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Bluebell Berry attends Canterlot High and is living an ordinary life with friends and a boyfriend. That all changes one night when she accidentally finds herself in the Crystal Empire surrounded by guards. Forced to stay as a pony for 30 moons, Bluebell must learn how to be a pony and figure out what to do. A helpful guard may just be able to be the guidance she needs over these long weeks. Unfortunately trouble may be brewing in the north, grudges left unchecked will cause a dangerous game to begin for the Crystal Empire. Can they defeat this growing threat? And will Bluebell ever be able to return home? Will she ever want to?...



Note: Sunset Shimmer never happened in this so no one from Canterlot High knows that there is a portal to Equestria. (hense the Alternate Universe tag)

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 27 )

Continue dis, I want to see where it goes. Also for dialogue use ( " ) instead of ( ' ).

With how popular HiE fics are I don't know why we don't see more fics like this.

Cool premise and I like the start. Pretty cool to see 'Normal Norman' get a cameo as Tailor with some legitimate personality to him.

I didn't even know the fandom had gotten around to naming some of the Crystal Ponies yet. Nice touch though to make Rubinstein one of the featured ones, I like fics that pull a background character in and give them a chance to shine.

3134018 Goddamnit! I always do that, thanks, I need to go fix that now....:twilightsheepish:

3134569 Wait that guy had a name? Oh well, "Normal Norman" doesn't feel like the most imaginative thing, I'll stick with Tailor. Heh I wrote the reasoning's behind his and Bluebell's names in my first blog post, I could propably put it in the author's note here. No real point i guess but whatever.

I'm glad to see you're enjoying the story so far, I also thought it was odd how there was practically no Equestria Girl students in Equestria fics so I thought I'd write one, I mean how has no one ever found the portal before?

Hmm... this has potential. I'll be following it. Let's see where it goes.

This looks like it might be interesting. Fav'ed

Oh and as a side note Rubinstein means ruby stone (two guesses as to which part of means which word)

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Given the hints at the personality Tailor probably is a better name for him in this fic.

"I also thought it was odd how there was practically no Equestria Girl students in Equestria fics so I thought I'd write one, I mean how has no one ever found the portal before?"

All I've ever seen in that area is the rare, rare joke about "Well that explains Lyra." But now you get to set the trend.

I like the use of dramatic irony, they've easily found her way home but she's delayed and won't make it. Fate is just messing with her now. :rainbowwild:

I thought one moon was one moon and etc but I dunno xD anyways great story! I'm enjoying it a lot, it keeps getting better and better. :pinkiehappy:

3187923 Im not sure what you mean but in this story 30 moons is a month in both worlds. And thanks, im glad to know you're liking the story.

I haven't seen EQG, but I thought the "moon" in thirty moons is used the same way as in reality, that is a poetic term for a month?:rainbowhuh:

But anyways man, Shinning really needs to instill some proper discipline into his guards.
If you are ordered to take care of someone you shouldn't complain about it to them/insult them and you most certainly shouldn't abandon them for matters of a personal nature.

3188469 Yeah im not sure how long 30 moons in the EQG world is supposed to be, they never really explained it. Im pretty sure 30 moons in Equestria though, is a month because its always full. So for the purpose of this story its just a month for both worlds.

Heh Diamond's not really the best guard, they probably just scraped up the best they could after King Sombra was defeated. Still learning and all that.

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Some very sound logic - through I am unsure about the moon always being full in Equestria.
On the one hoof it has been full every time we have seen it, but on the other Luna's cutiemark is of a crescent moon, and in the storybook intro to the first episode the moon is shown as a light blue circle with a white crescent to one side.
If the moon always was full this would be strange.
Then again in either case it is more than enough uncertainty that a fanfic could have it always be full without being in conflict with canon.


Yeah I would imagine that training some good guards take time, and it's not like you can just do without any while you wait.

3188503 In fantasy, a moon refers to a lunar cycle (from full moon to new moon, and back to full moon), which takes roughly a month, so thirty moons would be thirty months, or two and a half years, which would have a lot more of an impact than just a single month.

3188754 I know how long 30 moons usually is, but I dont wants her stuck in Equestrian for 2 1/2 years. Thats a really long time for a story to take place and I feel would make it drag rather than "impact". Besides I have plans...

Bluebell took it on the chin in this chapter. Stranded, self-inflicted injuries, mistreatment from a guard, and almost assaulted to boot. Well at least she's got a good roof over her head, a good friend by her side, and she's a character in a fic with the kinder 30 days variation on the mirror's timing.

I have to ask, is this fic in part based on this fan image that shows a ponified pegasus-version of the main character?
http://derpibooru.org/324240?scope=scpe81010e5c15e6997b80ce622703b6e4b9e9dda2b8

3188872 Well, at least you have a few good reasons, glad we could clear this up.

One moon means a FULL MOON. One full moon a month.

So... Approximately three years. Yeah...

30/12=


Screw it. I'm not doing the math.

3188436 I mean month, sorry that's me typing at 1 in the morning. XD

Great story so far, and a unique starting point! I'll be keeping an eye on this.
BTW, I found some sound-alikes probably caused by spellcheck's auto-replace;

"I was about to ask you that. I was finishing up a project in the sowing (sewing) rooms, but it’s getting late. Shouldn’t you be heading home too?"

"I don’t know!" She started balling (bawling) her eyes out again as she laid there, neither guard were really sure what to do. Suddenly the other guard who had stayed by the door was shoved into the room by more guards who had rushed to the room.

"It’s okay Bluebell, we are here to help. There’s no need to be afraid." They were all surrounding her as she leaned up against the cold wall, they blocked every path out from this darkened room. Her heart was going a million miles per hour, her breathing was close behind and her brain had crashed into the guardrails into a smoking wreak (wreck) a long time ago.

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interesting take on "30 moons"! I never thought about the Equestria side of the equation, and neither had the script writers. That actually makes sense. Although it does lessen the "OH ****!" time pressure for the movie. a month is easier to deal with than 2 1/2 years...

3189244 So someone has done a ponyifed picture of her, I didnt actually know, who'd have figured. Heh they must've made her a pegasus for the same reason I did; her glasses reminded me of the goggles the pegasi wear.

When is the next update?

with ordinary light blue skin and long dark blue hair

Pretty sure Blue bell/Blueberry has green skin :pinkiesmile: Unless the girl on the cover isn't her.

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Yeah... The computer I was using to find an image of her, I think it's graphics were a bit off because the picture was blue, but after posting the story I then saw the picture again on a different computer and she was green. Soooooo, I left her blue cause I really wasn't sure which was correct.

4778277 Oh, okay. :twilightsmile: Cute story, I wanna beat up that Colossus dud. :flutterrage:

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