Years pass, the hive grows. But peace is farther than it seems. Amor must lead his hive through war with an enemy long thought to be gone, an enemy that can be anypony, anywhere, and can easily outnumber them. it is up to the former king and his experience to save his people.
Sequel to The Changeling King. You may need to read that first to understand what's going on.
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Yea... fricken sequel up in this!
That's how it's done, especially for starting out a new story!
One problem, the hive theory is most likely wrong. The queen refers to them as her subjects, not her children.
3111584 are you referring to how I used the word?
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[Finally able to find this story. I didn't have an account before when I read the story before this one and I honestly think this deserves more views.
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[Keep up the good work.
3334879 thanks Meta!
3334879 but in all seriousness, i'm glad there are some people out there looking forward to reading my stories. thank you.
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[No need for thanks, only hope that you write not by views or likes, but by motivation and that you enjoy writing.]
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[I am also going to write a story soon.]
3347981 i'm looking forward to reading it
keep me posted and i'll check it out
We have i king?
Well i didnt vote for him...
3398576 this is a monarchy! you don't get to vote!
3398589
*Stares at you with blank eyes*
Well he cant have any muffins.
*Slowly raises a muffin to his mouth and takes a bite*
3398597
oh well 
thanks for reading, by the way
3398604
Reading?
*Looks around the room*
But.... i didnt read anything...
Or.....Did I?
*Ponders this question*
*Makes no movements as a muffin alowly rises
up to his mouth and he takes a bite*
3398628
if you have, thank you.
if not, I would be grateful if you did. i'm always looking for feedback
3398645
Well if you insist.
*Puts on a pair of muffins with holes in them, over his eyes*
Lets give this a read shall we.
3398645
Well let me start by saying that this story,
Is the kind of story that Requires to to read its prequel.
As such i have absolutly no idea whats going on,
Crysalis seems way to nice,
The spot about interacting with ponies was too short,
There seems to be alot of nothing going on,
Normally writers tend to focus on character development or plot advancement.
You often dont seem to do either, however,
I am guessing this is due to the first story completely explaining the characters and their personalities.
Overall i have the oddest sensation of the story going to fast,
And yet at the same time too slow.
But im just a silly changeling who likes muffins,
So you should probably ignore me.
3398735 all criticism is welcome, as long as you don't just say "This story sucks and I hate it", so your opinion counts.
the first part explains a lot, but by the time I finished and reread it, I realized how many times I went off track or brought up random topics or did something stupid. the whole thing with Chrysalis, for example, was caused by the stupidest thing ever. the way I saw it, she was somewhat nice to those she loved and those who showed respect, but she began acting aggressive when Amor left before the invasion.
yeah, you'd probably need to read the first one to understand any of what's going on.
still, your honesty is respected and noted
I'm surprised that the changelings don't change shape in battle. Is there some kind of changeling Geneva Convention forbidding this?
4075636 the way I see it, it would be hard to swing a sword in any other form other than changeling or pony for them considering they're not entirely accustom to the new body and they've been trained in 1 way. and as for ponies, I thought it'd be obvious who's side they were on once they started swinging their sword
4075636 I would expect that the sheer energy costs of changing shape, not to mention the difficulty of doing so in the heat of battle, and also the inexperience and clumsiness that would come with a total body change would all cause problems, but maybe a few specific warriors could be trained... Then again, not my story, not my choice. Still just my head cannon, combined with facts from last story.
cries like a b!+(# and fave.
4353990 didn't think it was that good
thank you though. it means a lot
4359304 Meh it was a good story but Slightly rushed. Needs slight detail so readers don't Need to read book one but want too. Because If I haddent read Book 1 I would have been confused, Kinda was with the jump from "Oh yawn bard and lazy" to "WAR BETWEEN THE HIVES!!" And the constant near Death thing with Christalis (screw spelling) Kinda got drawn out a bit.
My Rating for the duo:
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Creativity: 10
Flow: 7.5
Length: 8
Grammar: 9.5 (Small errors
Overall: 8.7
PS: Sorry if I rant or go off on tangents
4360571 bah the ranting is good for me sometimes.
yeah I did kind of rush my way though this. I was planning on working on the first again some time this summer, so maybe I'll take another look at this one again.
thank you for being honest
4360668 No Problem friend
Just remember to smooth out book 2 and slide some detale into it from book 1 so it flows smoother
Nice start. I hope the savage changelings can be integrated back into Purity's hive.
3111584 I don't think the two ideas ate incompatible?
Cya
Raziel-chan
i like it i gev the two a 8 and a like
Foreshadowing!
Let loose the dogs of war.
Aww, too bad Chryssie is still missing her cutie mark.
Dis gun b gud.
Should've taken a mattress with ya.
Slaughter them all!
Smooth move, Kingsy.
It's a trap!
Drunklings!
Chryssie no!
I hope Hornet will die in the worst manner possible.
Ooooh, if Chryssie is seriously hurt, I can see months of incredible pain and suffering in Hornet's future.
For bugpony!
Chryssie no!
Poor Escara.
Yay, Chryssie is alive!
Whew, godz riddance to bad trash. I don't think Hornet suffered enough, though.
Yeah, they badly need that retirement.
I'm not crying, that's just simply not true. *sniffles*
Grate story! Thanks for the grate read mate!