When accepting dating advice from a friend, make sure said friend isn't an ancient god of chaos and mischief. Fluttershy and Applejack made that mistake. Now, they have to find a way to survive alone, stranded in another world, as they work together to solve the puzzles and conquer the challenges keeping them from their home.
Title may change if I can figure out something better. Titles have never been my strong suit.
EDIT: on hiatus. I may even restructure this and cut out everything after the first chapter, make it a oneshot...I'm kind of rethinking this one, what can I say?
Chapters (4)
Liking this so far. Only thing I suggest is tone down the accent.
3024184 I'll take that under advisement for future chapters. Maybe edit the first one later down the road. Thanks for the comment!
This has great potential, I am already engaged fully, the characters are practically perfect, although I admit the crush that BM has on Rainbow took me by surprise
. Great start, can't wait to see how Discord works his way into the story more
3052120 well, thanks for the comment and favorite! unfortunately it recently came to my attention that tales of xillia has finally reached american stores. With a tales game in my ps3, you may have to wait to see more, but production's only slowed, not halted.
Another great addition dude, loving the story! And I think that it is a good idea to have Discord appear only when he feels he should check up on them or if there is a reason for it and not frequently. Can't wait to see what else you add to the island and adventure, keep it up man
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3116098 glad you liked it! after your first comment I was afraid you might've been disappointed. in retrospect, that seems silly, because I have no idea who you are. on the other hand, I like to try to make my stuff fun to read. I guess I was worried you wouldn't have fun reading it anymore.
I see that someone watches PSBideachannel, and in essence the D&D episode. But anyway, good story. Like where it's going, though a few things had some odd wording such as
which I think could of done with a comma in the middle, such as "The trip that felt like it took hours before, was only about twenty minutes on the way back." But anyway, good dialogue, especially where they are with no one around them.
So looking forward to another installment, don't give up
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3187196 I've never heard of PBSideachannel. I'm just a huge nerd. I don't even play D&D, I've just read webcomics about it.
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This is what I be talking about here -----> This. The reference is about half way through.
At least it is finally getting a bit interesting. All the talking about being with each other's company all the time was starting to sound bland.
Yes another update
Glad to see an adventure forming, the whole island being one big puzzle left for you to shape in anyway you want makes this such an interesting read for me, on top of that the relationship that is being formed from the experiences that are served for them top it off. Keep it up man, this is a great read. 
I do have a question though, throughout this story will there be other characters as in other ponies, griffins (characters with the ability to speak) that make an appearance, maybe a Discord creation who attempts to mislead them or something along the lines, honestly though even if you don't, the story isn't effected because even if you chose not to add anyone else then in a way it would increase the sense of complete isolation from society and friendly life, and on the flip side if you do choose to add some ocs or characters then it may enhance the plot by adding more obstacles .... I'm rambling 
Ok I'm done, great work, don't feel the need to rush out chapters, quality over quantity and all that 
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3209181 yeah, that's some rambling. but I don't mind. if I made something that makes people ramble in a good way...well, then I'm doing something right. :)
Firstly:
3187196 I'm sorry, I know this is a fairly old comment to reply to, and a total gramar-nazi move to bring it up at all, but that is not the correct place to put a comma. The sentence as it stands is grammatically correct, if a little awkwardly phrased. If instead it was written...
...then that would be a way to use commas to help it flow better.
Again, sorry for dredging that up. Utterly irrelevant to anything but my own grammar-related neuroses.
Now, about the story! I am conflicted about this story, and this conflict has been for several different reasons from the moment I saw it added to the Appleshy group folder.
Conflict number one arose before I ever actually read any of it, simply looking at the character tags and description and deciding whether I wanted to read it at all. See, I love me some Appleshy. It's a very, very underrated ship that has tons of unexplored potential. But on the other hand, unlike much of the fandom, I can't stand Discord. Too overpowered, too smug and self assured... he just pushes virtually all of my, 'I do not like this character' buttons. So from the get-go, this was a battle for whether or not some nice Appleshy adventure-shipping would be worth putting up with the lord of chaos.
Well, I'm here, so you can guess which side won there. Hooray for the power of love and all.
Second conflict was the characterizations. It's frustrating, because this story will have a character say one line that is so spot-on, beautifully in-character for them that I can close my eyes and hear the voice actors delivering its oozy goodness to my eardrums. And then in the very next breath, the same character will say or do something that makes me blink, tilt my head, and remember that I'm reading a fan-fiction. It's not precisely that this story suffers from poor characterization, just that... well, it occasionally hits the mark very well, and it makes the average-to-mediocre spots look bad.
Third conflict is the pacing. On one hand, the romance seems to set in awful darned fast. I have trouble taking their feelings for one another as credible when they develop them literally overnight. But on the other hand, that flaw in the pacing is at least a little bit forgivable when you consider that it's really more part of the setup before the actual story begins. This story isn't really about Applejack and Fluttershy falling in love, it's about them proving their love, and in a sea of cookie-cutter ship-fics that consider the job done once the first kiss has happened, that's a refreshing angle to take.
There are some scenes and moments in this fic that I genuinely, unambiguously enjoyed. The accusations Applejack's double threw at her really resonated, and it felt like a powerful, if a little too quickly-resolved, moment of character growth. Discord's line about "Will the ship float?" got a chuckle out of me, and it's no small feat getting me to laugh at something Discord does.
There's some neat, shiny bits to this story that make me want to love it. There's also flaws and rough patches that make me want to dislike it. The end result is that it's leaving me conflicted.
I'll be reading any updates you come up with, at any rate.