A strange unicorn has entered Ponyville. He seems simple enough, but anyone who talks to him for more than a passing moment realizes that all is not as it seems. What his purpose there is, not even he fully knows.
My first step into the writing arena, the obvious first hurdle I seemed to stumble over was that of the Gary Stu. I considered rewriting it to be otherwise now that I've had some experience, but it wouldn't be worth it with how short it's going to be. So enjoy if you will, and you've been forewarned.
Chapters (4)
I WEILD THE ULTIMATE POWER OF THE ALMIGHTY ALL FIRST SCYTHE
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251324 I would complain about first posters, but that is indeed a pretty badass scythe ^_^ What'd you think of the story?
251389 a bit confusing as to what's going on, but good descriptions
This is pretty good.
My only complaint is that the chapters is a little short, but other then that, very enjoyable. 
Whoah... :D
EDIT: So wait, should I have read the rest of this series or something first, or is there no rest of the series yet, or what? I'm interested.
251463 and 251547 Yeah, its in the middle of the series, but I haven't even written the first book yet. I have a very thorough concept of what I want to do with it, but sitting down to write is... troublesome. I got a blast of inspiration for this story, and felt it was worth writing proper, even if it was in media res with the rest.
DJ: What exactly was confusing? I'd like to make everything as clear as I can for the readers :)
251467: Yeah, I couldn't think of how to make it longer without drawing it out obscenely with history or giving things away. Any suggestions would be welcome :)
251897 mainly the beginning, i have no idea how though, it just is (it may be just me)
251929 Ah. That would be due to lack of context. I can't fix that in the prologue, but I can fix it here:
Clockwork (I haven't decided on his human name anyway) is a human being who managed to break away from reality. Whether he became insane and this whole thing is his maddened mental images, or grew essentially to Godhood, that's up to the reader to decide. The omniverse is big, and outside of individual universes, there's a non-existence space. This is where he lives until the middle of the second book. He has long since decided that a policy of non-interference is best, as he is not omniscient, and doesn't want to mess up a good universe by his control. In the beginning of this book, he enters into the universe, but the laws of the mlp universe require that he let go of things that would change the world enough to corrupt it over time. He also is immensely powerful, bordering on all powerful, so his form takes the most powerful thing that it can find in mlp: An alicorn. He fixes both problems by creating the smaller unicorn form and allowing it to have its memory wiped.
251997 okay, it makes more sense now
252078 Ah, good :) Is there anything specific in that wall of text I should add in for clarities sake?
It's always interesting to read about the journeys of a god. I think I enjoyed the Ellimist and Crayak from Animorphs for that reason. Oh and the Doctor Who crossover is cool too. I hope you end up finishing this one, even if it takes a while.
277599 Thanks for reading :) Indeed, God-like characters have always intrigued me more than the rest. Turns out they're hard to write (who woulda guessed? :P), but extremely rewarding. Glad you like the Doctor Who cross. He won't be here for the rest of the story, but I felt that the most logical person to greet an incoming traveler would be a traveler himself. The next installment will happen on a doctor who forum in the whoniverse, so I thought setting up a solid background here was a good idea too :)
There was a rough start, but I see this story being a fun ride!
I look forward to all the future installments.
323291 Hmm, rough where exactly? I know the introductory line in the prologue is a touch... sudden, and I need to go back through and add more breaks to everything except chapter 3 (Once again, thank you so much for that
), but what else needs tuning? (If you're not too busy that is)
*chuckles* Only slightly awkward, but I think that was fully intended.
You've toned him down quite a bit from your first incarnation, however. I'm also amused at the subtle humor you invoke. Do keep up the good work.
327042 Danke sehr ^_^
Since you read mine, I decided to read yours. One word, amazing. It makes me all happy inside
definitely tracking it.
387782 Thank you :D Glad you enjoyed it! I can't wait to get this next chapter out of the way
I've had to settle a ton of universe construction for it, and it has to be more thorough than usual since I'm trying to create a few books prior to it, and they have to be consistent. Blarg 
One word...underrated, this story is simply gold! What can you do to get the readers attention? idk I assume maybe make the summary and the title more eye candy? Grasps the readers attwntion better?