plummeted to the hard cobblestones of an alleyway below."
Hmm. Interesting premise. Haven't read a story that's done this before. And the first half of the chapter is adorable. I have to admit tough, I found the exact manner that the "we're a couple" thing happened...disappointing. It casts Rarity in a terrible light. It makes her seem shallow and unlikable.
I would have much preferred that they'd been playing like they had been at the start of the story, and then been overheard saying something that was taken seriously and then, say...published in the newspaper.
This story starts out showing great chemistry between Rarity and Anon. They're playful, they're happy, and their exchange is generally heartwarming. If Anon had simply pretended as part of that early piece of humor, to "rescue her" from her future as an old maid, and if she'd played along...all while being playfully silly and cute, you could very easily have had them pushed together in a way that was entirely heartwarming. Have them swept up together by circumstances, and both of them actually caring for one another and wanting to not hurt each other and as a result, plying along with it for the other ones dignity. And then each could slowly come to relize that they had deep feelings for each other, cue brief moment where they thought they'd be apart, then discover that they both share those feelings, cue happy ending.
That would be far more endearing than having Rarity simply be a manipulative starstuck buffoon taking advantage of her friend, and him grudgingly tolerating it.
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I considered their relationship being covered by some tabloid or newspaper without them knowing, or something along those lines, but stayed the way I went because they could simply deny this and wouldn't be forced to stay with one another, as opposed to a declaration of their love straight from the source. I also realized that writing Rarity into this situation would cast her in a negative light, but attempted to convey it was through the heat of the moment and her aspire to please her personal fashion hero rather than malicious intent and seeing Anonymous as easily exploitable. The fact that she disregarded his feelings so easily will be taken into account later in the story, however.
Thank you for taking the time to read my story and offering constructive criticism. I really do appreciate it.
Hey spike anon say
Yes anon? Spike say
I am in a fake relationship with rarity ok?
Spike yell nooooooooooooooooo!
6544189 But Batstallion just doesn't have the same ring to it. Or Batstud. Though if he referred to himself as the 'Dark Knight,' then that would be fine. 'Dark Night' would be fine and punny too!
6527636 Me, I'm thinking more along the lines of, 'damn, that mare moves fast! Who put the Nitro in her romance rockets!?'
This story seems very promising so far, can't wait for the next update
Oh dang, LNS wrote a story
ooooo!!!!
this could be funny. you are now tracked
This, was funny and Cute!
Keep it up, bro!
Tracking this!
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That's pretty much their reaction to anything where they think he should be involved just because Rarity/Twilight is or be the main character but isn't.
6771900 I have a fun game I like to play. Just substitute the words "my penis" for any instance of the name "Spike".
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Steel. Are you trying to slay me? Many attempts have been made in the past, and many more wish they could. But I think you're actually ahead in the running here. Instantly after reading that I burst into uncontrollable laughter from the hundred or so arguments I've had regarding Spike and the many more I've witnessed but was too disgusted to involve myself in.
6772005 Glad I could bring a little joy into your life. i.imgur.com/30Blc.png
This is somehow already awesome, it was really funny how Rarity snapped again only to be the friend of that designer.
I just hope this story has more than a few chapters, if it is going to be that funny all the time.
I would have more to say, but I have read this story at work today.
I think this is in my top ten of new storys, that well I found in the last two months.
Omgod I love it! This is gonna be good!
I'm lovin' this so far
Just a question: are the other mane 6 gonna be included at some point?
DED!
You keep using that word, "filly". I don't think it means what you think it does.
Filly is the name of a young female horse. As in, between child and preteen in human standards. And I'm pretty sure both Rarity and the waitress are mares.
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Girl refers to a young female human. It also gets used to refer to adult ones in a playful way. Probably the same general idea.
Aww... I hope that this story isn't left in the dust. Oh well at least the premise was a really good one even though its been sort of done before. Praying that this gets finished
I would like a new chapter.
I feel like I have 237 stories that let me wait rather long, but that's not your fault.
I really hope that this isn't another chapter where I suddenly read cancelled in the future.
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yeah, I'm really really sorry about no updates for almost an entire year
. Thinking about doing a rewrite at some point in the near future! It's been so long, and the set-up of the first chapter was pretty weak so it was difficult for me to figure out what to do next- I kinda just left it after a while. After I do some more writing I'll make sure to revisit it!
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I changed my mind and banged out a new chapter. Hopefully the next won't take a year!
Dat last line. More, please.
Sweet new chapter
FIrst thank you for the new chapter, I hope this is at least a middle long story, and if you start to have fun with it again, a possible sequel, if it is still fun in the end. (for us and for you.)
Okay I admit I didn't remembered him being the funny one, and not only the "I'm suprised in what kind of situation you got us"-guy.
However I can't wait till Rarity hopefully notices first that she maybe likes him to in the future.
To me he now looks like the guy who would more or less only notice her behavior, and possible interesst if he hears someone else making a comment on that. (Like....the way she looks at him...something like that.)
Please call him at least Nobody or something. (sorry just an old thought I share with some others, anc it happened to be this story where I felt the need to write it this time.
Well I pretty much liked this chapter, it was completely okay 'm just a bit stressed out from work/school.
puns! puns everywhere!
The White Saddle?
*Insert joke about Anon "riding" Rarity that evening here.*
Wonder what kind of stains she's gotten practice in removing...
Yes, dear. (You don't suppose she heard my previous comment, do you?)
It lives!
You know I always wonder, at the beginning it was establish that those 2 were good friends, hell Rarity invite him so she could have some laughs and a friendly face.
Both now they seem more like just acquaintances…hmmm must be the pressure and the situation Rarity throw both in. Is understandable, can't wait to see Rarity or him realising 'HEY we are still friends so why are we attacking one another all the time?'
And then calm down so they can come with a way to make the best of this situation, try to have a good time as friends and then work as a semi team. Boy can't wait for when Dash or Celestia finds out about all this and they have to think fast to keep appearance. I bet it will be funny if Celestia actually hug Anon and Rarity separated the 2 in a fit of jealous confusing Celestia into what is the problem…OR even better…Cadence.
P.S: the rest of the main 6 will appear or this is mostly just Rarity and the human time?
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oh, you know what kind of stains she removes... wink wink. nudge nudge.
Sweetie Belle's attempts at cooking food. Shhh, it's a secret.
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it's ok! it was just taking a quick nap.
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thanks for reading! this chapter was surprisingly easy to write. I'll try to get around to more soon.
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the two of them are feeling a little on edge, but not enough to turn down the back-and-forth. The mane six will also make an appearance at some point!
Random update appears!
Solid second chapter, and it only took *sarcastically looks at watch* a year. Crossing fingers it doesn't take as long for the next, cause I'm very interested on where you're gonna take it
Awesome! You updated! I really LOVED the first chapter and it was such an intriguing idea I wanted to see where the story goes. Unfortunately my PC crashed a while back with ALL of my data locked away and no way of retrieving my data for my stories (but luckily I backed up my stories on a Flash Drive so I can work on my tales again) but my PC isn't back yet so no updates in a while for my stories.
Getting off track here.
I'm liking the puns here and I hope to see the next chapter soon! Though I wonder how the other girls and Spike will take it when they learn about their human friend and Rarity are "dating" in Canterlot when they get the papers?