Dashie... I'm scared...

The mane cast is thrown into a world where fighting and danger is plentiful and they must fight for their survival... Willl they make it?
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Flutterdash is promoted in this, but it's not a huge theme.

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Rainbowshy_Flutterdash

Rainbowshy_Flutterdash #1 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

This is my second shot at a fanfic... with a much different feel than my first one.

Rainbow Dashin

Rainbow Dashin #2 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

It's... Confusing. Who is the first person? How did the ponies get here? Good idea and well written but needs more details.

Rainbowshy_Flutterdash

Rainbowshy_Flutterdash #3 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

250797 "Dash, we need some cover fire. On my mark, switch!" Twilight hollered to me
I thought that made it clear that it was dash as the first person.
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I edited the first paragraph and forgot to leave a sentence in there ANYWHO! I'll go edit it, but it was supposed to say that she had no idea how they got there.

Rainbow Dashin

Rainbow Dashin #4 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

Ah, I didn't see that sentence. My bad :p

Other than the things I mentioned, Me Gusta!

Well, I'm gonna re-read the edit once it's in. Tracking!

Rainbowshy_Flutterdash

Rainbowshy_Flutterdash #5 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

250810
Just fixed it up for ya. Thanks for pointing it out to me!

skylark193

skylark193 #6 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

"After a few very well placed shots from my rifle those few dozen "

I'm just going to real quick ask is this sentence finished or not?

Other than that sentence love this, good start

Rainbowshy_Flutterdash

Rainbowshy_Flutterdash #7 · Feb 23rd, 2012 · · · Prologue ·

250934 Well, ya see... The thing is, I'm an airhead. I went back to edit what I had there, then got sidetracked by something else and... that happened. Fixed it though!