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Diablomuerte2


The greatest source of inspiration for the stories I write is my insane day dreams.

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Aaand it's here! This one was accepted far faster than the other one. Sad...

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Yeah lot's of pre-readers/ approval staff, on. It was approved as soon as I submitted it. Well almost as instantaneously I should say. :pinkiehappy:

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Gonna give the Spike one another shot?

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No I am scrapping it for now, and will try to make the story "non meta" when I can. Right now with all the drama around it and all the anger it caused just from it being "controversial" I just rather write my other fics I had planned then to write a fic justifying my like or dislike of a character.

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Okay, makes sense.

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Already dislikes? Either pairing hate or just author hate. Either way I am used to early dislikes. They are usually just from randoms who didn't read the story. Maybe I should put a warning about the shameless content it has in case some people get offended? Nah it's much for fun figuring it out on their own.

Good lord not another one. :facehoof: I swear if I see another Slavelestia story I'm going to murder something. What's wrong with giving Celestia a normal sexlife?! Why does every piece of Celestia-clop either give her a dick, have her fuck a human, be a dominatrix or have her get off on being slapped and humiliated?!

I apologise to the author. It's not your fault that this trend annoys me. But lord do I hate it. Excuse me, I'm off to put "Celestia with normal sexlife" on the list of extinct fanfic species. Have a nice day, good sir.

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Didn't know this was a trend to be honest. I thought I was doing something rather unique, having Luna dominate her sister. Oh well, good luck finding the story you wish to read, and brony on. :trollestia:

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I thought I was doing something rather unique, having Luna dominate her sister.

Unique?! The list with stories in which Celestia is being degraded into Luna's pet is so long that even if you cut every single tree on the planet you still wouldn't have enough paper to print it! :fluttershbad:

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Really. I guess I missed them lol. Well again I don't regret any of my fics, and I certainly won't regret this one :):pinkiehappy:

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Because she is an image of perfection in the cannon and people just loves to make the perfect characters have the most dirty and darkest hidden lives, in Celestia's case is is a sex life that can never be normal. :ajsmug:

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Which honestly shouldn't affect whether or not they like it. They probably haven't read this story nor have understood the concept of their broken relationship. The ending kind of sells the whole story. I won't force anyone to read it though.

Because in the end whether they like it or not if they read it that is fine. :pinkiehappy:

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Well again I don't regret any of my fics, and I certainly won't regret this one :)

And you shouldn't, really. From what I've glanced, this was well written with no obvious glaring flaws I could spot. I just don't like the subject and you caught me at a bit of a bad time. We just had a Slavelestia story in the feature box for a few days and I was still a bit irked about it, when your story showed up. It's nothing personal, so don't mind me. Just a grumpy old brony being grumpy about barely being able to find the kind of Celestia-clop he likes. I don't really have a problem with stories like this being written, it's that there are so few non-Slavelestia clop stories being written that bugs me.

Tsk, look at me grumbling like this. If this goes on at this rate, I'll be yelling and shaking my fist at kids to get off my lawn before the day's over. :derpytongue2:

3089152 The poor children... don't do it. I understand it was a Rarity one, this story had the unfortunate timing due to other problems. A spike story I had planned for release was getting approval staff in a tizzy so I had to release something else instead. Thus my hand hoof was forced.

Why so much dislikes? The story was well written and edited. I can say for sure it won't be perfect grammatically because it's almost next to impossible to spot all the flaws. So if it's the content then meh I can't blame people for their tastes. I just wish people would at least back their dislikes up. :moustache:

If I am messing up somewhere let me know I can fix errors and I am always looking to improve. I won't change the story though. I never edit my stories to remove content. Anyways let me know whats up readers. :twilightsheepish:

you my friend do not disappoint.
lota haters about today but not i. not usually for the princest but...you know... luna.
good on ya.

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Honestly I don't mind hate if justified. Just random dislikes for the sake of disliking just tarnish the rating system. :ajsmug:

Anyways glad you enjoyed, I was hoping you would give it a read. :raritywink:

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woulda read it sooner but i had to wait for my fucking lunch break. id been lookin forward to this.
faved by the way.

3089478 It's alright and thanks for your support.

I know I am testing new grounds writing for ships I never had written for or have a connection to so any positive feed back helps me improve and negative ones as well.

I can then make better stories and more outlandish concepts. I just need the feed back and support.

Next on my list is a final one shot or going to finally get back into a series to write. So far though most of my stories have had a general amount of success but lately most of the time it also generates more hate from others who either don't like me or just my "attitude" . :moustache:

I can accept not being liked but I hate my work that I take time to right being the target of hate. :raritydespair:

I won't be arrogant and claim all dislikes are from haters. Maybe someone or some people just don't like a certain story I wrote, that is highly possible. I am a fan of twist endings or making an ending no one saw coming. Like this ending XD. I thought of it the moment I made the title. :raritywink:

Anyways I appreciate all feedback and wish for others to read my stories. Regardless of liking or hating it if more people read my stories than my audience can grow. :ajsmug:

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well when i finish fleshing out the first 12k words of what will be chapter one of my first fic up here i only hope it to be half as good as your stuff.
and beleive it or not im pretty picky.
totally loved your endind to this. freakin awesome.

"When the sun goes and down her" -.o?.....

3089536 Bah I knew I bucked up.

Fixed

Another good one, diablo. Especially like the conflicting emotions with Luna, really enjoyed it. Looking forward to more of your writing, bro!

3089533 Don't sell yourself short. I just write, what comes from my head. The fact you find it good is rewarding for me, but don't think what I write is better than what you can. All you have to do is apply and edit and boom instant story.

Most of my other stories that haven't received the instant hate have been riding on still. Funny enough one of my other stories that was filled with hatred from people because I bucked up, now is doing really well too. So it's all about the audience, the haters, fans, and randoms. Remember that not all will be liked or disliked.

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Thanks for the support, yes the conflicting emotions was something I enjoyed putting there. I love using the mental anguish as a sub plot of a story.

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hatred im i can deal with. hell i thrive on it.my day isnt complete unless ive made at least one person either take a swing at me or curse the day i clawed my way out of my mothers monstery vagina. ( july 2nd 1977 for those curious ) its the humiliation that is hard to deal with. i have a great many friends who are talented and published writers. so ya know. no pressure.

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As I said just make sure you edit it enough to where you won't get smashed for grammar, then if you receive any dislikes it's because the content doesn't suit the reader. Never let anyone tell you to stop writing, or to not continue. If you ever need ideas or if you want to toss ideas at me to see if it's a decent plot let me know. I can only give you my idea if it will work or not but it won't be an absolute. I am not the conscience of all people.

'twas good. princest=wincest

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I am glad you think so :) :twilightsmile:

a new princest is always good... And this is good. have a :moustache: for a McLovin approved story.

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Woot McLovin approved now it's official :ajsmug:

Diablo, i gave the story a try, i honestly did. I even read the whole thing. I can't tell you exactly what about this was, maybe because slavelestia, maybe something else i can't pinpoint, but i just couldn't like or immerse myself in this fic. I'm sorry. No fave, but upvoted. Up/down votes are strictly for how well written a fic is, at least for me.

Upon some reflection, i think i might have it. I think it might be that I just don't like fics that make me think, 'could this be rape?' If that thought enters my mind, my immersion appears to shatter like a window hit by a sledgehammer. From that point, it becomes hard to re-immerse or even just like the story, truly.

By the by, what exactly was the challenge between the two that Celestia lost? I don't think it was directly stated in the story.

This applies to 3089103 (and partially 3089152)
I've noticed the trend lately, and most of the latest few clopfics i've actually decided to give a try might be better with either pseudo-rape or acutal rape warnings in their descriptions.

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As for the rape, no. Luna didn't rape Celestia, the challenge it was to be left open to interpretation. What I didn't write was represented by the cover art.

Luna has felt left out of things, she was for 1000 thousand years banished to the moon by her sister. A thousand years is a long time to be left alone. Even upon her return her sister hardly associates with her. Always meddling with the affairs of Twilight and Co.

So I put it in a perspective that Celestia had ignored Luna for too long and that drove the younger sister over the edge.

One day she verbally assaults her and notices her sister's sadness spread and her superiority get crushed. With that in mind and 1k years with no nooky. This came to be.

Also I am glad you read it and somewhat enjoyed it. Thanks for the up vote and sorry you didn't feel it deserved a fave.

I don't write rape fics and if I decide to, I would most definitely put a warning on the fic cover.

Edit: Maybe I could revise this fic and put a flash back of that moment or make a prequel to this. Either or will work fine.

:pinkiehappy:

3093292 It's a possibility if it gets popular enough though the Princest shipping will be prevalent in my sequel to one of my most popular fics. Twilight's Special Book. :moustache:


I planned on a sequel for that fic the moment I was finishing up the last chapters. :ajsmug:

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I don't write rape fics and if I decide to, I would most definitely put a warning on the fic cover.

I know you didn't intend for it to come across as a rapefic, but the question entered my mind several times throughout my reading and i made that statement in my post.

Thanks for the up vote and sorry you didn't feel it deserved a fave.

As always, i fave a story if i like it, while the up/down votes are for how well written a fic was. There're some out there that get a downvote, but i can't wait to read them. Just because they're poorly written doesn't mean i won't read a fic, and if the author turns his shoddy writing around, i switch my thumb to up.

3093520 Well again thanks for the read and the upvote. :pinkiehappy:

I also appreciate the feedback. As I state many times likes or dislikes aren't a prob but if someone doesn't tell me what is wrong or what they didn't like how can I improve? So thanks for being awesome and providing me feedback. Regardless of negative or positive, feedback is always helpful. :ajsmug:

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Hell, i considered scrapping my first comment, rereading the story and writing another from scratch, if for no other reason than my computer threw a 'kernel_inpage_fault' or somesuch bluescreen at me halfway through writing it. I restart this thing rarely enough as it is, and that's the first bluescreen i've had in like a year and a half. It just pissed me off to no end, but my browser restored the comment, thankfully.

That said, I don't often comment on stories. Usually they consist of 'Just found this, and can't wait to catch another chapter when it comes' or are references to games i've played, something to that extent. Generally the other times i comment are like with this story. If i don't like it, i say so and then explain why i might not have liked it, in as constructive a manner as i can manage. Like you said, feedback is always helpful. No matter if its just personal opinion, or a well-constructed analysis of a story, as long as it's constructive and not something like 'This is shit, delete it'.

I didn't like this. There are a lot of slavelestia stories as others have said and though I do like them this one is just creepy. It can't decide if it's a normal, albeit incestuous, relationship which has bdsm sex or if Luna is deliberately trying to rape Celestia's free will down to nothing which is somehow worse then when a story picks one, It also doesn't have enough explanation to how they came to this point which is weird because it describes these conflicting emotions in both of them. Speaking of the emotions aren't really shown but just stated exist which is a weaker form of storytelling. Maybe you intended it to be mindless clop but I don't think you did as you tried to put conflicting emotions in it that wouldn't if it was mindless.
I like this ship and the domination so I'd read another like this if you tried again but I just didn't like this one much and found it off-putting. This may be pretentious of me but Who Rules? by Nom_deCheval did this as well and I would recommend it as doing it really well. I feel kind of douchey for going "hey look at stories I like more then yours", so sorry if you agree but reading that would probably better explain what I didn't like about this than one long comment.

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I would validate your claim and thank you for the feedback if you didn't sound like a dick while doing so. I can understand that you didn't get how they got to this point. Fine! I agree with no solid flashback bringing you to this point it's all under interpretation or assumptions.

I can validate your reason for not liking slave stories had you not ended it with suggesting I read someone else's story, so I can understand your comment. Why should I have to read a story for your comment to be justified? Your comment should be justified on it's own merit. :ajsmug:

I don't care if you don't like my story, but how dare you insist I try again because YOU don't like it. I would never, and I mean never, rewrite an entire story based on one person's opinion. I do edits to my stories but for flow and grammar, and I was going to possibly either write a prequel or write in the portion that people wanted answered. I will not, however, write an entire story over just because one person deemed it unfit. If you found a story like mine that you claim is better, then fine, go read that one. But don't you ever come to my comment section and decide to say "This story isn't as good as that one and he did a better job" that is not only fucked up, but a sheer lack of respect for any author if you just compare stories. I didn't write my story with any others in mind. I wrote this based on what my head could drum up.

Sure the content is dark and scarring emotionally. Luna is portrayed evil and sadistic, Celestia is the victim in this story. That was the intention. I knew it wouldn't be praised by all since I never make stories just to get likes. I made it dark because that would be the end result of having an incestuous affair with your sister who banished you to the moon for a thousand years. Luna if written by someone who wasn't dreaming of a perfect pony utopia would have made her deranged. Because being alone for a long time is maddening. Solitary confinement in real prisons is more inhumane than murder.

Now I only reacted strongly to your comment, not because it was negative, but because it had no constructive criticism that I haven't already gotten elsewhere and just a ton of ridiculous assertions and complaints.

I thank you for reading my story as always and I appreciate your attempt at feedback, but now I ask you kindly to fuck off. :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Nuanced deleted Aug 23rd, 2013

3094814 Um... I did apologise in the comment but I don't want to fight.

3094866 You deleted your comment I was replying to o.o

I will summarize my reply I was going to post. I saw that you said sorry but it was "Sorry if you agree" which I am assuming disagree was the word you were aiming for. I don't care if you have negative feedback, what offended me was the lack of respect. You can't make such a dick comment, and apologize in the comment, because you can't be sorry for something you intentionally write at the moment you wrote it.

I could be sorry for saying fuck off but I am not. You have offended me with the sheer lack of respect and your high strung opinions about how shit my story is, in comparison to another author's story that you claim is similar to mine. I don't care if there are better authors. I know I am not the best, but to be put down and then told to try again because it doesn't match YOUR tastes? That is where I draw the line from feedback to just a hate comment.

Never ever tell an author to rewrite his story for your own approval. You are just one person, and you could have been some famous author on this site and I would still tell you to fuck off for saying something like that.

3093919 The irony of the statement you just made is someone after you decided to say "This is shit rewrite it" ... That set me off :pinkiecrazy:

3094886 I didn't say it to try to be rude I said it because I honestly thought it was the best way I could help. When I said "Sorry if you agree" I was trying to say that I was sorry if you thought it was a dickish thing to do because I didn't know how you'd react to it and whether you believe me or not I am sorry that an argument has arisen from my bad grammar and inability to discern what is disrespectful.

But whose tastes was I suppose to judge it by? My own tastes are the only ones I know so there the only standards of good I think I can really use to offer criticism or praise for any piece of artwork.

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So your tastes > all those who liked it?

Can you not see the problem with that logic? You tell me that I should "try again" as if your tastes = the amount of dislikes that the likes have.

I am not trying to say "I have more likes so your argument is invalid" I am merely stating that your statement of "try again", when my attempt seems to be doing well, is a shit thing to say. I would understand if my story had lots of flaws besides one minor plot hole or misconception. I have one thing wrong story wise. That is I didn't make the flashback of how they became Slave/Mistress. Sure I didn't because it wasn't important to the story. The important thing to this was they were together and are living a perverse life that if made public would shame them and get them persecuted by ponies who weren't understanding.

Sorry if I missed putting in something like a flashback to explain how they got together but I didn't feel it was necessary but apparently it was. I am allowed to be wrong and acknowledge that and I could fix it.

That isn't the issue. The issue is you dislike the content because it was making Celestia being drained of her will and that is too evil for you apparently. Not only that but you found a better story and that means this one can't exist unless it matches up.

Again your "honesty" was nothing more than your arrogance and stupidity shining through. First you insult my work then you try to turn this on me by adding in that you "apologized" when honestly an apology means you admit you made a mistake and are sorry for it. Being sorry means you did something wrong and are making amends. You can't purposely be a dick and be sorry about it at the same time while it happens. That would be like me constantly beating an old lady while apologizing with each punch I send her way. Would you really believe I was sorry while beating an old lady? Because I said Sorry? No! you wouldn't unless you were mentally deficient.

Comment posted by Nuanced deleted Aug 23rd, 2013

3094979 When I said try again in my original comment I didn't mean "delete this story and try again" I meant if you wrote a sequel or another story with the same concept I would still read it because although I disliked it still interested me. Again I've misjudged how my comments would come across but I still stand by my criticisms of the story and my apologies for making you angry. I'm not being a deliberate dick and saying sorry I'm saying sorry because I DIDN'T KNOW if I was being a dick and was trying to avoid a situation like this.

Deleted and retyped my comment again because it broke somehow halfway through.

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Oh... that changes somethings. Well then I shouldn't have gone all berserk >.> I feel like a fool now. I still stand by my initial anger. I mean you don't tell someone on their comment section that thier story wasn't as good as someone else's or suggest they read someone elses story for them to get a better understanding of your disappointment.

You made assumptions. You stated it wasn't a defined relationship and it was. It is a real BDSM relationship. You probably haven't been in one but it isn't like the cinema's or family friendly tv stations make them to be. The thrill of submission isn't just something that is occasionally played out. Real submissive people live their entire lives under the control of their dominant partner. That doesn't mean they don't have free will but when it comes to their masters/mistresses they absolutely can't disobey or refuse an order. I know because I have a friend who is a submissive woman who has a master. She has to obey all his commands because that is how their roles are and how their relationship is.

The fake BDSM I see in some stories or the fake ones in show are just Play BDSM for sex sake. Real sub/dom stuff isn't for public eyes because it's very offending. I decided to add the dark tag for that reason since it's disturbing to the general.

I didn't add the dark tag because I thought it would for funsies if I did add it.

Now again I may have reacted harshly but you still don't get why I am angry or was angry in the first place. You need to have more civility when critiquing especially when you written a story of your own.

I was about to be the biggest dick in the universe and tell you to write your own story the way you want it. But I decided that I would try the high road since you already got my jimmies rustled by being rude and arrogant.

So again I am not sorry for saying what I said, but I am for my continuation of anger. :ajsmug:

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Talk about irony.

Hehe, at least i called it before it happened, eh?

3095478 Yeah right... almost as if you planned it :pinkiecrazy: Dun Dun Dun! :rainbowlaugh:

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