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ToixStory


A crazy winter lover who likes to write, blog, and cartograph about the fun and inconsequential.

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Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash, and Pinkie Pie travel to Las Pegas for a bachelorette party to celebrate their friend Rarity's impending marriage. However, after awakening from a long night of partying, Twilight, Rainbow, and Pinkie find they have no memory of the night before and must race against time and across Equestria's infamous city of sin to find Rarity so the wedding can occur.

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Getting in before somepony comments on the obvious: yes, this was submitted to the write-off, but not in it's finished form. I managed to fudge up the editing process, and turned in a half-formatted and edited story. :facehoof: So, now, I present the finished story for your viewing (dis?)pleasure.

You made a good movie into a better fic

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I don't have time to read it now, but it looks good and I'm definitely coming back

You should write a second one to go with this one

I was waiting for somepony to do this!:yay:

Like I expected, I was not disappointed!

Don't get down on yourself for a few errors, I very much enjoyed the fic!:twilightsmile:

Love it! Best of all, knowing me, there is a tad of TwiPie!

Oh sweet Celestia, this was funny. Much better than the one on EqD.:pinkiehappy:
Would be really cool though if there was a video with the pictures and the "you spin me around song".:rainbowkiss:
(I kinda forgot the name of the song):twilightblush:

soo Doug=Rarity Phil=Rainbow Dash Stu=Twilight Sparkle and Alan=Pinkie pie cool story bro(ITS TRUE!!!!!)

This was preety good, not the 1st time I've read a mlp hangover (hope it wont be the last) I hope to see a "bangkolt" one XD

Overall i enjoyed the story, Nice derpy moment there lol and its clear pinkie was still enjoying the trip despite the situation

Drunk ponies are the best:rainbowlaugh:

Oh wow, thanks for the feedback everypony; you guys are awesome! :rainbowkiss: Now here comes the part where the author responds to every comment all in one, single comment! The madness! :pinkiegasp:

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Glad you approve!

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I totally read your comment in the voice of the guy in your profile picture! XD

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I wasn't planning on doing a sequel, but after the positive feedback a Part 2 might be in order... :raritywink:

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The original had a bit more than a "few" errors, so I'm glad you like this version!

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The TwixPie shipping wasn't in my original plans for the story, but ended up being my favorite part to write. XD

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Glad you liked it, and humbled to be compared to the "other" story on ED! I would definitely love to see a video like that. :coolphoto:

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That's about the size of it, and glad you liked it; that's the first time I've heard "cool story bro" being used in a positive way. XD

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That picture and imagining Sweetie Belle reading this story actually had me laughing out loud!

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It's good to see you got what I was going for with story. Now that you mention it, it would be interesting to do a Part 2 in "Bangkolt" :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for reading!

This was great and surpassed my expectations. I do have to ask though, why no hospital visit?

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Glad you liked it! There initially was a hospital scene in the story (with a small Scrubs cameo thrown in), but I was writing this for the Write-Off, and the scene took up an extra one thousand words, so it ended up being scrapped.
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Well if you still have the draft you could always add it back in now.

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I went back and looked at what I wrote for it, and it didn't really fit well with the rest of the story. I may go back and just redo the scene later when I have time, but for now it will stay the same, for better or worse. :derpytongue2:

Hilarious! PLEASE make Part 2! :pinkiehappy:

Oh my god that was hilarious! I give it a solid five laughing Dashes :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

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Step 1: Go to youtube
Step 2: Search up The Hayngover or The Hayngover Part 2
Step 3: Watch
Step 4: Re-read this story
Step 5: Profit

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you know, you COULD add it as a deleted scene type thing. Remember the extra chapter in Fallout: Equestria? (Anypony else besides toxi reading this, GO READ
FALLOUT: EQUESTRIA!!) You could release it like that?

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Glad you liked it! This story hasn't gotten much attention in a while, so it was kind of nice to see someone still reads it. :pinkiehappy: I definitely agree on the fact that it could have been funnier, though; this isn't exactly my best work. :twilightsheepish: Anyway, thanks for reading!

HAHAHA I am your 1,800th total viewer :pinkiecrazy:

I award this honor to my country and heritage :moustache:!

Really awesome story! :twilightsmile: Are you going to do any others like this? If you are may I suggest that you do 'Horrible Bosses'

“Why doesn’t the weather team just clear it up?” Rainbow Dash asked. The wealthy pony shrugged.

“Maybe they’re out of town.”

oh the irony

That was pretty awesome.

When Pinkie Pie beat up those Ponies for threatening "her" foal I imagined the Howie scream, Wilhelm Scream and strangely enough Stewie beating up Brian for not giving him his money.:rainbowlaugh:

Oh my gosh. I can't tell you how amazing you are and this is! Made my night!:pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh:

Well i would love to see them pictures they would be hilarious.

I've seen alcoholics write better than you. Ironic, given the chosen story.

and hence i vowed if i ever got sent to equestria i would stay out of las pegas!! :rainbowderp:

hahaha this was great fun :rainbowwild: a good read

2337046 way to be dick bud seriously. awesome critique. I especially loved the part where you explained the parts you didn't like, therefore giving the author something to improve on. whats that? you didn't do that. In that case your just an asshole then.

Great comedy! There are few fics that made me laugh my ass of.
Liked it!

This is probably what a perfect fusion fic should be like. Most of the characters filled in a role from the movie the Hangover but they were still themselves and their situations remained mostly the same as in the show. I liked the reference to the Rainbow Factory song, and of course Rainbow Dash wouldn't like it. :rainbowderp: And Derpy's appearance at the end! :derpytongue2: I wish though that this was longer and more detailed though. Either way, it was still great. :pinkiehappy:

That was epic. I really liked how it tied into the movie but it wasn't just a complete rewrite. You added your own spin to the story and fit the ponies in perfectly. great job :ajsmug:

For, the love of Celestia write the SECOND ONE NOW:flutterrage:, or whenever you feel like it.

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