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This is a prequel to Her little Rainbow.

When Trixie decides to try and steal back the alicorn amulet from Zecora and fail Twilight decides to teach her a lesson in friendship from the start.

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Good Work. Like it. WANT MORE!!!

The rhyming was good for the most part but not as good as it could've been. :eeyup:

Regardless I'm looking forward to more, I have high hopes. :twilightsmile:

"I used a spell to turn Trixie into a three month old foal,

Ok, this fic sucks

3103118 Could have been worse, at least it's a spell that would not have been possible if she did not have the amulet. Now if she could have done it without it, that would be a bad fic.

Zecora's only rhyme was in the very first line. Other than that, the rest all fell flat. :trollestia:

Comment posted by Darkentrophy deleted Aug 26th, 2013

You're making some grammar mistakes again but this is still pretty good. :eeyup:

Is it wrong if I think Spike and Trixie's interaction is even better then Twilight and Trixie's right now? :trixieshiftright:

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Thank you I thought the same thing I also know I made some grammer errors but don't expect me to get better I'm bad at this stuff its why I have an editor.

Even Twixie can have some d'awwwwww moments :twilightsmile:

I could really image the scene with her and Spike playing and it was EXTREME adorable.

I look forward to the next Chapter.

Spike playing with Trixie was the most adorable thing I've read in a long time. Finally, and fanfic that actually has some interaction between those two!

Here's something you can fix, though:

she was planning to show her friends...

Spike's already met little Trixie, so: "She was planning to show [the rest] of her friends..."

Didn't Rainbow not know about her during her story?

3126625 Didn't you know that this a prequel to that fic? :facehoof:

"Well how would you feel if this happened to you."

"Please that would never happen to me."

Nice set up. Depending on what happens to Trixie, I might read the original.

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Which is why I find it it strange that Rainbow forgot about Trixie's status during her fic. As she is surprised to see the foal version of Trixie at their surprise playdate.

3128129 Because she'd likely forgotten about Trixie.

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True, she isn't the type to remember things that aren't directly related to her.

Hhhnnnggg! So much Cutness. Do you even have a license for that?

Baby Trixie and Mommy Twilight are so cute.:rainbowkiss:

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Screw licenses I'm the super-stallion! :rainbowdetermined2::pinkiehappy:

3135825 That Momma Twilight to you Spike. :twilightsmile:

ERROR.

BRAIN EXE HAS ENCOUNTERED PROBLEM.

SEARCHING, SEARCHING.

PROBLEM FOUND.

EXTREME CUTENESS OVERLOAD.

MUST REBOOT.

Nice to see that Trixie's starting to learn her lersson. :rainbowkiss:

I like it. And I think Twilight like it to be a mother :twilightsmile:

(And in the next Story, Applejack is turned in a foal :ajbemused: and Rarity :raritystarry: must take care of her and put her in cute little filly frilly dresses :raritywink: )

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Sorry to disappoint you but no I can now only regress side characters because by head canon wont allow anymore of the mane six other then Rainbow dash to be changed I don't know why my head is strange place like discords. :ajbemused:

3144030 :scootangel::unsuresweetie::applecry: Oooooohh!

Then, dont change one from the Mane six. But what is with Princess Celestia? :trollestia:

For over 3000 years she rules Equestria nonstop... I think a little "Vacation" would be good.
(And nopony knows, she is a foal)

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no that doesn't sound good to my brain either seems done already although if I remember correctly she does have a family member who made Rarity very un happy at the galloping gala. :duck: oh and no I wont regress luna either.

the unicorn nodded, "Yep aduwts cant understand us but other foals can and we can understand animals too." she replied.

I wonder if Twixie will meet Angel.:derpyderp1:

I think its a wonderful ending for the Story. But I hope, It's not the Last one we will see from you

I still hope your brain will come up with a Rarymum and Babyjack Story :trollestia:

In a foal carrier was a tiny foal with a rainbow mane and sky blue coat, it was Rainbow Dash, in Trixie's mind she was screaming one thing, 'POETIC JUSTICE!!'

My sentiments exactly. Is baby Trixie in the original story? If so, I'm there.

Don't forget to include Dashie in some of Dusty's adventures. The two of them are like sisters now. :eeyup:

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Yes she is well for the most part.

*Two ponies are having a discussion*
1.So did you read that story about trixie becomeing a foal?
2.Yeah i thought it was cu....huh?
*A whooshing sound can be heard in the distance*
2.Whats that noise?
1. i dont know it sounds like its...
*They look up*
1.,2.What the buck!!!!
*A large muffin falls out of the sky and crashes into the ground infront of them*
1.is that....
2. ....a muffin?
*Rumbling sounds are heard from within the large muffin*
2. what could be in there?
*Soft Shell bursts violently from the muffin screaming*
Trixie!!!!!!

This story is soooo Dawwwwwwtasitic! :heart:

Though my only annoyance is the fact you not starting a new paragraph every time the speaker changes.
Writing rule of thumb: New speaker = new paragraph :twilightsmile:

Oh god, it's like Rugrats all over again! (well except for the talking to animals part) I LOVE IT!

Not the best rhyming but still good.

At least you did rhyme, I tried to avoid it
(odd, I got great rhythm but poor rhyme)
I admire you but stay out of unfamiliar territory. I recommend researching poems and hymns and stuff like that.
now blah blah blah shameless self promotion promote channel generic blah blah Generic Comment blah blah
but srsly, if you are gonna try and do Zecora, get help from professionals. Or do what i did:
She spoke only in rhymes. I basically nodded and complimented her on her rhyming. She smiled and gave me what i needed, the hypnosis potion
do something like that.

Comment posted by _______________ deleted Feb 7th, 2014

3138006 i seem fine
*snap* fine
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*snap* ERRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR
CUTENESS OVERLOADING BRAIN IMPLOSION ALERT
*snap* bagel

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*Thought it was baby super-derpy*
*got caught off guard by Trixie*

i had a feeling twilight would use the amulet. i liked this and can't wait to see trixie's reaction when she wakes up.:rainbowdetermined2:

PS since twilight made it clear Trixie's three months old, does that mean twilight will be nursing her or will she be drinking formula right away?:rainbowhuh:

this played out as i expected. SOOO CUTE!:rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

Though, I'm now worried everything i write for the foal and the student is gonna sound too much like this fic and Her Little Rainbow. :fluttercry:
i didn't even KNOW spike blew a raspberry on trixie in this chapter when i wrote him doing it to Sunset in chapter 3. and chapter four is gonna start with the others of the mane six at sugar cube corner wondering why twi sent them messages the previous night, asking them to come to sugar cube corner that morning for a surprise.

i really worried I'm copying you without meaning to.:fluttercry::fluttercry::applecry::applecry::applecry:

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