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pinkameany


My only friend is the night.

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Ever wonder why every animal fluttershy has always obeys her as if they were being controlled? Well jump in and learn the horrors of the sweet yellow ponies obediance training course.

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Okay, this was kinda interesting...:rainbowderp:
But why didn't scootaloo just take off her costume when fluttershy was not watching?
She wouldn't have gone all :flutterrage: on her if she saw her.
Anyways, interesting concept and a funny idea, but could have been a bit longer. :twilightsheepish:

It was a suit that only could be taken off by another pony,but she wasn't thinking about that at the time. Also thanks for all the dislikes I love all the honest people. :fluttershyouch:

I like a well-written grimdark now and then but there seemed to be no point to any of this violence, and it was unrealistic violence too. Cartoony violence... which I suppose can make sense to some degree as this is based off of a cartoon, but usually grimdark stories have the violence be at least more realistic. Something like that would be better done with Pinkie Pie as she seems to be the one that has more cartoony powers. :pinkiecrazy:

Fluttershy is the element of kindness and though she has been known to go a little nuts, she would not deliberately torture or kill animals to get them to obey. She has the stare for that, which strangely enough doesn't even appear in this story. Perhaps you should be commended for not going that road though as the Stare would be pretty predictable in a story like this and you didn't use it which is probably good. However I don't think that it fits Fluttershy very well for her to resort to torture/killing of animals to get them to obey.

3127150 I didn't expect fluttershy to be the way she was in the pony.mov series. Life has it's twist and turns secrets and lies. In this we learn a secret of Fluttershy. I didn't use the stare simply because it's a new batch of recruits I think of the stare to be some sort of.... reminder of what will happen if the animals do not obey. The cartoony death style you say I imagine the deaths portrayed in this story could actually happen. I didn't leave her kindness out of the story as you read she let the cat live... sure in misery but hey this is a dark tale :ajsmug:

it is short,and the title is spelled wrong.
Dis-like.

3127352 Thx for the dis-like it means alot to me :pinkiehappy: It's short because I am free to make my stories however I like I don't see why I should get a dis-like for that,but your the critic :derpytongue2: glad you took your time to read it tho thank you. I know when people come to this part of fimfic they want to see mutilation brothers destroying sisters friends killing friends all the nasty brutal stuff, but if you think about the slavery Scootaloo has been going through for long and the possible beatings she gets for messing up one thing it's pretty harsh. So have an open mind when reading short stories like this don't be too quick to judge :eeyup:

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Grammar nazi is still not amused.

3127465 I never expected you to be.:moustache:

Help me hit 100 dis-likes everypony :heart:

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I liked anyway, you tried your best :twilightsmile:

3128068 :heart: Thanks :moustache: the best is really all I can give. I was looking forward to reading one of your stories,but I see you have none.:pinkiesad2:

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You have a really good point about the .mov series but that was comedic violence. Your story was definitely an interesting read. I thought the part about Scootaloo's cutie mark was especially sad because that pretty much means that being a slave is her destiny now.

Comment posted by JackieFreak deleted Aug 31st, 2013
Comment posted by JackieFreak deleted Aug 31st, 2013

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I have posted a new story now. Care to read it? :pinkiesad2:

You misspelled Sweetie Belle, but I really like the story, poor Scootaloo. I wonder if she can speak chicken, she says that they’re her friends, so I wound think that she could understand them.

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