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Wish

She was hoping the invasion of Canterlot will change her life, but not this way.

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Mother3Forever

Mother3Forever #1 · Sep 2nd, 2013 · 1 · ·

Not bad. Not bad at all.

EvilNaab

EvilNaab #2 · Sep 2nd, 2013 · · ·

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Thank you

Bigou

Bigou #3 · Sep 6th, 2013 · · ·

Promising. I hope you will continue this story.

Jphyper

Jphyper #4 · Oct 27th, 2013 · · ·

This is definitely the worst case of inconsistent tense I've ever seen. Not only do you constantly switch between past and present, but I even noticed a few places where you used future tense! I also noticed a number of spelling errors. With spell check so prevalent, there's really no excuse for that.

I find it hard to believe you've been here for over a year and have written so many stories, yet you still need to read the site's writing guide. Click here to read it. It will significantly improve your writing.

If you can fix all that, this story shows a lot of promise.

EvilNaab

EvilNaab #5 · Oct 27th, 2013 · · ·

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I don't need an excuse.. I've failed at everything what I tried to do so... why would it be different now..., but I wonder why did you read another one of my stories since you know this..

Jphyper

Jphyper #6 · Oct 27th, 2013 · · ·

3405542 Well, the writing guide will help with that. And what do you mean "another" of your stories? I don't often pay attention to who the author of a story is, so if I have read another one of your stories, I don't remember.

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