• Member Since 6th Oct, 2011
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Dr Atom Discharge


One clear beautiful night Twilight is stargazing, nothing uncommon there, but as she is about to pack away for the night, she spots a faint star that she has never seen before, and that none of her books mention, but on her quest to find out more about this star, she makes an unusual friend, and maybe even more than just a friend.

Little does she know that her new friend will lead her on a completely unexpected adventure as she learns more about him and about his past. As each question is answered new questions arise as Twilight is taken through twists and turns physically, mentally and emotionally, until eventually a massive secret that threatens to upturn everything she knows.

I now have an Editor, so no more terrible grammar mistakes, all credit for the Editing goes to primalcorn1

All credit goes to FeralTwilight for the picture

Chapters (13)
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Comments ( 147 )

This is going to be good! :pinkiehappy:

Nice Story Man!

I really think you got in the ponies heads! I love it and want to read more.

Awwwww. This very nearly turned into a Stockholm syndrome story, but you saved it! :rainbowlaugh::twilightblush:

20378 Wow, I'm surprised anyone's that interested xD

This is very well done, I am thoroughly interested in seeing more.:twilightsmile:

Sorry for the poor quality of the last chapter, I'll do better this time, cross my heart and hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my-OW!

Hello there dear friend.
The story was very.........catching to me.
I hope to see more.
But remember this.....Majestic will prevail. :twilightsheepish:

(':heart:')(':twilightblush:') What a sweet story

(':heart:')(':twilightblush:') What a sweet story

Why must it end at a cliffy.:fluttercry: Whhhhhhy

Aww, sorry. but it means you'll come back for the next chapter.. still wondering what to do.... but if the chapter is under 100 words, expect the worse :derpytongue2:

Your first description of the creature made me think of a slenderman :rainbowlaugh:

You want me to edit for you?
I'm not much for coming up with a good story but I have grammar down to perfection
I like your story, it just needs a little grammar work so it will flow more smoothly
My email is dylankern61@gmail.com
If you want me to edit just email me the next chapter

Le.....GASP :pinkiegasp:

Totally a twist. I thought it was going to be monster's or something like that. Eee can't wait for a new chapter if you make one.

BTW that mantis scene...I can totally see it happening and boy did my imagination scare me.

This is the most adorable thing I've read in eons :pinkiehappy:

ok I have reread the chapter and I have a conclusion on why the guards want
he is AWOL

The rest of the chapters to date will be finished by the end of the week, so be sure to double check any chapter you may have already read because it will hopefully read a little easier

All chapters have been edited and now look awesome
Be sure to reread earlier ones and more importantly keep up to date as new, even more awesome chapters are to come from the mind of my friend Dr. Atom Discharge

I've read all of your chapters now......what a sweet couple they will make :raritywink:
Go get 'em Atom. :ajsmug:
Just don't stay up all night doing stuff......
Moonshine might come visit too....he he he :pinkiehappy:

ok I have a feeling atom know something the princess and she doesn't like it

Holy shit. Royal Rage!

Alrighty then, well Chrome will no longer let me post Comments, so I am being forced to use.. *shudder* Internet Explorer... anyway... I wanted to thank everyone for your support. Also, I am going to try to get the next chapter up before Christmas, if it is possible, if now I'll get it up as soon as possible

Still finding some errors primal, but good job editing for the most part

so he discovered the magic nuke bomb did not see that coming now I see why celstia want to stop him she is afraid he will destoy everything literaly

Huh I was thinking it was gonna be The Doctor...


So his the Einstein of Equestria? This is getting rather interesting :twilightsmile:

My god, he's a living nuke. No wonder the princess thinks he's dangerous.
Still, she's kinda harsh. Keep writing!

Oh, and a Merry Christmas to you all.

The dragon was winning the fight, but then he took a wave of energy to the knee :ajsmug:

Is it alright if i use this OC? I'm making a DA FUC Pinkie breaking 4th wall fanfic with a SHITTON of OCs.

Pure comedy, randomness (of course course it's Pinkie), Romance. ya know

So... I've had an Idea, I am going to Extend the story, and I have a huge plot twist planned he he he, look out for it kiddies!

You bastard. Curse you cliffhangers...

That's what I was thinking
And I edited it

108259 you edited this? :pinkiegasp:
so THAT's why it's so awesome! :pinkiehappy:
ten bucks says the pony chasing them was Blade or Luna


*gasping for breath* :pinkiegasp:

Can I have my ten pounds now?
None of you will guess, because there is very little evidence as to who it is :P


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