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Luna is the princess of the night. She rules next to the solar princess, her sister Celestia. With her by her side, Luna feels her duties are a true pleasure. However, something is missing in the blue alicorn's life. Is it power? Safety?
...Love?

Feeling tension every day, princess Luna is keeping a deep secret. And the closest she can get to ease her craving is to see him. One special stallion that always leaves an impact on her. A grown unicorn in an outfit suiting his name.
Will the princess of the night find what she's looking for?

Disclaimer
-This is a fanfic. With that in mind, I kindly ask you not to criticize the fact that one part of an official pairing is absent. I also have no grudges against the official pairing.
-The content rating is currently fully SFW. As the story progresses, it will lead up to mature content. When that is added later on, the rating tag will be changed, and this point in the disclaimer edited or removed.
-Current comments will not be removed, but from now on I kindly ask you to give me your suggestions for edits in PMs rather than comments, just to prevent possibly ruining other people's wish to read the story.
-The cover art is by SweetCandy70

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 23 )

Dammit!

I'm watching you(r story). Because I really wanna see more.

Like the concept, no cheating involved. Why not add the AU tag just to stop the complaints before they start.

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Thanks for your appreciation :ajsmug: And you're right, might as well add the tag. Though it is fairly self-explanatory that on a full-pony page non-AU means Equestria, people might think of Equestria itself as an AU. Tag added :pinkiesmile:

You have my attention now don't buck this up!!!!!!!! :pinkiecrazy:

Huh.

I would've thought that Shining's marriage would have made this ship much more dynamic and interesting, but alas, 'twas not to be.

Don't get me wrong; I'm completely okay with that, but I almost feel cheated with the AU tag. I would love to see a fic where Shining and Cadence love each other, but feel that things aren't working out the way they'd always dreamed of.

But with that said, that's a little depressing for bubbly shipping such as this. :twilightsmile:

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In this story, I wanted to try shipping my favourite stallion and fav. princess, which seems to have been a success.
Now, I didn't want people to start complaining about him cheating on Cadence. Therefore I decided to let Cadence be Twilight's foalsitter, and not much more.

Still, I appreciate your good comment and that you appreciate my writing :) It is people like you that help me continue my work

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Don't worry, i'll make sure he doesn't.
And if he does, you shall be my partner in crime :pinkiecrazy:

Interesting yet rushed. :ajbemused:

But! :trollestia:

With a decent backstory containing the details of Luna's love for Shining, it may just earn you a thumb up and a fav :twilightsmile:

Edit- Also make sure to space out each paragraph. Meshing them together will just put everyone off trying to read it.

3168769 Thanks for your opinion :twilightsmile: I will take your suggestion in account for chapter 3

Comment posted by Mercury Zero deleted Sep 7th, 2013

Yes! Luna and Shining!!! Love it!

And off for more Love from the Princess of the Night. Shining Armor, you lucky stallion.

3582554 I take it you are enjoying the new segment? :twilightsmile:

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Well, I have been thinking of this pair-up, and plan to use such in a future project.

I found some things you may want to edit.

"Sweetie Belle tilted her head. "The spa?" she asked. "You're inviting me to the spa?"

"Sweetie Belle gave off a low sigh and smiled. "I guess you're right," she nodded.

Those quotation marks should be deleted.

The two unicorns followed the light cerulean mare to the other side of the spa, where a faintly smoking bath was waiting for them.

I'm pretty sure a more fitting word would be "steaming" rather than "smoking".

"They said it is alright," Aloe said and nodded friendly. The pony she was adressing smiled and looked at Rarity. >The alabaster mare's jaw dropped as she saw who the other customer was.

The word should be "addressing" and the > should be deleted.

4010978 I appreciate your keen eye.

>Quotation mark error: I shall fix this after this reply is posted
>Steaming/smoking: Although your point is valid, I consulted my Norwegian teacher who is also a fairly good selling author, and he stated that smoking is a better word in that case. And before you comment the 'Norwegian' part, he writes all his books in English.
>Address/adress: Words are spelled almost the same in some cases, so this one slipped through
>The delete part: Thanks again. I write on my phone and use Google Drive to copy to this document. I use the > symbol to mark paragraphs, and this one slipped through the system. Also, this one must have been a misclick caused by the touch screen I hate

I'm not sure that the Sweetie/Rarity scene was the best idea if this is a plot line that isn't going anywhere. Luna could just as easily have met them at the spa with just a brief explanation as to what they were up to. Then again, it wasn't exactly very long, so it really may not be an issue.

No flies on Celestia there at the end, but I hope she isn't too hard on Luna (or Shining) over this. Hopefully this'll just be a warning to be careful since her sister is so far removed from modern relationships.

Wow. Did Twilight tell Celestia, or did she figure it out. Well, this story seems good. I can't wait for the next chapter.

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