Trixie's in town. She has a very important errand to do.
A very important pony to wish happiness to on a very important day.
Whether the pony recognizes her or not.
Thanks to Scribbler Productions for doing a reading of this! ^~^
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A writer. I try to write at least... Video games are REALLY distracting though...and work...and life...Eh. Well if you have time go ahead and give my stuff a chance ^~^ I'm a pretty nice person
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Damn, this hit me hard.
Nicely done.
Whoa.
Wow.
[FAVING INTENSIFIES]
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Dear Sweet Luna you actually got me to cry... kudos to you. I've read some of the pretty sad ones and none of them hit me like this one. you sir get one of my very rare upvotes.
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I sorry. Kinda. But still. Thank you.
Awesome story. It was told so well; like something you'd read in a full-length novel! You have a great talent here!
Now, to the Overview:
Admittedly, I didn't cry, <I can't really cry because I've heard all the pain before (Luckily, not felt, but read and seen)> but don't take that as a bad thing, I really loved this story. You gave Trixie such a distinct character point that echoed until she broke down in front of her mother (This creates a motive behind Trixie, an excellent piece of a story that many authors don't take into consideration.) Trixie felt high and mighty outside, but inside, pitiful and useless. You brought Trixie's haughtiness and played it out perfectly as if you were the original writer for her character, and, even better, you gave her a moving backstory. Ponies like Trixie, Scootaloo, Derpy, and Screw Loose are either just filler or always a happy-go-lucky pony, never so much as mentioning any sort of family or previous lives. They're just there. You've just fixed two of them in this great read.
I did find a few grammatical errors, but they were minor and didn't take from the experience.
Unfortunately, it didn't really come to a surprise to me with whom Trixie's mother was. All points just aimed for her, as they should have, but they just made it too easy (That's not a bad thing, some people love easy things. Easy puzzles, easy reads, rest-easies,).
And finally, sympathy. Of course I felt sympathy for Trixie, who wouldn't. I'm a disgrace to my father, and I know that feeling, so of course I'd have Trixie's back. Trixie wanting to fix everything, to make it up somehow: Priceless. Waterfalls of Tears. It's that desire to better yourself, but also to reward your parents with the life they've given you. The feeling that, no matter what you do, you'll never be able to thank them enough.
When a story gets me to want to hug my parents, it deserves a Fav.
Bravo, good sir. Bravo.
Other commenters have said everything I could say, so... bravo. Good story. Very heartfelt.
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Holy review batman!
Dude. Thanks.
Grammar, yeah. Not surprised you found something. This was wrote at about four AM, running on no sleep for over a day and only gone over with the edit brush once before I went to bed.
Still. Thanks man.
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You're welcome.
The story was too good that I couldn't NOT write an overview.
You had me blinking away a few tears there. You've done Trixie's character justice, and hit me head on with a feels train. Good job.
That was short, but it got me to tear up a bit...
Well done.
awesome
This was a nice little story. Trixie originally from Ponyville? I never thought of that. Screw Loose being Trixie's mom? To me, that's original. Liked and fav'ed.
This has been sitting in my read later box for far too long. Now it gets to go in my favorites. Thanks.
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Daw. Thankies ^~^
This was a really strong piece
It starts off simple enough, with some well intended humour in spots and general feel-good, Pinkie non-sense
But that ending comes so out of left field and out of no where, that one cannot help but feel utterly surprised
Probably one of the better sympathetic takes on Trixie ever put down
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Awww.
Thanks! ^~^
I thought of this awhile back, glad to see I was not the only one.
Aww, this story was so sweet.
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Thank ya both ^~^
7103174 Uhm...okay?
7103221 Oh, I almost forgot: GJ there
7103222 Welp, thanks then.
Hey, YourBronyGod.
This was a good story.
Scribbler of Scribbler Productions also just did a fanfic reading of your story on YouTube.
I actually had to double check when this was made, because we did actually see that Screw Loose got better in Just For Sidekicks.
Specifically, during this moment:
That just makes this story that much sweeter.
8056615 Exactly! X3 That scene made me wanna do a sequel but I'm lazy
8057385 i do hope you actually do one eventually. It would be so sweet to see.
Okay, that last line was really clever. :)
Great story.
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I forgot I even wrote this. Daaamn.
Permission to use this chapter as a reference to a story plot of mine?
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Go for it, yo. By all means. Make something of this seven and a half year old story.