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Lyrin


I have no idea what I'm doing. Gonna keep doing it tho-MUFFIN!

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Rated Teen for Mature language and a little bit of gore (Subject to change slightly but remain T)

Reason for Hiatus: Although this story is still being written, future chapters are a current focus, not what should be the next. So even with the change of status, chapters will still come out but at a slow pace. Feel free to contact for info.

A thousand years ago, before Nightmare Moon threatened Equestria with her Eternal night, a war took place on the countries soil. Many brave soldiers of the Equestrian Guard lost their lives to a strange threat from the stars known as The Shadow Council, however tides turned as a pony who is later named "The Neon Guardian" joins the rank, achieving the impossible. However, their heroism was short lived when something caused them to disappear from the face of the land. Equestria has seen many lifetimes of peace since then.

A thousand years later, an unknown pegasus arrives on Equestrian soil in the strangest way. Who is this Pony? Why did they fall from the sky? What is with the strange armor? And how can they use magic?

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 13 )

whoa Just whoa. i Am getting strangely excited of this :ajsmug:
anyhow great chapter, can't wait for more

3109839 I'm glad you're enjoying this already, I was feeling a bit iffy about what others may say, but seeing what you've said has eased my worries. I will try to update as soon as I can :twilightsmile:

Sorry I couldn't edit this chapter I couldn't get access to this beforehand.

*gets an email.* "Mhm, what is it this time."
-Fimfiction: A blue blaze against the shadows, has updated: Chapter 3, waking from a dream.
FUCK YES!!! :pinkiegasp:

The attackers were humans weren't they?

Noooooo it hasn't gone any further than this yet! Moar plz?

5068656 I am trying to get the new chapter out, but so many things have gotten in the way that it just makes it hard to do. Doing the best I can to get back into the groove, I swear!

Окей. Пришло время признаний. Я эгоистка (я себя не виню. Все мы в какой-то степени эгоисты) раз в большинстве своём пишу комментарии только под недописанными работами (есть несколько исключение, но и только) , продолжение которых мне хотелось бы увидеть. Просто сразу ввожу в курс дела. Можете не гадать к чему это приведет.
Я не знаю с чем это связано, но и слог и история меня увлекли. Наверное я слишком давно не натыкалась на хорошие работы ( я несколькими часами ранее прочитавшая душераздирающую историю, становлюсь не просто эгоисткой, но и лицемеркой. Прекрасно. Это был сарказм). Как бы то ни было это реально хорошо (не поверите. Я еще не лгу). Не каждый может придумать хороший сюжет и грамотно донести его до читателя. Неплохой навык. Поверьте мне на слово.
О. Мне понравилось как вы ввели собственных персонажей. Как правило такие работы я сразу отметаю, лишь по той причине, что автор делает OC слишком идиалистичной (не знаю как у вас, но в России мы называем это явление Мэри Сью. Когда у персонажа нет не достатков, потому что автор видит в нем себя. Как правило мы желаем себе только лучшего), но вы удержали мое внимание первой главой. Не знаю как, но это был правильный ход.
Есть у меня предчувствие, что Спитфайр начнет чаще появляться в Понивиле (кое-какого радужного пегаса это порадует). Но у меня вопрос. Вряд ли Соарин такой же лицемер как и я раз (пока меня радует что я не вру) и начнет просто так упрекать Спитфайр в том что у нее нет друзей за Вондерболтами. То есть у него есть другие знакомые? Я могу их увидеть? Интересно, кто помимо поваров откармливает этого парня пирогами)

Okay It's time for confessions. I'm selfish (I don't blame myself. We are all selfish to some extent) most of the time I write comments only under unfinished works (there are a few exceptions, but only), the continuation of which I would like to see. I'm just bringing you up to speed. You don't have to guess what this will lead to.
I do not know what this is connected with, but both the style and the story fascinated me. I guess it's been too long since I've come across a good job ( I read a heartbreaking story a few hours earlier and become not just selfish, but also a hypocrite. Perfectly. It was sarcasm). Anyway, it's really good (you won't believe it. I'm not lying yet). Not everyone can come up with a good story and correctly convey it to the reader. Not a bad skill. Take my word for it.
O. I liked the way you introduced your own characters. As a rule, I immediately dismiss such works, only for the reason that the author makes the OC too idialistic (I don't know about you, but in Russia we call this phenomenon Mary Sue. When a character doesn't have O
of defects , because the author sees himself in it. As a rule, we only want the best for ourselves), but you kept my attention with the first Chapter. I don't know how, but it was the right move.
I have a hunch that Spitfire will start appearing more often in Ponyville (some rainbow Pegasus will be happy about this). But I have a question. It is unlikely that Soarin is as hypocritical as I once (while I'm happy that I'm not lying) and will just start to reproach Spitfire that she has no friends for Wonderbolts. So he has other acquaintances? Can I see them? I wonder who besides the cooks is fattening this guy up with pies)

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